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I'm currently still working on Chapter 2 of "What is a Name?". I don't have an estimated day of release yet, so be patient.

To all of you who enjoyed the first chapter, I ask of you: What about it did you like most? What could have been better? This includes plot, sentence structure, wording, elements of writing, etc.

My goal is to create something that will appeal to the maximum number of people it can, but it's hard to go by story comments alone. I'd love to hear your opinions. Feel free to criticize me, I can take it.

-Key Tapper

P.S. Thank you all so much for 100 watches! Seriously, I never imagined I would reach that number so fast, so all I can say is thanks!

Comments

[Scarlet Lightning]

I think my input might be a bit biast, but I think the most apeeling thing about the story is the fact that Pinkamina is potrayed as just a normal, slightly confused kid.

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~ I suggest Pinkamena should have a confused reaction and end up befriending them towards the end of the chapter. Her friends tell her how she used to be and they try to befriend her and make it emotional. I could help you with editting if you like. Do a rough prewrite and I'll see what I can do~

I would love to help you write this story, the concept and style remind me of my own...

Please..? ahah just kidding, it's your choice.

[Vhett]

No thank you. For writing such a fantastic story, I look forward to reading more of your work.

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What I really liked was how you presented Pinkamena's POV and also how you presented her behavior.