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Happy to help up~

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I can agree with that! When I actually dropped the whole "clopfic" label and went for fleshing it out as a story with erotica, I think it certainly improved

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Its simple though, In my opinion, the element of coherence and harmony is definitely in need if it comes to fiction(clopfic especially, since its not ...porn, a legid plot、twist and turns and the like'll make your work more than just tons of nasty words...if you know what I mean.), Under this circumstances, you, sir. Worth my approve .

And yes, there is more to improve...This guy did a great gob about detail, check him out, maybe you can benefit from that!
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/15922/1/Happiness-Lies-Across-the-Room/Ch-1---The-Pony-Human-Convergence

Heyo, Thanks for favoriting "A Week In Ponyville!" I'm kind of overwhelmed by the positive reception it's gotten so far, but I'm more than happy to continue it. Rest assured, there are great things on the way!

So yeah, Thank you

P.S. Would you mind telling me what it was about it that was worth favoriting? Just for my benefit.