~~~~~~~~~~~The Next Day~~~~~Ponyville 5 A.M.~~~~~~
Rainbow Dash lifts her head from the cloud she was lazily dozing on, hoping that it hadn't drifted as she shuffled in her sleep. The cloud, however, had only shifted an inch or two to the side, so she could still watch over Sweet Apple Acres for Applejack.
"Glad she hasn't come back yet, she would ki- !" Dash jumps as she hears a voice calling up to her, a stern voice that didn't sound, in the slightest bit, happy.
"Dash, ah told ya not ta fall asleep! Anypony coulda mosied on in here an' taken anythin' they'da seen!" Applejack stood below her, standing tall and proud against the small crowd of ponies rushing by around her, on their way to the library. "Do ya happen ta know why everypony fancies tha library today?"
Rainbow Dash kicks the cloud away from her and instantly connects with the ground next to Applejack. "I don't know, maybe her eggheaded self spread her reading hobby?"
"Startin' with yerself?" Applejack chuckles as she passes by Dash, heading through the gate to her farm. Noticing her friend fidgeting with her mane causes her to stop, and look at her, "Ya alright sugarcube? Ya'll look a might nervous."
Dash stops messing with her mane and nervously blushes, "Of course I'm alright. I'm awesome!" Quickly, she turns around and lifts into the air, taking off toward the library.
Applejack stands behind the gate to her farm, confused for a moment as she shakes her head and calls to her family, "Ah'm home ya'll!"
Rainbow stops as she nears the library,proceeding slowly toward the branches above it, making sure not to be seen by anypony, and listened. Her friend Twilight was speaking, about what, she could not yet understand.
"Good morning everypony, I mainly have two things to say-" Everypony in attendance listened closely to every word that Twilight said, "It has come to light that I, Twilight Sparkle, officially have a crush." She chuckles and shakes her head, noticing how odd it must feel to be attending something just to hear that. "Secondly, Princess Luna is going to stay in Ponyville a few days. Remember, treat her as you would anypony else, not with fear, but with admiration." She takes a step back from the podium, a slight murmur coming from the crowd.
Rainbow Dash jump off of the branch and flies quickly down toward her friend, beginning to yell as soon as she left the tree, "Luna's come here!? To stay?!
Twilight is startle when she hears Dash's voice from above her, not knowing that she was there. She looks up at Dash and watches her land near the podium. "Yes Rainbow, Celestia sent a letter stating that Luna was coming to stay for a week. She didn't say exactly what it was for but, she did however, say that it was very important." Twilight looked around for a moment before a question popped into her head, "By the way, have you seen Rarity? I haven't heard from her or seen her since yesterday. Shortly after you left, she ran by me and went into the train station... The next train was coming from Canterlot so, I figured she-" She nodded, confusing Rainbow Dash and began to slowly walk away, giggling slightly as she quickly picked up why Luna had come to Ponyville.
"We would've liked to tell you before, however, the time hadn't seemed right then. Now, the time is perfect. We would like for you to be ours. Do you accept?" Princess Luna asks her question, the look on Rainbow Dash's face slightly changed, she began to blush but still looked confused. "We mean to ask if, you'd be our, "special-somepony"?" Luna stands there smiling for a moment as the sound of a train picks up, slowly fading away as the train went back to Canterlot.
Rainbow Dash's eyes widened as her cheeks began to flush an even deeper shade of pink than the night before. Her mouth opened, but the only sound that escaped was a squeak, much like the ones that Fluttershy made daily.
Luna blinks, and began to speak. "We apologize sincerely if-" She's cut off by Rainbow Dash.
"P-Princess...?" She begins to speak, but is unable to finish the sentence yet.
"Yes, Rainbow Dash?" She smiles and looks over Dash, her lean yet muscular legs and build. and her wings that were the most perfectly cute size for her muscular body. Though, the part of her that Luna pondered over most, was her eyes. 'They compliment her facial features so perfectly...' Her thoughts were interrupted as she saw Rainbow Dash closing her eyes. It took her only a moment to realize, her question had been answered, by an action in place of words.
I'm confused.
Did Luna arrive on the train that Rarity left on, or... was she there the whole time? I seem to have missed the part when she actually arrived.
Sweet chapter, nonetheless.
I'll fix the plothole when I can access my pc c: Thanks for pointing that out. ^.^ ~TPWB
hmm starting to wonder if there will be scootadop in this story lol
Hey great story buddy i like it so much. It's so cool. :)
Mate, you gotta finish what you started. I know you think you have no talent in this area, but you have loads. Think of it this way.
In an rough estimate, I have read over 1111 stories, for the sake of an actual number, lets round it down to 1000.
On average, the stories have 10,000 words.
Considering the average person reads 300 words a minute, that would mean it would take, on average, 303.2 minutes to read a story. 303.2=5h 3mins
Since I've read around 1000
303.2x1000= 303,200mins
Let's convert it to hours and days.
303,200/60=5053.33333
5053.33333/24=210.555556
That would mean I've spent over 210 days reading. I had a lot of words invade my brain with a lot of different authors spewing them. Your a really good author, and since I've read so much, that means your pretty talented. Even if you don't want to write anymore, at least finish your stories. You got fans who would love to see you works finish. If you need, get a beta to help out. Throw your ideas at em, get them to edit, and let them add their input an you'll be great.
4621484 I would but... Every time I think of something I like, I start to write it and change it. After I post it, I don't like it..
4648732 Dude trust me, I'm the same way. I can barely stand reading my own work, so I work on it. When my writing gets to the point that I can tolerate reading it without wanting to beat myself, then I know my work isn't half bad. After all, our hardest critic, is ourselves.
I think if you took some time and worked on your ideas so you enjoy it. A writers purpose is to not only please the crowd, but themselves as well.
I know my opinion doesn't mean much, but write down the base of you idea. Not anything more than the bare minimum. Once you have that written down, think of the different ways you could take your idea, and find which one you like the best. Write down where you want the story to go and begin writing. If you start changing from the plan, either begin again or incorporate it into the idea. Leave you mind open for change but keep yourself on track with the plan. Only write when you feel like it and never feel pressured into finishing something.
Do what you will, and if any of my writing tips work, than send me a message. Have fun.