P.S. A new ship sets sail this night, lets hope I don't sink her.

I love referring to stories as seafaring vessels. You are now earning a pre-read fav and like, don't lemme down!

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Thank you, I hope to not disappoint. I shall endeavor to keep this fine vessel afloat, or go down with her.

What about Shining Armor huh, Cadence?

2310162

Shinning is dead in this fic dead.

2310178 Oh, well that sucks.

One of those multiple endings better be a foursome.

Also is Spike going to be in this at all.

2310178 But wouldn't it be weird marrying your former husband's sister?

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Well I do aim to please all parties in this case, so yes there will be a foursome as one of the endings. As to Spike, he will be mentioned, but wont make an appearance in this fic.

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its been almost a thousand years since his death by this point, so she has had to time to come to terms with her loss and her growing love for Twilight.

2310290 She was her foalsitter before that. I can't imagine that will ever stop being awkward, that said, since Twidash is a no go, TwiLuna all the way!

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yeah sadly no Twidash, but their will be Twiluna, and Twilestia and every other variation.
As to the awkwardness, yes it might be awkward but love knows no boundaries, as a certain love goddess will know from experience.

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It was epic Nicely done captain! Consider me part of the crew!

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Glad to have you aboard. would you mind terribly describing what you liked most about the intro.

I have only seen one Twilight X Cadance and i think it may have died ...
so ...
Woo Hoo! Go Twiliy! Go Cadance! Tap dat flank! Tap it!

May I board this fine vessel?

2310549

Well, Cadance will have her work cut out for her, she has got two other mares to compete with for Twilies affections.

2310559

Come on board, we have plenty of room.

2310517

Of the chapter you say?

Well then, I believe it was the concept more than anything. Your spelling is very good, and I did not notice any errors in it (or if I did, I can't remember them), and your grammar was fine. It actually reminded me of my own style as I read it, which pretty much kept my amused interest in the writing throughout the chapter.

But the most memorable part of it all was...

Luna spat out the coffee she had been drinking, hitting Celestia as she turned in surprise toward Cadence.

I laughed so hard at that part, it will forever be cannon for me.

and

Celestia chuckled nervously as her blush deepened, smiling at Twilight in a way she had never seen before.

That was the second piece that got my attention. I love the idea of Celestia finally thinking about Twilight as an equal, a possible love interest, and a friend more than a student. It was all implied in that sentence, and I loved the idea.
What I always seem to dislike about TwiLestia is that the monarch always has that air of dominance and superiority above Twilight, and it is incredibly refreshing to know that for once; it will be Celestia seeking to gain her attention instead of the other way around.

All in all, you have a very good concept in your hands, as well as the skill to make it shine. I look forward to seeing more of this story.

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I am pleased that it caught your eye the way it did. as for the Twilestia bit, I have habit for turning their kind of relationship on its head and sometimes switching the roles, I have done it before and so felt safe doing so again in this fic.

So. Cadence is looking to complete the Sparkle sibling set, then?

This ship seems to be going full steam with no visible obstacles at this time.

Carry on good sir.

Permission to come aboard, Captain.

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more like she has finally come to see Twilight as more then the pony she used to foalsit.

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why thank you kindly.

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Permission granted, and welcome aboard.

I did not think of it earlier but i hope two of the most magical words in all of fimfic show up at some point ...
...
Magic
Penis
(they solve all problems)

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well maybe latter, you are talking to a futa-fiction writter here, so it may "come up" so to speak, latter in the fic.

*Twilight teleports to her room opens up her secret stash of books pulls out her forgetting stick and proceeds to whack herself into blissful unconsciousness.*

Twilight's jimmies are so rustled, Discord couldn't do a better job, dood.

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Gods that made me laugh.

2311066 for some reason I always imagined that when an image or thought popped into twilights head it would go like this
Twi: "Spike!!!!"
"Yes twilight"
"The forget me stick please"
"What was it this time?"
"Parents in bed"
"so the oak then?"
"Yes please"

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Probably not, man I do not give this girl any breaks do I

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Steady as she goes number seven, she can take it!

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Probably, gods what kind of stick would he have used after the Lesson Zero incident.

*Stows away*

I dub this ship LuLightCeleDenza. *Smashes bottle against it, accidentally breaking Cadance's nose*

Why am I on a ship? I get seasick but it looks so nice here. Might I stay if I can find some Dramamine?

Dragons are immortal! Spike should be there

and shit's going down!

This...will be interesting. Question. Seeing that they are all royalty, can't they ALL marry Twilight?

2311884 We cant be sure if he is still alive. We just know that dragons get really old or at least assume that. It could be that he is still alive and living somewhere (the Country of the Dragons) or is a member of a Dragon Tribe that dont life that long. We will not find out till a later chapter maybe.

2311407 not a stick, a tree

I will go down with this ship

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Sorry, I'm the captain of this marry vessel and she's already got a name, The Twilunestaince! Oh and could somebody please fix Cadances nose.

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*looks in one of the food barrels* hey, what the hay are you doing in their, get above deck like every one else, we have a ship to run!

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Probably but if we all know Twilie, we all know she is going to take her sweet time figuring that out, while seeing if she likes them the same way they like her.

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Thank you both for your comments, Spike will be mentioned in a latter chapter, so all you have to do is be patient.

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*pulls out some Dramamine* here you go, and welcome aboard.

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Glad you enjoy it enough to sink with her, lets hope it doesn't come to that

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yeah, probably.

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ok who was up-voted this comment, I want answers? who disliked Shining so much that my saying he's dead deserved praise, come on speak up?