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Rinnaul


I do nothing of merit. On occasion, I give the impression of being creative, but this is a deception. I am merely derivative in clever ways.

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  • 210 weeks
    Dropping in to try and find some art

    So my hard drive bricked back in the fall, and I finally replaced my computer with the stimulus money. But I don't really have a good way to try and recover the stuff that was on there, so that sucks.

    But, I was hoping for some help in finding one particular bit of pony art that I haven't been able to dig up again since then.

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  • 236 weeks
    a brief summary of my life the past few months

    June 17: I wreck my car.
    July 5: My cousin I grew up with dies after an extended illness.
    July 26: Neighbors threaten to sue us over payment for repairs they did on a shared driveway, wind up paying them over $1,000.
    August 15: Dropped my phone and busted the screen.

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  • 243 weeks
    Welp, that's just... everything fucked, I guess

    So back around June 20, I wrecked my car.

    Then back on August 28, the tires on my wife's car got torn up hitting something on the road, and we wound up needing all new tires.

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  • 244 weeks
    I don't think my cat likes my work

    So it's been a struggle to write anything, for various reasons, but I *was* trying to get back onto Legacy Ch 4 not long ago.

    Then today I was sitting at the table and started hearing faint tearing noises from behind me. I turned around and discovered that somehow my rough draft had wound up on the floor and the cat had done this:

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  • 262 weeks
    Random Encounter

    This was a fun moment. Choppy cause I had to remove a bunch of game speech commands and the usual bit of racist shit-talking.

    Also this was before I found out Scribbler did another reading of my stuff. I would have probably said that instead of RCL.

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May
25th
2014

Fic Reviews III · 5:40am May 25th, 2014

Haven’t done one of these in a while. Oh well, here’s all the things I was reading at work and a few other stray fics aside from those.


Scootaloo Dies a Bunch
by alexmagnet

This started out as a pretty good parody of Scootabuse stories, and for a while, it remained pretty creative in all of the different ways Scootaloo dies. But about a month in, the story was really stretching for some of its gags, and by now, two months after it was first published, it’s more about total randomness than actually maintaining that running gag.


TwiChat
by GeodesicDragon

A pretty simple one-shot gag fic with a pretty simple one-note gag. It’s funny enough, though not my type of humor, and honestly disappointed me a bit. I was more interested in the chemistry developing between Twilight and Silver Stomp, but that’s kind of the point—to get you invested and then drop the reveal on you. Appropriate, considering the subject matter.


Love Bunny
by Twinkletail

A Cadance/Angel Bunny crack ship fic? Blame Tidal, he started it.

Anyway, the fic does as good a job justifying the crack ship as could be expected, but unfortunately, might play the entire thing a bit too seriously. Cadance fretting over the consequences came across as an honest concern most of the time, and it ended on a half-hearted “we’ll work this out” conversation rather than what I’d honestly expected—Shining Armor laughing his ass off at what his wife has gotten herself into.


Moments for Spike
by Rocinante

Spike discovers that Twilight is actually his mother, and he’s a few years younger than he’d been lead to believe. This isn’t a scenario I can honestly buy happening within canon, but Rocinante does make it convincing and believable when taken by itself. While it doesn’t exactly mesh well with their prior relationship on the show, the emotions play out right, and it makes for a good scene.


Fluttershy’s Sick Day
by Zero_Starlight

A short and rather sweet humanOCxFluttershy fic. It’s not the most well-written out there, but it’s hardly an example of the type of stories that make human/Mane Six ships generally questioned if not outright hated. There’s not really anything to dislike here (unless you happen to seriously dislike the concept), but there’s not really anything that merits attention, either.


Prey
by thejboy88

Here’s one that was in my Read Later for ages. Coco Pommel is being hunted by a changeling. This is a really solid Dark story, and the predatory tone works very well—not just in the literal sense of a predatory animal (as the changeling is), but also in giving the impression that he’s a sexual predator. And I know that could also be taken literally, but you know what I mean.


Medical Emergency (3/30/2015 — Story Deleted)
by RainbowBob

Twilight/Redheart clop, driven by irresponsible magic use on Twilight’s part, as many problems are. I have no problems with this one, beyond Redheart being kind of a bitch (and I know people in nursing and know it can do that to you) and apparently nopony in town actually knowing Twilight (but the show does that, too).

Also it’s anthro, so if you’re one of those people who consider that an abomination against all that is good, you might pass this up. Or not, since it’s still a good fic.


Celestia’s Loss
by thejboy88

An exploration of one of the standard difficulties of living forever—outliving everyone else. Celestia and Luna discuss past loves, bring up bittersweet memories, and generally have a cute sisterly moment. The writing can be very telly, and the third-person omniscient viewpoint keeps up from really connecting with either of the sisters, but beyond those points it’s still a decent fic.


Princess Celestia Bursts Into Flames
by GemstoneTheUnicorn

Not a bad story, per se. After all, I found it in the Popular Box. But it’s extremely random, far too much so for my tastes. If randomness, absurdity, and “Lesson Zero”-style Twilight breakdowns are good for you, it merits a look.


To Be a Princess
by SHL

The good: a rarity in that it’s a romance story where things don’t necessarily work out perfectly, and all of the characters’ emotions play well. The bad: Twilestia shipping is wrapped up in a Momlestia package and that’s a bit creepy. It doesn’t actually portray Celestia as Twilight’s mother, but they definitely have that sort of relationship. And Celestia wants to make it a romantic and sexual one. If you can get over that part, the rest of it is pretty good.


Morning Gone Wrong
by DGGames

A stallion awakes to discover he is now a mare. Not a bad plot, particularly when the victim is Shining Armor, because for some reason I think it’s funny when he suffers. I don’t even hate him or anything—I just love him being the buttmonkey of the story. Unfortunately, the story is plagued by terrible pacing. The humor is never really given the time to play out, and scenes which could have easily lasted a thousand words on their own are done in a paragraph or two. There’s a good example right off the bat—Cadance finds out in the sixth paragraph.

Add that it’s very telly, has a drifting POV, and everypony is generally out of character (I can’t accept Cadance immediately assuming Shining is cheating on her, nor calling anypony a slut), and you have a great concept with a failed execution.


I was going to do more, but we’ve gone long enough without one of these already.

Also I’m still working on TBTK Chapter 3. I’m just not very happy with how it’s turning out, but I want to get past it and get on board the roller coaster that will be chapters 5 through 12.

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Comments ( 3 )

Love Bunny!! ::rainbowlaugh:

I still can't believe I asked for that. So awesome!

A pretty simple one-shot gag fic with a pretty simple one-note gag. It’s funny enough, though not my type of humor, and honestly disappointed me a bit.

I wrote the thing, and even I'm disappointed with it. :rainbowlaugh:

Thanks for this — but if you review one of my stories again, I'd appreciate a PM informing me about it. :twilightsmile:

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I can do that, but I've had others suggest to me that I post these reviews (or notice of them) in the comments of the fics in question as well as my blog, and that might serve much the same purpose. If you'd still prefer a PM, though, I wouldn't mind. But these random reviews just come from whatever I grab out of my RIL, so who knows when I'll do something of yours again.

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