“Oh look, more words!”

Update-

For six months, I have been slowing modifying the story–from revamping dialogue, to re-writing events and their details.

This has proved to be a disaster for the human race meant that you all have had to re-read the story from the beginning at least three times after each revision. This must suck ass for you... but in this 4th time, I know that this story will not sink into another revisionist swamp afterwards... at least for the first 7 chapters.

There will be one more more wind of change, with only two major changes in what’s posted so far; one being how the squad manages to find a distance to scale on the map. Using a grenade launcher is just too stupid to work, even for this tale. The rest of this edit round should be grammatically significant only... and making the dialogue less awkward.

Although I’m not exactly sure why I’m so focused with this, “cringe control.” The lot of mf’s on here write like they’re scripting a Ubisoft game-play presentation–I’m not going against linguistic titans.

So, by the end of this summer, I should have both this edit wave done, and Ch. 8 out soon after.

Also, any thoughts about adding... illustrations?