Reworked the prologue of Hair Trigger+sneak peak of chapter one · 7:13pm Jul 24th, 2014
Okay everyone, officially reworked some of the problem areas of the prologue of Fallout: Hair Trigger, hope it reads a bit better and makes a bit more sense than before. Anyway, now to focus on finishing chapter one then move to rewriting the next chapter of Cloudfall Paintball Tournament... and to help tide everyone over, here's a sneak peak of chapter one of Hair Trigger
All I could see was darkness, but I was vaguely aware of a faint murmuring that seemed to echo from every direction yet at the same time seemed to come from no where, am I dead? I thought, but I immediately disregarded the notion. I didn't believe that there was anything waiting for you after you died, and honestly I still don't. I just thought that you cease to exist upon death, your body and the actions that people remember you did being the only evidence you were ever there, so I concluded that I couldn't be dead. I also felt a dull throbbing pain in the back of my skull, providing further evidence that I wasn't dead.
The murmuring raised in volume a few decibels, allowing me to distinguish bits and pieces of what was being said.
"A being of flesh and steel- .... -Metal and bone..."
"Technology and biology as one- … -Zeranthūl Praetorian- … -possible outcomes unknowable-"
"-emotions conflicted- ... -much confusion in his mind-"
"Brilliant mind- ... -mental stability questionable at best-"
"...Scythiant-...-Deruthiant té Rūne- ... -No other option left. Murtharn. We have already committed to this path, he will either save us or finish what was started three years prior-... -Great Mother preserve us should we fail."
Now, at the time I brushed it off as an auditory halucination brought on by sensory deprivation as I couldn't really feel anything aside from the throbbing in my head, but had I known what I do now I wouldn't have done so; either way I knew I was only catching snippets of the conversation.
"Your will be done my Queen... We have managed to integrate several Praetorian and Drones into the population centers near the Everfree and we await your orders."
The voices lowered back to a dull murmur and I wasn't able to discern anything more of what was said.
