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Corruption

On a trip, to the gem caverns, to gather gems for he most current project. Rarity learns some things that makes her look at Equestria and the princesses in a completely new way.

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Impress Me

Impress Me #1 · Mar 14th, 2013 · · ·

This fic seems to have potential but it has a lot of flaws. I'd be happy to give a review, but the only thing I'm going to suggest is proofreading your story as thoroughly as possible.

Toothless the Night Fury

Toothless the Night Fury #2 · Mar 14th, 2013 · · ·

2263921
Especially the description. People don't want to read a story if they see a grammar mistake on the first line.

WaffleStalker

WaffleStalker #3 · Mar 14th, 2013 · 1 · ·

2264147>>2263921 I just realised I posted this without anypony reading through it first... Last fanfic i was all over that. Well I wrote this at 6AM with nothing else better to do so I'm thinking I'll take it down for the time being and repost t once I've, you know, read through it myself at a time where I'm not in some sort of complete daze. Thanks for reading through it though if you're still interested in the story after my, I can only assume, horrid grammar feel free to follow tell I have it back up. I'll get on to fixing it as soon as I have the time, I work and writing comes second.

Redwolf777sg

Redwolf777sg #4 · Oct 2nd, 2015 · · ·

Mmm.... This story does need some thorough proofreading and it also needs more spacing between paragraphs because right now they're way too close together. But other then that, I think you got something that would make an interesting AU story and I'm being quite honest here.