There does appear to be an inconsistency. Near the start, it says Pound never thought of Scootaloo in a sexual way before, but a little later Scoot spots a picture of herself that Pound remarks to himself as being one of his visual aids.
Other than that, pretty good but I prefered the wincest chapter. Just a personal preference.
OMG That link in the note... You put that there to show us how terrible you could have made this didn't you?
Not bad, although perhaps not upto the high bar your previous chapters set for yourself, but certainly a worthy addition. I must say, the ending did make me wish you'd continued with a nice shower rutting though.
Besides the... rapey... vibe the forced drinking gave off, particularly because it was to allow his inhibitions to lower enough for Scootaloo to take advantage of a minor... It was a very good chapter.
But I still found that rather unsettling.
YES, it was a small amount. YES, Pound was, in fact, a 16 year old male and thus wasn't likely to have inhibitions towards a fucking star athlete but... I mean, come on, it's established that he is, in fact, a virgin, she's she's just drunkenly stole his virginity.
That's... something he might regret in a few years. Fuck, forget years, in a few weeks.
I almost just want a continuation of this chapter... it was just getting good
The older pegasus frowned and sighed; most colts Pound’s age would have been would have been absolutely ecstatic to share drinks with a hot, young mare like her. “Sheesh, what’s up with you, lead-hooves? Am I not sexy enough for you or something?” Scootaloo asked with a playful pout.
“What’s the worst that could happen?” the mare asked, slapping the cork clean from the bottle, where it would land in some random location in the room.
Curious, Pound turned his undivided attention to the object in Scootaloo’s hooves, his eyes growing wide as they passed over it. ‘Stalliongrad’s Finest’ the label read in regal, bold gold letters, though even more outstanding than the brand name was the picture of a scowling-faced, blank-flanked filly elbow dropping the light and life out of a rather large grizzly bear. Stamped neatly on the beaten bear’s ass, in big red letters was a 55.5% alcohol content warning and a disclaimer stating that the beverage was not for use by minors or anyone with a liver not composed of kevlar. Intimidating stuff.
Dude, there was nothing subpar about this chapter. This whole ride has been amazing.
This is my sexual greed in a nutshell. I prefer my women a little bit older and sporty as possible.
There does appear to be an inconsistency. Near the start, it says Pound never thought of Scootaloo in a sexual way before, but a little later Scoot spots a picture of herself that Pound remarks to himself as being one of his visual aids.
Other than that, pretty good but I prefered the wincest chapter. Just a personal preference.
i lovers it.
thank you!
you had me in stitches with that line
*starts to slowly clap*
*stands, clapping increasing pace*
Loved this one, dusting off or not bravo!
Well, I'm certantly looking forward to the last chapter.
OMG That link in the note... You put that there to show us how terrible you could have made this didn't you?
Not bad, although perhaps not upto the high bar your previous chapters set for yourself, but certainly a worthy addition. I must say, the ending did make me wish you'd continued with a nice shower rutting though.
I would have actually liked to see him filling scootaloo's cunt with his own special cake batter, but guess cant have everything
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I agree, the lack of a creampie is the only thing bad about this chapter.
Hmm. I now know the best way to describe how I like my hash browns.
Why, yes. That's the primary thing I took from this chapter. Why do you ask?
Oh dear god was this a hilarious chapter. And seriously I lost it on the "stallion's creampuff" line. My only complaint is that I want more.
... admittedly that isn't a complaint but whatever.
Uh... good chapter. Drunk Scootaloo is awesome. Pound isn't some stallion's creampuff. Good night.
Besides the... rapey... vibe the forced drinking gave off, particularly because it was to allow his inhibitions to lower enough for Scootaloo to take advantage of a minor... It was a very good chapter.
But I still found that rather unsettling.
YES, it was a small amount. YES, Pound was, in fact, a 16 year old male and thus wasn't likely to have inhibitions towards a fucking star athlete but... I mean, come on, it's established that he is, in fact, a virgin, she's she's just drunkenly stole his virginity.
That's... something he might regret in a few years. Fuck, forget years, in a few weeks.
On the one hand, Roy Kelly is awesome. On the other hand, what the hell is he reading and why has it not been burned?
Good chapter though. Didn't strike me as lacking in quality.
This was the single most awesome thing I have ever read EVER
actually this one is my favourite
So many levels of hot and funny here. Love you Scoots!
My name is Pinkamena, and I approve of this story.
Don't give up on this Antagonist!
This is a story every parent should read to their kids!
Ha ha,
This was a fun bit of tail.
Do you think Roy Kelly would do a reading of this fic?
I almost just want a continuation of this chapter... it was just getting good
>Pound’s age would have been would have been
also, Ain't nobody's cream puff!
you should continue this chapter into its own story
Make more please
4362576 not just this chapter, the 2nd one too would be interesting too see that baby.
Damnit. She fucked with Murphy's law.
Damn. She got guts