Octavia's life never did anything fun. Sometimes she feels like she's doomed to play the cello and study basic school skills for the rest of her life, all under the watchful eye of her strict mother. That is, until somepony pulls her out of
I'm really not sure what you're going for here. you've effectively taken away anything that gave Octavia joy or purpose in her life, including her talent. almost seems like she has nothing left. did you really want her to hit rock bottom, this much? when you have no friends, no family, nothing to bring joy to your life, suicide could end up being the only solution left.
Vinyl basically, called out Octavia's snooty behavior, attacked her talent, then walked away. If Vinyl seems to know what Octavia's problem is, why did you have her tell Octavia she deserves to be a miserable pony with nothing to hope for? No empathy at all from Vinyl so far. Does Octavia really look like she's able to reach out to anyone at this point? She may not last much longer without help, so unless you want to add the tags, Sad or Tragic, to your story, I hope the next chapter starts to pull Octavia out of her slump of just living.
Oh ye of little faith. For Octavia to grow, she must first crumble. You cannot build upon a broken foundation. It will get better, but it won't be easy for her by any means.
well frankly i have to say tavi deserved that
so much for making friends with pinkie, when pinkie hears about this, well see pinkiemena's reaction to octavia, can't see AJ responding well too.
I like, and I'm fine with Tavi being brown
I'm really not sure what you're going for here. you've effectively taken away anything that gave Octavia joy or purpose in her life, including her talent. almost seems like she has nothing left. did you really want her to hit rock bottom, this much? when you have no friends, no family, nothing to bring joy to your life, suicide could end up being the only solution left.
Vinyl basically, called out Octavia's snooty behavior, attacked her talent, then walked away. If Vinyl seems to know what Octavia's problem is, why did you have her tell Octavia she deserves to be a miserable pony with nothing to hope for? No empathy at all from Vinyl so far. Does Octavia really look like she's able to reach out to anyone at this point? She may not last much longer without help, so unless you want to add the tags, Sad or Tragic, to your story, I hope the next chapter starts to pull Octavia out of her slump of just living.
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Oh ye of little faith. For Octavia to grow, she must first crumble. You cannot build upon a broken foundation. It will get better, but it won't be easy for her by any means.
Anthro tag has been added if you're interested.
Um...If you don't mind me asking, when will the actual romance be coming in? So far it's just Vinyl pushing Octavia to suicide.