A Little Smarty Problem
By
Sparknanator
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Twilight stood there watching Smarty and Spike washing their claws and hooves. She knew Spike, when he said he would ‘wash’ his hands he would run into the bathroom, close the door, only leave the water running for a few minutes before coming back downstairs. She had figured out what he was doing and began monitoring him, much to his dismay.
When the two were finished, Twilight used her magic to shut the faucet off then levitated them both a small towel to dry off, “Now then, you two run downstairs.” Twilight said while watching Smarty cheerfully walk out of the bathroom. She heard Spike grumbling about not needing to be supervised ‘Well maybe if you didn’t try and trick me into thinking you washed your claws I wouldn’t have to watch to make sure.’ she thought as the purple dragon followed the happy filly.
Twilight soon followed them, she had a small skip in her step but was still nervous; there was no doubting it. As soon as she came downstairs the doorbell rang. Twilight let out a small sigh and walked to the door. When she opened it she was greeted by Rarity, the white unicorn smiled as she walked in, “Hello Twilight darling,” Rarity said in her usual sophisticated Canterlot accent. Twilight lead her into the kitchen. “My, my, dinner smells delightful.” She said as she levitated a bottle of wine out of her saddle bags. “Spike is quite the little chef.” Rarity said sitting the bottle of wine on the table.
“Actually I’m cooking dinner.” Twilight said blushing a little.
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A few hours had passed but eventually the rest of her friends came through the doors and much to Twilight’s surprise; Ditzy was with them along with her daughter Dinky. She had half expected the wall-eyed mare to be late. Twilight smiled and followed the rest of her friends into the the living room. “Thank you all for coming,” Twilight began.
“What’s the big idea Twilight? I wanted to get some training in today.” Rainbow Dash said a bit annoyed.
“Well girls,” Twilight started for the second time, feeling light headed as if she was getting ready to faint again but she held herself a bit stronger. “I-I’m a,” Twilight gulped, her mouth felt a bit dry suddenly as she looked at Applejack who gave her a sincere smile. “Girls,” she addressed them all, “Due to recent events, I’m a mother now.” Twilight said, getting strange looks from everypony except Applejack and Ditzy.
Pinkie’s stared at Twilight with an ever widening grin, “Oh, oh, oh! Is it a filly or colt?! Who’s the daddy?! Tell me Twilight!” Pinkie said, beginning to shake the purple mare. “I need to know!”
“Hey stop shaking my mommy!” Smarty said giving Pinkie the sternest look she could, the same one she saw Twilight giving Spike when he did something she didn’t like.
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After Twilight had sent the girls up to Smarty’s room she explained what happened. They all looked at Pinkie worriedly because she had stood there listening intently. “Pinkie? Are you alright?” Twilight asked, waving a hoof in front of the incredulous mare’s vibrant blue eyes.
They all looked at her silently, normally Pinkie would be fussing and wanting to throw a party “B-but she wasn’t in your tummy Twilight!” Pinkie stated, still confused even after Twilight had explained it to them and answered every question asked. Pinkie was still confused “That’s how foals are born or at least that’s how the Cakes told me!” Pinkie said gasping “D-did they lie to me?!”
“No Pinkie they didn’t lie to you darling.” Rarity said placing a gentle hoof on the pink mare’s shoulder. She gave her friend a soft smile, “Smarty’s birth was just a bit different then most traditional births.” She explained Pinkie wasn’t stupid, far from it but in a situation like this almost anypony would be confused.
Pinkie gave a slight nod, she was still confused but decided not to press the matter any more. Twilight cringed when she heard a slight crash upstairs fearing what she would have to sweep up. When she turned around she saw five fillies standing in front of her with suspicious looking smiles.
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After Twilight had swept what was left of a vase the fillies knocked over. They all sat down to eat; Smarty was busy chatting away with the rest of her friends while Twilight heard Pinkie talking about a party. She had called it a ‘Welcome to The World’ party or something of the sorts. She watched as Rarity occasionally and subtly looked at Smarty.
Rarity smiled and stood up “If you ladies will pardon me I must do something.” Rarity said trotting out of the room.
“I’ll join her.” Twilight said, following Rarity. When she got upstairs she knocked on the bathroom door, “Rarity it’s me,” Twilight said hearing Rarity yelp a bit, “Let me in we need to talk.” She couldn’t quite make out what Rarity had said but took the opening door as her saying it would be alright. Twilight quickly walked in and closed the door behind her. “Rarity why were you looking at Smarty like that?”
Rarity wasn’t quick to answer but she turned, refusing to look her friend in the eye “Twilight darling,” Rarity began “Smarty is such a sweet little filly but I,” She sighed “I honestly don’t know how in the name of Equestria you managed to bring her to life.” She gave Twilight a small smile “But then again you are the most powerful unicorn in Equestria so anything is possible.”
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After dinner, and a small desert, Twilight had sent the five hyper fillies upstairs to play for a bit while she spoke with the others. “Well they seem to be having fun.” Twilight said giving a small smile.
“I agree darling,” Rarity said “And it seems they are all ecstatic to have somepony new to play with.” Rarity gave Twilight a devilish grin “And it seems like we have somepony else to host slumber parties for them.”
Twilight gulped she had heard stories and she remembered the first time Fluttershy had agreed to watch them. She was going to the Everfree to get something from Zecora but she had an unfortunate run in with a Cockatrice and after that she didn’t remember much. only waking up in the forest with some snail slime in her mane.
“An’ ya’ can’t ferget takin’ ta’ tha’ movies Rarity.” Applejack said “Twilight, a word of advice.” She said, gaining the purple unicorn’s attention. “If they say we told’em that they could see some kind of movie that they are wantin’ ta see ya’ should make sure first.” She said looking down “Ah still can’t believe that ah got scammed by ’em.”
Ditzy blinked at them all “If I can interrupt for a second.” The grey mare said “If there is one thing I’ve learned from raising Dinky it’s you should always try to spend as much time with them as you can and to read them a little story or help them with their homework.” She glanced at the staircase with one eye, the other looking at the floor “Because no matter how many times they claim they are doing homework and don’t need help it’s always best to check on them.” Ditzy finished getting nods from everypony else.
“And she’s telling the truth Twilight,” Rarity began “I’ve basically raised Sweetie Belle on my own.” She giggled a bit remembering the days when she didn’t have any foal sized mannequins so as a substitute she would commonly use Sweetie Belle. “So I know being a parent is rather hard.” Rarity couldn’t help but smile.
“Eh I don’t see myself as the parent type.” Rainbow Dash said “Besides a foal would cramp my style.” She said leaning back a bit and earning a facehoof from Twilight.
In the corner of her eye Twilight noticed Smarty walking in the room. She looked a bit nervous “Smarty do you need something?” Twilight asked ‘Wait a second,’ she thought if there was one thing she knew about fillies and colts it was the look Smarty had on her face. It was the same look she used on her parents when she was a filly and wanted something.
Smarty bit her lip, she had that same feeling she had when she was standing in front of her class, “Mommy umm, I was talking to the girls,” Smarty began her legs shaking a little “A-and we just wanted to know if we you know; if we could have a sleepover!” Smarty said “Please mommy.” Smarty said using the technique that Sweetie Belle had been kind enough to teach her, a quivering lower lip, slightly tilted head and big wide puppy dog eyes. It was heart melting.
Looking around Twilight and hoped for some help when she noticed she wasn’t getting any she sighed “I guess so.” Twilight said “But! Only if the others are alright with letting your little friends stay over too.” She said smiling when she saw Smarty run upstairs ‘What have I just gotten myself into?’
I like this, good job.
Needs a bit of editing, but very cute and enjoyable.
And it should be either Ditzy or Rainbow.
-Getting ready to sleep.
-Using computer without authorization.
-Sees Update.
-Curses mentally.
-Reads.
And, Oh Twi. You're in SERIOUS trouble, If 3 CMCs were problematic, Celestia knows how much damage could 5 cause.
You tagged this as a Romance, so I can only assume Twi and Mac will come togethet
Big Mac could come by to check on Smarty and some how he ended up foal sitting because Cellestia asked for the mane 6.
many chapters later a tiny group is forming because they find "unnatural" birth is wrong or something and trys to go after smarty.
im like thpse directors that would make any happy story and take twist it around and make an action, drama, or tragedy movie.
PM me if you wanna go down that road.
maybe Luna doesn't feel too happy about the animation of a foal who shouldn't be living or maybe Cadance, now that's a twist!
Great to see this continue. As for the chaperone, I would say that Ditzy is the best choice as she is most likely able to give Twi some advice on the side being a mother herself.
Seemed a little jumble with the short, jumpy scenes. I wanted to see more of Smarty's antics with the others.
Although, a sleepover... plenty of antics there. Also, it should be either Ditzy or Mac. If the latter, Smarty walks in on them arguing about something and it upsets her.
Oh boy! An update!
yay an update
i don't know about the chaperone thing, it could be rarity or applejack because of their sisters.
or ditzy because of her daughter or pinkie pie trying to turn it into a party.
I think Ditzy should help Twilight watch the girls. Great job on the chapter.
ditzy
Hrng. I think this story gave me diabetes cancer.
Being the masochist that I am, I have now notified the website I wish to know when more diabetes-cancer causing story is available.
That being said, might want to consider getting an editor. You're getting better, but I dislike having to pick the occasional nit in the midst of my feels.
Rainbow should do it, since foals cramp her style and all. Maybe she needs some responsibility forced on her. on second thought.... Thats a bad Idea then Twi would have to watch 4 foals...
Oooo "Look Before You Sleep 2: the reckoning" Twi, Rares, and AJ have to host a CMC sleepover together. Horrible parenting ensues as AJ and Rarity try to convince Twilight that their parenting methods are superior.
I'd say Big Macintosh should be a chaperone, after all he's got start taking some responsibility for Smarty. And he needs to at least TRY to work things out with Twilight.
If not, I think Ditzy would be the best bet. As a fellow mother she could give Twilight some very useful advice.
Ditzy's smart as when she's with the Doctor. Heck, a sleepover with Smarty Pants can't end well.
I found a very minor thing you may want to edit.
That should be "swept".
So to make sure I have this straight: Spike is immature enough that Twilight doesn't have to send him to school, but mature enough that he can do the cooking, cleaning, and act as her full time assistant, and because of the glacial speed dragons age, he probably will remain in this state for the rest of Twilight's life? How CONVENIENT for Twilight. I hope when Spike is reshelving books he takes a glance at one with child labor laws in it.
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And for this mans stupidity and obsessiveness over grammar I leave...... a boot to the head.... and another to jenny and the wimp.
Both.
Read this story and I could really see Twilight doing this. Of course it also solidifies my opinion of what the perfect book to get Twilight would be.
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Hey man, be fair. He was perfectly correct, and polite about it, unlike some people we could mention. Don't make me get the wild tasmanian devil, I don't think your trousers are up for it.
First off, in answer to the question, ditzy. Show she's a more capable mare than most give her credit.
Also, I really can't wait to see what antics those four... I guess five, if ditzy chaperones that is, since ditzy would have to come with get up to
4558948 okay okay
4557941 dude i am sorry for being rude to you, I have been having some bad days dealing with people on youtube and i was very uncool here, so sorry.
Quick Question:Is this a TwiMac Fic?
I cast my vote for Big Macintosh. After all, if the kids want a sleepover at "mommy's" house. It's only fair that "daddy" should help. That alone is a grade A recipe for shenanigans
Ditzy... hands down it's got to be Ditzy. I love seeing Ditzy in mother mode, especially when she is a good mother to the point of surprising the other characters in the story.
Now on to my usual bit of madness. This is a fun story, I enjoy reading it. Therefore I will grant you a boon. Yes a blessing in the form of one thousand points for Daddy Mac and Mommy Twi, usable as you see fit. Kudos to Dinky for not joining Apple Bloom, Sweetie Belle, and Scootaloo's cult. Kudos to Smarty for joining a cult. Kudos to Twilight for enforcing her will over the dragon named Spike when he starts acting like he has rights. Kudos to Spike for his eventual night of madness where... I check the rating and see if I feel comfortable with describing how crazy Spike gets... Okay rated teen... so Spike goes crazy and rubs mayonnaise in Twilight's mane and tail as she sleeps in foolish security that Spike would never attempt to rise against his betters... Okay more rewards for the writer, you also get one tax free upward facing thumb and an Oscar... I mean a gold star... yeah... I lack the authority to give out Oscars... but if I did...
Ah, an update, very nice one as well, furthers the story nicely. Actually I agree with the commentators that say Mac aught to get roped into this one, but I also agree that Ditz should be the one. As the only genuine mother in the group I think she'd add a good angle to the whole piece and might allow a slightly different lead in to the Mac/Daddy issue.
SuperPinkBrony put it best, I really can't add anything to that. Voting Macintosh, and if that's not possible, Ditzy
didn’t remember much. only waking up
1. Forgot to capitalise.
Why not have them all? The small ones could have their slumber party and the adults could have their own. But if that wouldn't work, foist them on Rainbow. If having a single foal would 'cramp her style' let's see how she likes dealing with all of them.
Very cute, enjoying the idea.
This story has a good start, Twilight & Big Mac bickering at the offset was interesting as was Twilight's eventual escalation. Also, both "parents" initial overreactions are well played to their characters with Big Mac being much more stern and unyielding and Twilight being self-delusional and prone to overloading.
Then it feels like you didn't really know where you wanted to go with the story after that. Smarty is cute and naive, but has no other personality in the story, and since she's really the crux of the tale that's not something that can be maintained on cuteness alone. Similarly neither Big Mac nor Twilight really seem to be facing much in the way of challenges to grow through. The point does seem to be to throw them into unfamiliar and uncomfortable situations in the name of character growth, but the situations they face are too light, too easily overcome, and it doesn't feel like they really struggle at any point. They've suddenly become parents with no warning, no training, and little experience—AB & Spike being the notable exceptions but they weren't really parents to them—yet after the initial panic subsided they're handling the roles with aplomb. The story is also missing any further conflict between Big Mac and Twilight after the introduction of Smarty; they simply give each other the cold-shoulder, but I really miss the verbal thrust and parry of the beginning and I would have hoped to see that continue (perhaps with even some physical comedy components), especially if they're attempting to do it while not letting Smarty catch on.
As it is, this story had a great beginning, and a lot of promise, but it just hasn't continued on that track in later chapters.
Ditzy or Big Mac for whatever reason
Got to agree with what 4716066 said. There's a lot of potential here, but I feel that the story is stalling and not going anywhere. For something that's supposed to be about Twilight and Big Mac becoming parents, there's a serious lack of them working together to raise their daughter. They've had little interaction with each other, there's nothing about them finding common ground, and there's nothing about them putting their differences aside to help their child. It's supposed to be a TwiMac story, but there's a serious lack of the two of them being together in any way.
Smarty, while cute and naive, needs more of a personality. She needs to grow and develop as she explores more of the world before her. There's a lot of potential here for a story, but it needs some work.
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Well actually the next chapter there will be some more interaction with Twilight and Big Mac but that's all I really want to say about the next chapter...because spoilers ya' know?
4737339 That's good to know. Cause we're now going to be 10 chapters in and there's finally more interaction with them together.
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Don't worry I've been planning this for a while now
4737422 Good. Now type, wordmonkey. You have a deadline here.
4828244 The update is still being worked on but I'm hoping to have it done soon
You sir, have made Smarty Pants too freaking adorable. Honestly i think every time Smarty talks I go "Daawww" with just the how adorable she is. Keep up the good work!!!
Okay, so generally you're really good about format, but chapter was a mess. Don't get me wrong, I like this story and want to see were it's going. But, this entire chapter was really broken. There were breaks where there didn't need to be, and the scene with rarity felt really awkward. You honestly didn't need to devote an entire paragraph to one off handed comment. It was just this chapter, and I'm sure it was just because you were trying to juggle a bunch of scenes, but I felt that this was something I needed to say. Great story, it really is, it's just that this chapter could use a little polish.
I’m just picturing Smarty up in her room with the others, as they coach her on how to do “the look”