Open Call For Critiques and Complaints · 5:49am Apr 3rd, 2014
Lately I've gotten a few of my readers offering their critiques and complaints on different parts of the story in an effort to help me fix things, learn, and make the story better. So... Y'know. Let's have it.
If you have an issue with the story, please... Send me a private message. (Seriously do not just comment here. I want these to be on file privately so that I can filter and forward them where they need to go.)
At this point, I'm already rewriting several chapters, and I'm going to have to reread the story in its entirety to get myself back to the proper point of writing where I was before. I'm the first to admit I've lost a lot of confidence in my writing ability by how long these revisions have taken and by how much I look at it and see just how terrible a writer I was initially.
So I'm asking now. If you have complaints, critiques, etc... Please send me a private message. Bullet points are preferred, and please don't just go 'this sucks' but actually give me some goddamn feedback on it. Why does it suck. How should I fix it. I need specifics, not blunt "I didn't like this." because it is impossible to please everyone all the time. What one person doesn't like, another might love. Do be aware that any suggestions you have will drastically affect later chapters, so the best thing... If you're going to point out something that's wrong, try to think up a way on how to keep it the same in the end, but give it a more logical reason for existing in the first place.
Eg: Someone recently brought up Hidden surviving a grenade whilst a Steel Ranger is killed by the very same shortly afterward. Well, two things: 1: Grenades aren't my strong suit (and heroes have a certain amount of plot armor; without Hidden the story ends), and well... Incendiary grenade, she survived because it wasn't the same shockwave producing concussion grenade... The Steel Ranger met his demise due to being cooked alive inside his armor.
You can see there, the story doesn't change because the outcome is the same, but this gives a hopefully plausable reason for how it happened.
Oddly enough you've misspelled plausible. Just saying. :P
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