My Little Twilight Zone

An MLP:FiM and Twilight Zone crossover. You are walking home from a hard day's work and find yourself in Ponyville. But how did you get here, and why do you keep experiencing flashbacks.

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PaulRap Raptor

PaulRap Raptor #1 · Apr 15th, 2013 · 1 · ·

I felt I was watching a short episode. Keep up the good work.

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D4RTH4NN3

D4RTH4NN3 #3 · Apr 15th, 2013 · · ·

2429012 Thanks

FakeScienceMonthly

FakeScienceMonthly #4 · Apr 15th, 2013 · · ·

This was somewhat interesting, but why did you make it a second person story? I think the ending payoff worked, but you could have done a better job on the setup. I would have liked to know more about Eddy's lifestyle, and why he makes the decisions he does. The story was quite scant on details. If it was third person you could have given more detailed descriptions. The ending is third person, because he doesn't know what's going on. Instead of having to change, the whole story should have just been like that.

D4RTH4NN3

D4RTH4NN3 #5 · Apr 15th, 2013 · · ·

2431749 To tell you the truth I actually started out this whole story in third person in my rough draft but as I continued writing I found it very difficult to explain what he was doing and his feelings and emotions, so I decided to make it a mix of second and third person.

OJ Orbit

OJ Orbit #6 · May 12th, 2013 · · ·

I really enjoyed this. Reminds me of the old Twilight Zone episodes, even if it was bit short. I wish it could have played out a bit more, but still a great story