In Need of Editors!! · 1:50am Aug 16th, 2017
I've finally completed the first chapter of my next story. Now I need editors. Anyone willing to help me out is greatly appreciated.
Rose is the New Noir
It started in Manehatten. Chances are pretty good it'll end there, too. Like a snake eating its own tail.
That night saw so many things happen. Nothing could escape Luna's eye... nothing except something pink, something with sticky hooves. She slipped in and out of the mansion undetected, not even by Luna herself, taking with her a crime boss's most beloved possession. This dame was a ghost.
Well, the Choir Boys aren't experts at catching ghosts, but they're good at catching thieves. They're also good at catching their former mob boss's attention. When he summons his ex-enforcers to hop onto her trail, their job takes them to a quaint little burg. Ponyville. Maybe you've heard of it. Little place, outta the way. Not much to talk about.
But she disappeared here.
Le Rose disappeared here.
That's a nice description, or like an intro to your story. I like it very much. Mysterious and awesome. If I would have known grammar well I would have helped you, but my english sucks :p. It's my second language, so... Sorry. Good luck with your story! :D