Yes, I've completed the final edits for Blueblood's Ascension Part III; or, Even Alicorns Have Dreams. I was extra excited for this story at the beginning, so I've decided to be extra picky now that it's come to its end. I did my best to boost it up from merely good to great. Did I succeed? Let history be my judge.
For those who've already read it all the way through--who don't want to read all the way through again--here's a list of the chapters with edits.
--minor dialogue edits at the end of the chapter, introducing the curse earlier.
--minor dialogue edits at the end of the chapter to reveal implications about the family curse.
--Celestia's dialogue edited to fix small chronology issue with Lightning Dust/Luna's monologue edited to give fuller picture of the history of Tartarus
--minor edit to Blueblood's outburst.
--dialogue edited to account for the curse already being revealed.
34. Best Flight Ever
--major dialogue edit to remove plot hole/removal of banishment subplot
--major scene change to give Flash Sentry's character arc a better conclusion/minor dialogue edit for Scorpan
--major scene change to remove banishment subplot and wrap up the series as a whole/minor prose edits to reflect new outcome
--minor dialogue edit to remove banishment subplot.
The banishment subplot was removed because I had no real way of justifying it at all. Most of the dialogue edits near the beginning were mild attempts at giving the characters reasons for going to Tartarus beyond "But I must go!" I'm still not too sure I hit that one out of the park.
Above all, the ending is a bit more soulful than before. I believe so, anyhow.