Twilight Sparkle is being corrupted in mind and spirit by the Shadow, a dark magical force from ancient times. Now Princess Celestia is in a race against time to find the key to saving her student and her friends from the seduction of the Shadow.
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Wow..... this chapter wasn't extreme violence or mad lustful stuff. But it was amazing, as much as the previously mentioned examples. It is certainly a dire situation when Zecora has to not speak in rhyme. Aside from the fact that she can be a tash confusing from time to time. *and if that rhymed, then wow, total accident* Berry is also getting expanded into something more than just a booze hound. She's the sweet caring open trusting pony, one of a rare breed. I could have predicted that not many ponies would believe the wild tale that Twilight Sparkle and her friends are doing bad or evil things. Plus the tale about Filthy Rich has been covered up, so claiming that Twilight did it would not fly.
Yay, Time Turner!!! Timey-wimey. He's a good strong character and I applaud your choice of bringing him in. Moving on, what was that thing that Shining gave to Scootaloo? It is like a shield or it a weapon that can be thrown? I know we'll likely find out a little more at some later point, but I feel like asking anyways. Also, nice little pitch of Cadence wanting to do it with Shining while flying. If that was the message that was being given. Makes me a bit curious how excellent that would be for both of them.
Now, I would like to address something that personally urks me. Cadence thought A young one and a pony from a faraway land. Zecora is a Zebra, not a pony. Twilight knew that, so why wouldn't Cadence know of the Zebra race? I know it's kind of a fan fight, if Zecora is a pony or a zebra. She has a cutie mark so to speak, but that could just be her natural patterns. Granted she wouldn't survive long if she was out in the wild being hunted by lions and panthers and such, but that's not in MLP. Now it's only a urk and I'm not going to ask you to change it for any reason. Just thought I'd voice that really quick.
Yay for a new chapter and a great one at that. Good work!
Edit: What does the author's note mean? Were you struggling with this chapter for a long while or are we finally at the end of the second part? I doubt my second guess since Fluttershy hasn't been captured yet and Silent Moon hasn't delivered the words she needs to give to Twilight.
2580923 It's a shield - one of Shining Armor's. The gifting of it to Scootaloo is both practical and symbolic... The young warrior, receiving a shield from a doughty Knight.
IT MEANS SOMETHING, YO.
As to the seeming urk with Zecora being called a Pony, well...Once again - as with all things - there is a REASON for it. ^_____^ But sadly this reason will be a long time in the finding. You'll just have to trust me.
I might write Shining and Cadence mid aerial sex just to write it now.
Another good chapter! And things are building up... I'm not sure the peak is on sight or is it still so far away, do hope it's the latter though. (And I'm wondering how long does it took for you to make the rhyme, I'd tried and failed so many times).
Anyhow, with some(?) ponies being gathered so they can leave for Whitetail Woods, Scootaloo gaining a buckler, the meeting of Shining and Cadence to Zecora, and Shining and Cadence probably will get some... clopping time. And now we'll need to wait for the next chapter, to see the continuation or even going back to Twilight's POV, we never know.
Oh the glorious irony. I saw it in the last chapter, and you've kept it going into this one, which leads me to believe it's probably significant. When the Shadow, the creature that has used sex as a weapon and tool at every turn, corrupted rarity, it was almost completely chaste. Just a kiss and nothing more. And yet Cadance, the Princess of Love, is over here dripping her way across the Everfree. "Love conquers all" indeed.......but which 'love' is that particular saying talking about? But if the Princess of Love is acting like the Shadow, and the Shadow is acting like the Princess, then is there really a difference?
And now to wait and see a few more things develop.
2581065 Scene change coming up actually, but you're about to get some really vital insights into some other stuff...We're getting ready for the buildup to the climactic finale here.
Time skip coming up soon? I'm assuming the buckler is going to signal Scootaloo's transition to being the sequel's protagonist.
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Nooooooot quite. An interesting guess though!
Awesome chapter!
I love your Zecora and what you're doing with Berry Punch is great. In fact, the whole "cast of misfits out to save the world" deal is awesome!
I guess next chapter we see Fluttershy's doom. You made a comment that we won't be expecting what will happen, which is interesting as I see no way out for Fluttershy. Unless Fluttershy went on vacation or something. Though, that would be funny, Twilight shows up at the cottage and there's a note saying, "Gone to visit family in Cloudsdale be back in a week" tacked to the door
I doubt that will happen though.
I'm assuming that when Fluttershy gets corrupted that will mark the ending point of this story. This is The Twilight Fall and with all her friends enthralled her fall would be complete, then the war begins.
I foresee Scootaloo having to fight her friends down the road, and that will be sad.
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You would assume wrongly sir! Ohohohoho. Trust me. You will KNOW when the ending comes. It's going to hit you like a ton of bricks.
If that update were to take place on April 1st, I would do this in a heartbeat. Sadly it isn't. A truly hilarious idea though.
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Aw. I woulda liked that.
2581601 Dont worry. Scoots is getting plenty of screen time in the next book. You might be able to call her the primary protaganist actually, but there's actually a LOT of different things going on in the next book. *chin scratch* I cant say any more yet - spoilers you know but... eh. You'll see.
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Ok, ok, you have to write a joke chapter now based off this. They see the note about going to Cloudsdale so they head up there to find her family. Her parents inform the gang that they just missed Fluttershy going to Manehatten to visit her cousin. Once in Manehatten they learn Fluttershy just left to see an old classmate in Fillidelphia. Once in Filli, they just missed Fluttershy leaving for Canterlot to visit an old flame. In Canterlot, they just missed her heading back out to Ponyville. Back in Ponyville, they find her in her cabin where they discover that Fluttershy, due to her proximity to the Everfree forest, was actually the fist one to get the Shadow and has been the True Shade all along!
She just had Twilight do all her dirty work for her.
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You'd better have the Corrupted win. It's no fun if the Shadow is destroyed.
2581798 And now I'll sing the doom song!
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Oh god this made me laugh so hard
Hmm. Despite how LATE I am commenting on this story, I really like it and I have to say this.
I'm thinking cadence might just have a little shadow already inside her. But maybe I'm just reading to much into it. Just doesn't seem the time or place for cadence wanting sex.
2581662 THAT would be so epic. I know the comment is stone-old but I just had to laugh at this idea and how pissed the gang might be at the end.
Also love this version of Zecora and the unique group who is trying to save the world...I´m rooting for her and for Celestia and Luna to find a cure.
nice shinning armor sister is turning evil and the fate of equestria hangs in the balance but no its fine you still have time to fuck your wife thats not the worst of it though you decide to do it in your sisters house in her bed you sick bastard
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Who said anything about a bed?
I imagine you had Berry Punch browbeat Zecora into normal speech because the constant rhyming would have been too difficult? I don't mind that. I'd rather have a non-rhyming Zecora than a badly rhyming Zecora. Some people try, but fail to make a properly rhyming Zecora. My biggest pet peeve with Zecora is when people try to rhyme singular words with plural. Example: "Do not mind my rhymes, for we have little time." That does not work.
Bwaaahahahahaaa! Scootaloo is Captain Equestria!