When a human clone from the Grand Canyon Province is transported to the Equestrian Wasteland, he finds that his surroundings are not all that's unfamiliar.
I've gotten pretty bored of the game now. Can't be arsed to start grinding and investing time, not to mention the farthest I got was the northern border of sector 1.
2354810 Ah. I never did grind when I played, I just did the quests. In doing so, I have come to understand a good deal of the lore behind the game, and I have even done a lot of roleplay.
2354861 Two, actually. Fallout: Equestria and Fallout: Equestria Related Fics. Both have several hundred members, and they all get notices when you add a story to their group.
2354989 Hehe, yep. Finally gathered up the courage to try my hand at writing, and after a half-decade of roleplaying, a few months of actual writing, I can't say that I'm not satisfied with the results.
2361219 Fallen Earth has gone free, in case you didn't know. And thank you for the offer of a pre-reader, but currently I have a blood pact going on with my current one.
2386167 I believe this is the third I have seen (since I wrote this one, making it the third), however one of them I saw skewed the Fallout Equestria canon so much that I don't count it as a Fallout Equestria story.
2393156 That is the other Fallout Equestria fic that I know of, but the one I was "bashing" was one where the war was between humans/bronies and ponies, and Littlepip never existed and neither did the Zebras. It was a very confused story.
Normally I am leery of crossovers, especially double crossovers (or is this a triple?) but I am glad I gave this one a go. I am impressed with how you have handled the pony character's mannerisms and actions in this- such as having her dig like a quadruped actually would, checking for a pulse with her nose rather than a hoof, etc. Most writers around here tend to write their pony characters as humans with equine anatomical terms substituted, so kudos to you on putting the extra effort in.
2396324 Thank you very much, that means a lot to me. I actually spent a lot of time looking at equine anatomy and had discussions with my editor about how some things would go.
2458476 Thanks! I appreciate your comment and criticism, and I have lately been working on area descriptions on the current chapter I've been writing. One thing I would like to ask though is an example of one of the things you mentioned in this snippet of your comment:
"The problem in that regard I feel are that some of the words mean something that isn't common knowledge..."
Can you go into more detail as to what you meant by that, so I can help improve?
2458644 Oh, sure. Let me take the prologue as an example...
The room that the man was in had metal grating and panels for a floor and steel-panelled walls, the ceiling having large portions of it lined with ventilation ducts and various pipes. One side of the room had a line of empty metal pods that were festooned with cables and other bits of machinery that filled the gaps between the pods. On either side of the line of pods was a wide staircase that lead up to the surface.
The other side of the room was a different matter altogether; the center part of the wall was concrete with a large, black sphere, possibly representing a planet, covered in a dense grid with bright points at each intersection. Beneath the logo was one word: “GlobalTech”.
On the floor just before the concrete wall was a raised dais that had a steel safety railing around most of it save for where a small metal stairway on either side of the circular platform connected to the floor. On the section closest to the wall was a semi-circular row of computer banks and terminals, the rows and panels of blinking lights occasionally interrupted by a blue screen that either showed the logo on the wall or other information that wouldn’t easily be readable to just anyone.
Now, while I certainly can understand this after several reads, I think it would be much more efficient if you simply used simpler language so people could get it right away. For example, festooned. Now, after a quick internet search, I have come to learn what it means. You could, however, have simply said coiled or bundled or... or strung-together or something of the sort.
2459937 Ah, I had no idea that that wasn't a common word (not implying anything, just didn't know). Thank you for that information, I'll be sure to use the simplified versions of words next time.
The biped’s broad shoulders were topped with a pair of shoulder shoulder pads that connected partially to the creature’s breastplate.
Repeat word. And in the paragraph directly below it you have a missing period, you should see it with the capital "H".
they still loved her for who she was, something she she infinitely grateful for.
Another repeat when I think you meant "was".
Probably others that my mind auto-fixed and didn't catch but here these for you.
Was busy reading other things and am only just getting around to this. So I'd take a guess and say this is occurring directly where FoE left off with the afterword correct?
Seems great so far, I wasn't expecting a language barrier because this is Fallout and chances are the strange alien thing would've been shot even if he could speak the same language. I guess he got extremely lucky she wasn't someone like a raider, although I'd still imagine most wouldn't of helped, raider or not; if they didn't become hostile they probably would've just ran away.
3075195 Thanks for catching those three errors, I appreciate it.
The reason I chose to have it set during/slightly after the Fallout Equestria afterword was because I didn't want to interfere with the main story in any way, because I figured with all the activity, the human character would be spotted rather quickly (not by the main characters of the original story, but by anyone).
With this story taking place 10 years later, I have the option to have it set much farther away from canon/lore areas, due to sudden expanse of land that has been opened up.
This will be interesting to read.
Watching.
2353739 Thank you for your watch.
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Nice, a fallen earth crossover. Haven't seen one of these before.
2354712 I love the game very much, and because I loved it so much, I took the opportunity to do something no one else has done.
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I've gotten pretty bored of the game now. Can't be arsed to start grinding and investing time, not to mention the farthest I got was the northern border of sector 1.
2354810 Ah. I never did grind when I played, I just did the quests. In doing so, I have come to understand a good deal of the lore behind the game, and I have even done a lot of roleplay.
You know, there is actually a group just for these crossovers. I like your take on it, and they probably would too.
2354853 Oh? What group is it?
2354861 Two, actually. Fallout: Equestria and Fallout: Equestria Related Fics. Both have several hundred members, and they all get notices when you add a story to their group.
2354881 I've actually added my story to both of them, but thank you for telling me, I do appreciate it.
2354895 ...oops. Sorry, I'm new. So there's a side bar on the story? I'll keep that in mind.
2354907 Don't worry about it, I just sort of noticed that myself, actually.
2354981 Hehehe, and you've been around for a while! So wait, this story is your first after like 78 weeks? Bravo!
2354989 Hehe, yep. Finally gathered up the courage to try my hand at writing, and after a half-decade of roleplaying, a few months of actual writing, I can't say that I'm not satisfied with the results.
2355057 Eight favs and only two dislikes. That's like an 80% approval rating, so I'd say that's pretty sweet! Just saying.
2355073 Certainly does seem like that, doesn't it? All's good on this front, I think it is safe to sleep now.
2355095 Good night! That's in your part of the world, I'm guessing?
Keep up the good work I'm really intrested in seeing where this is going.
2355877 Thanks man, I'll definitely be adding more later on.
Good story
I had an idea like this for a Fallout 3 story where a ghoul OC ends up in the wastes
2359478 No ghouls in Fallen Earth, heh. That will be an interesting scene for when the time comes.
It's still formulating in my head. plus I think he might get ponified
2361219 Fallen Earth has gone free, in case you didn't know. And thank you for the offer of a pre-reader, but currently I have a blood pact going on with my current one.
Currently working on chapter 2.
This is actually the second Human in Falllout: Equestria fic i saw.
2386167 I believe this is the third I have seen (since I wrote this one, making it the third), however one of them I saw skewed the Fallout Equestria canon so much that I don't count it as a Fallout Equestria story.
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Is this it?
2393156 That is the other Fallout Equestria fic that I know of, but the one I was "bashing" was one where the war was between humans/bronies and ponies, and Littlepip never existed and neither did the Zebras. It was a very confused story.
Normally I am leery of crossovers, especially double crossovers (or is this a triple?) but I am glad I gave this one a go. I am impressed with how you have handled the pony character's mannerisms and actions in this- such as having her dig like a quadruped actually would, checking for a pulse with her nose rather than a hoof, etc. Most writers around here tend to write their pony characters as humans with equine anatomical terms substituted, so kudos to you on putting the extra effort in.
2396324 Thank you very much, that means a lot to me. I actually spent a lot of time looking at equine anatomy and had discussions with my editor about how some things would go.
2458476 Thanks! I appreciate your comment and criticism, and I have lately been working on area descriptions on the current chapter I've been writing. One thing I would like to ask though is an example of one of the things you mentioned in this snippet of your comment:
"The problem in that regard I feel are that some of the words mean something that isn't common knowledge..."
Can you go into more detail as to what you meant by that, so I can help improve?
2458644 Oh, sure. Let me take the prologue as an example...
The room that the man was in had metal grating and panels for a floor and steel-panelled walls, the ceiling having large portions of it lined with ventilation ducts and various pipes. One side of the room had a line of empty metal pods that were festooned with cables and other bits of machinery that filled the gaps between the pods. On either side of the line of pods was a wide staircase that lead up to the surface.
The other side of the room was a different matter altogether; the center part of the wall was concrete with a large, black sphere, possibly representing a planet, covered in a dense grid with bright points at each intersection. Beneath the logo was one word: “GlobalTech”.
On the floor just before the concrete wall was a raised dais that had a steel safety railing around most of it save for where a small metal stairway on either side of the circular platform connected to the floor. On the section closest to the wall was a semi-circular row of computer banks and terminals, the rows and panels of blinking lights occasionally interrupted by a blue screen that either showed the logo on the wall or other information that wouldn’t easily be readable to just anyone.
Now, while I certainly can understand this after several reads, I think it would be much more efficient if you simply used simpler language so people could get it right away. For example, festooned. Now, after a quick internet search, I have come to learn what it means. You could, however, have simply said coiled or bundled or... or strung-together or something of the sort.
2459937 Ah, I had no idea that that wasn't a common word (not implying anything, just didn't know). Thank you for that information, I'll be sure to use the simplified versions of words next time.
2493294 Ah, thank you.
This is really good :3
2520693 Appreciate the compliment.
This is pretty good.
2619918 Thank you for the compliment. As a note to everyone else, a new chapter should be ready by Monday.
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Oooh, neat.
You're welcome by the way.
Repeat word. And in the paragraph directly below it you have a missing period, you should see it with the capital "H".
Another repeat when I think you meant "was".
Probably others that my mind auto-fixed and didn't catch but here these for you.
Was busy reading other things and am only just getting around to this. So I'd take a guess and say this is occurring directly where FoE left off with the afterword correct?
Seems great so far, I wasn't expecting a language barrier because this is Fallout and chances are the strange alien thing would've been shot even if he could speak the same language. I guess he got extremely lucky she wasn't someone like a raider, although I'd still imagine most wouldn't of helped, raider or not; if they didn't become hostile they probably would've just ran away.
3075195 Thanks for catching those three errors, I appreciate it.
The reason I chose to have it set during/slightly after the Fallout Equestria afterword was because I didn't want to interfere with the main story in any way, because I figured with all the activity, the human character would be spotted rather quickly (not by the main characters of the original story, but by anyone).
With this story taking place 10 years later, I have the option to have it set much farther away from canon/lore areas, due to sudden expanse of land that has been opened up.
Wait a sec... is this a Fallen Earth crossover?