Episode 1, Reloaded · 4:30am Jul 8th, 2012
Alright, folks, I went back and edited Episode 1 as per the recommendations from the EQD pre-reader. I'd really appreciate another set of scrutinizing eyes on it before I resubmit, so if you or somebody you know is a grammar/punctuation stickler who wouldn't mind reading a little ditty about ponies and pawn shops then have at it and give me the report. The biggest change I made here was cutting down and rewriting the introduction, plus I revamped about half of the exposition in the beginning. Instead of just the having the guys stand around and talk about their business to the camera, I turned it into a conversation between Cash, Old Money and Big Hoss. I even got Cash talking a little about the kind of trouble Big Hoss would get into when he was younger. Enjoy!
