Shining Armor finds Twilight's secret diary and he doesn't read it... for about 5 seconds.
Page generated in 0.038 seconds
Total duration
617 users online
1,174,027 hits today, 2,782,760 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
"Oh, Twilight, I've told you, you'll get you magic soon. Every unicorn does!" She smiled.
Small error :D
Great story! I love the comedy!
However it felt like the scene when twilight failed the test was lacking in the drama.
Ferris Mulers day off...
"SHINING FRANCIS ARMOR!"
Oh god, the FiW references in this are delicious!
Well, I think we know how Shining got his Cutie mark now, ne?
2497562 I grinned when I caught that too!
i see a Flim Flam brothers reference and a Big Mac too.
i was laughing my ass off at this part, so much win
now to read the second chapter i hope that will shed more light on the actual plot of this story, but this was a phenomenal prologue-ish chapter
Loved the Simpsons reference.
i swear my facepalm was heard all over my neighborhood
2499586 yep^^ that part was awesome^^ my fav part though was this
I laughed for three minutes straight after that^^
Nice Dune reference there.
WHEATIES!
This is how I am imagining Shining.
This chapter was absolutely hilarious. I think this is helping to shape my head canon about Shining, and I like it. Though, hopefully it does not conflict with him being an utter dumbass and clueless.
Well at least someone knows their FiW
Gnarly!
l.wigflip.com/f4ZgQQDI/roflbot.jpg
And away we go... NEXT CHAPTER COMIN' RIGHT UP!
.
Can't... Breathe...!
>"Of course Mr. Sparkle."
There should be a comma between "course" and "Mr"
>She sat down at her fathers desk
*father's
>She felt it's weight, it's essence in the world.
"it's" means "it is" or "it has". The word you should use here is "its".
>Her felt the beginnings of a familiar stirring in his loins
Her?
"...masturbation..." He grinned.
mediabistro.com/fishbowldc/files/2013/01/url-3.gif
I must not fear.
Fear is the mind-killer.
Fear is the little-death that brings total obliteration.
I will face my fear.
I will permit it to pass over me and through me.
And when it has gone past I will turn the inner eye to see its path.
Where the fear has gone there will be nothing.
Only I will remain.
This is pretty good so far
Ferris Muler. Oh god, the references.
And, ".. masturbation..." he grinned.
images1.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20100529224028/callofduty/images/thumb/8/82/Nuclear_Facepalm.jpg/600px-Nuclear_Facepalm.jpg
OR
narwhaler.com/original/py/g/faceground-my-little-pony-facepalm-pYgkUa.jpg
Wow. Shiny's a little douche isn't he?
2761644 by the end of that chapter I would say he's a dead douche
2564460 Bwahahahahahaha
2497562 What is FiW?
2838608
...Seriously?
look it up on youtube.
was that a simpsons reference i just read?
How is checking out twenty books a privilege? My home library has no limit on how many books you can check out at a time - within reason of course. I used to go to the library every month when I was younger and check out 20-25 books each time.
I've only read two chapters so far, but I wanted to go ahead and comment on something that caught my attention (besides the innumerable references).
"She focused on the page she wanted to lift... ...upon time, eternal."
That entire passage is probably the most profound thing I've read in a long time. Bravo.
...
Talk about eye Candy.
5170666
Ba dum tiss.
Everyone's laughing at the "masturbation" joke and here I am still laughing at Big Mac being in Canterlot for the Summer Sun Celebration so he could fuck with Flim/Flam's rigged carny game and win the kite for Twilight.
His middle name though Hahaha!
That and BIg Mac winning the kite, adorableness!
Nicely done~
Did... did you make a Ferris Bueller reference AND a Simpsons reference here? Ugh. I freaking love you already.
I rather liked the "kite-flying" scene. I had often wondered about how, in Twilight's BBBFF song, she singles out "he taught me how to fly a kite" as an example of what a good big brother Shining is (though to be fair, judging from an early S7 episode, kites are a big deal to some ponies). It's nice to see that get some treatment, even if Big Mac outperformed poor Shining in that regard. If I didn't know better I would have thought this was the start of a TwiMac story.
Don't worry Twiley, I'm sure your future student Starlight won't mind teaching you a thing or too about kites.
Probably came up with it while ditching school.
Now finally reading, as I told you I would at Bronycon, with feedback. I'll probably save most for the end, only commenting per chapter if anything grabs my eye.
Sp a c in g
Comma instead of the first period.
Oh Celestia save me.
Surprised as I am to see you here, thank you, Big Mac.
I'll bet that, while at the fair, Shining got his first taste of corndog. That was the beginning of something beautiful, life-changing, and totally gnarly. The good kind of gnarly.
9060937
No, someone just named it after him when they heard he was sick.
SAVE FERRIS!
This story is a nice read after Cat's Cradle.
Perhaps Celestia could create a Space Travel program so the Alicorns don't get themself in the same population trap that get them extinct like last time.
Terraforming for more planets