This story explores a dragon's nature somewhat, and spins a narrative of a middle-aged Spike regaling a visitor about the favorite item in his hoard: a statue of his favorite pony. It is a story about Spike, Rarity, reminiscing, letting go, and preserving that which is most precious to us.
Huh. I had never thought of Spike's and Rarity's relationship like that before. Granted, dragons are usually quite avaricious in old myths and legends, but I had never thought of Spike in that manner. Still, considering what we've seen of other dragons in the MLP universe, it makes sense that he'd develop those feelings.
As you pointed out, your premise is a little... disturbing. Obviously the fact that both Rarity and Spike consented to the arrangement makes things a lot less awkward, but still. However, I think you handled it quite well; it did feel like there was a strong, positive connection between Spike and Rarity. Add in your philosophy on the circle of life, and you've got a fairly happy story, albeit one with slightly dark undertones.
All in all, pretty decent story. Characters are developed well, clearly based on their personalities in the show. Plot is intriguing, bringing up questions about mortality and love, and answers them nicely. Atmosphere, as you've already pointed out, ranges from happy to slightly dark, but is never sad enough to really bring the story down. Well done.
Continues to stare at the screen while his hands try to find his lower jawbone, (it fell off okay?).
These two stories just make you think, ya know? I've read many FiM fiction stories lately, most of which have left me feeling one emotion or another rather heavily. This set is a world unto itself however. There's just no easy way to describe it.
Also, I think EqD would tag this as GrimLight, (paradox yo!).
When I said the first chapter wowed me, I thought that was as good as it could get. Man, was I wrong. That's...just about all I have to say. I would try to put what I feel in words, but I can't. I'm speechless.
This is very odd. It's not something that happens to me often. But you've done it. Bravo, sir. Bravo.
I've read many sadfic's but this must be the one that's gotten to me the most, I've just read it for the second time and still it makes me cry 
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I mostly read long story's, and it amazes me that you can write sutch a amazing story that's so short and is better than most of the other sadfic's I've read.
Words fail me.
I cannot adequately describe how much this story fucked me up. I just sat down and sobbed for half an hour, completely unable to function as I thought about this story. I then came back, printed this out, and kept a copy of it on me everywhere I go.
No other story I have read has made me feel this emotional before. I don't know if it's kinda wrong, but I can compare how sad I just was to how sad I was when my aunt died. You are a masterful writer and this will forever be one of the shining examples of sheer talent and beauty in this fandom.
Thank you for one of the best things I have ever read.
Very cute. However, it does beg the question as to the nature of a cockatrices vision. Usually it is portrayed as direct conversion of living tissue into granite (or concrete as they show us on tv). This implies that they can control it... but how much control? Cause to have her LITERALLY made out of alabaster, amethyst, sapphire and opal (or onyx or obsidian) and blue diamond would be pretty damn amazing. And wouldn't the rest of the gang notice when she went missing. ANd twilight is smart enough to puzzle things out...
My God, this fic was amazing. You, as a writer, are amazing and I hope you get published. Having officially read everything you've published on FiMFiction, I think that all of your work here is freaking amazing.
Oh, and about the creepyness in this particular series of fics? I consider the writing itself a bubble of light surrounded by mild darkness, which can only penetrate anytime it's mentioned. In all honesty, even though there's a dark premise, you pull the story off in a way that makes it feel like it could almost be an authentic part of the show. The main reason I say almost is that hasbro would never try to make little girls cry so hard that their parents have to take them to psychologists.
There's a run-on sentence in here that doesn't quite make sense: 'They become visible to those who can recognize their influence never truly leaves the great cycle of life' Otherwise, this was a very well done story indeed. It sure has a lot to say on the idea of immortality and how life and death often come hand in hand. You have a real knack for effective twists, such as how Rarity became a statue in the first place and how the dragon's egg was created. It's also a nice flavour of sad on offer here, it's moving but not a tearjerker. I think this music is rather appropriate for the ending too. 
This is a very unusual take on Spike and Rarity's relationship... And the scariest part is that it makes a lot of sense, even though when we're talking about the show, it tends to be more light-hearted when it comes to life cycles. god, I worded that horribly
Regardless, the story didn't quite get away from its grimdark roots - I found the dragon's egg life cycle to be quite disturbing; how the dragon and pony's narcissistic (yes) life will repeat over and over again, without a chance to break the loop...
Anyway, an interesting, and what's more - original, take on Spike and Rarity's relationship. I'd give a solid 4/5.
This was the first pony fic I ever read. I didn't cry from My Little Dashie. I wrote Last One Standing. I'm a steely bastard, okay? Anyhow, this fic inspired me to actual tears and made me feel hollow and sad for days afterward. I ended up having to write Last One Standing as a way of getting out all the feels. You get 5/5 flutteryays.
That's good. As an author, you have to feel the story's mood as you're writing it. If it's funny, you should laugh. If it's sad, you should cry. If it's exciting, you should be excited. If it's contemplative, you should feel contemplative. Writing a good story is far from an exact science. I considered giving your story a much longer, more detailed review, but decided against it since I really didn't feel like depressing myself into an existential rut.
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Well done.
but then I was like 
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