Changeling: Revised! · 10:17pm May 1st, 2014
Heyo!
So as some of you are probably aware, I cancelled and dropped the Changeling sequal I had been working on some time last year, but I also told you that I was planning on revising the original Changeling story. Welp, the first chapter of this revision is now finished. I will be uploading the whole revised story in one go after I have finished all chapters, but for now you can find the revised first chapter here, and if you want a side-by-side comparison of the old and the new, you can find the ye olde chapter 1 here.
Now, you're probably wondering: "What changes will you be making?" "Are you making us re-read this entire drivel just for some extra scenes?" "ALICORN AURA?! RUINED FOREVER!!!!!!!!! So hyped for S4 though."
Well, rest assured, the story will remain unchanged as far as plot goes. The changes made will be largely grammatical and spelling fixes. It will essentially be a tidying up, fixing mistakes I left in on the first run and tweaking bits here and there so that the words flow better and make more sense. Thing is, I've grown a lot as a writer since I wrote Changeling and now I wish to use my new-found experience to make better what is one of my personal favourite fictions that I have ever written.
Other changes you may find are:
*Re-arranged dialogue, if I feel that the way it was structered originally is clusmy or awkwardly written. The dialogue will essenitally stay the same, though. Same meaning, same plot progession, simply styled differently.
*Added dialogue, if I feel I didn't flesh a certain part out enough or it's simply hard to follow as it was. Again, the plot will remain the same and it won't be massive changes. An example of this is in the first chapter's revised version near the beginning. Odysseus asks Knight how he is and Knight responds that he is fine. Odysseus then passes Knight and says: "That's good. Please continue to protect my sister as you have been." I didn't feel that this scene worked well as it was.
I felt the interaction was a little weak, so I added a line by Knight saying: "Though I am unworthy, thank you for your concern." Odysseus then responds by telling Knight that he values him as somepony who portects Aura with his life, before asking him to continue protecting her. As you can see, the plot remains unchanged, everything proceeds as it did in the original, but it fleshed out the scene a little (in my opinion), which I feel is especially important at the start of a story, when we're just meeting these characters for the first time.
*Plothole fixes - I've skimmed over Changeling swiftly and as far as I can tell, there aren't any, but a more thorough read may reveal some, or perhaps scenes that are confusing and hard to grasp. If I find any of these, I may take steps to add a little more so that these are cleared up, but as with all changes, the plot will remain unchanged.
*... One or two extra scenes that I was going to include as flashbacks in the sequal... OKAY, so there WILL be some extra scenes that were not in the original version (MAY! Still haven't decided for sure.) These scenes revolve around Precision Perfect. Remember how he sorta disappeared after Shining Armor went to pursue Trixie? Well, he actually went off to check up on Cadance and ran into Mystic at that time. There was also another scene in the last chapter I cut out and decided to move to the sequal where he is talking to Celestita. Both of these scenes were going to be flashbacks in the sequal as I intended to actually use Precision then, but as the sequeal is no more, I am considering adding those scenes (and ONLY those scenes. Precision won't suddenly jump into the final battle with everyone) just for completion sake. I mean, I introduced him, and I focussed at least SOME attention on him, so I figure the least I can do is show what he was up to, right?
Anywhom, that's about it. I hope you all enjoy the revised version of this fic. Lemme know in the comments what you think of the revisions I've made so far and thank you for being such awesome peoples and enjoying this fic that I loved working on some one to two years ago :)
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[I have yet to read it, but I look forward to it.]
GGRRrr
[I have also enjoyed your Twixie Love Story. It was fantastic.]
Revision? Yes!