Review #5 - Tantabus, Mk. II , Aunthood Issues, On the Natural Rise and Fall of Celestial Bodies

Today I have three more reviews, they are:

Tantabus, Mk II by Rambling Writer
Aunthood Issues by Rambling Writer
On the Natural Rise and Fall of Celestial Bodies by Georg

Tantabus, Mk II by Rambling Writer
(Comedy, Drama, Random, Slice of Life)
Trying to patrol the dreams of every pony in Equestria can be stressful. To ease her burden, Luna retools the Tantabus to turn nightmares into good dreams instead of vice versa. Aware of her mistakes from last time, she tests it out thoroughly, making sure there are no unexpected behaviors. And as far as she can tell, there are none. Except that, it's started calling her "Mom". Faced with the prospect of possibly creating life, Luna seeks out Twilight's advice and assistance. With a little luck, they can get this all sorted out before the sun rises.

Review
Luna comes to Twilight to discover whether the Tantabus Mk II is safe to let out into the dreams of others after it becomes self-aware and calls Luna "mom." After they put it through several tests, they decide it is safe to be on its own.

This story has excellent pacing in all regards. It has little-to-no errors in each of it's chapters. And it feels very very planned out, however, it has little to no plot. All of it's tags seem to fit as well.

Score: 8.5/10 Recommendation: Recommended

Personal Thoughts: A very good story, it just doesn't have much plot. And what plot it does have, is rather predictable.

Aunthood Issues by Rambling Writer
(Comedy, Drama, Slice of Life)
This is a sequel to Tantabus, Mk. II
The new and improved Tantabus has behaved itself thus far, but Luna has delayed telling Celestia about it. Until one night when it jumps into Celestia's dreams to say hi and inadvertently reveals itself. Luna must now introduce Celestia to her little bundle of self-aware psychic dream energy sooner than she imagined.

Review
The Tantabus, Mk II goes into Celestia's dream and meets her. Luna then has to introduce the Tantabus further in one of Celestia's dreams. Celestia accepts the Tantabus.

This one has a slight lack of pacing in it. There is a lot of filler, and it takes awhile to actually get to the point. Though there are very few errors in the text. This one seems mostly planned out, and the filler in it was made up while being written versus before the story was started. And the tags on if seems to fit quite well.

Score 7.5/10 Recommendation: Recommended if you read Tantabus, Mk. II .

Personal Thoughts: This one is not as good as the previous, but still good nonetheless.

On the Natural Rise and Fall of Celestial Bodies by Georg
Princess Cadence and Princess Twilight Sparkle are called to Canterlot to take over two very important responsibilities: The Sun and the Moon. Oh, and just one additional thing.

Review
Cadence and Twilight get called to Canterlot to take over the Sun and Moon after Celestia and Luna leave. Turns out it was just a prank so Luna and Celestia could have a vacation. In response, Cadence and Twilight think up some pretty good pranks to do to them, including glue, paint, and wings.

This story has simply wonderful pacing, which helps out a lot. Unfortunately, it seems to have punctuation, "not quite real errors, but could be a lot better," in the sentences with dialogue, which is quite bothersome. However, it is a very planned out story with an amazing ending. Furthermore, all of it's tag's fit it nicely.

Score: 6/10 Recommendation: Worth reading if you can look past the punctuation mishaps.

Personal Thoughts: Very nice story, just a lot of punctuation possibilities which would make it better.