Might be cool.

Let's see where this goes.

Prototype crossover?
If it is you better make it kill a lot of ponies...

2216414 Not a cross-over, just a cool pic.

One question: How does a mortal intend to kill a Goddess? Other then that I'm very much hoping that this is a Prototype crossover, I LOVE those games. Damn, so even a Goddess is not safe from Celestia and Luna when they wish to bring war huh? Odd how the human just appeared, I'm honestly not one for HIE, but if this is a Prototype crossover and as long as Derpy Hooves is hopefully in this and of course, you being a good author friend of mine then I guess I can give it a chance

Shit, I want to hear how this whole war started, but this honestly needs an editor, it was very hard to read, I would suggest getting one before you continue bro. Other then that I'm really hoping to see this go forward, I'm guessing or at least hoping you'll add a bit of Spilight knowing how big of a fan you are yourself of said pairing? This is going to be good, the human seems like he could use a smoke and a drink

Buck it, I'm down.

So the narrator would be referred to as human? This reminds me of Spartan: Total Warrior, where the main character is called Spartan.

2216416 i just got a idea because of that it could be rune magic of he gets deformed during his escape or something

2216426 Strange, Sweetapplejacker said it was easy to read. Also, it's not a Prototype crossover. If it were, Crossover would be on there with Dark, Adventure and all the others. I might put Derpy in there, although, it would be difficult turning her evil. It was hard enough to darken Fluttershy without copying more tumblr blogs.

Give him a hunger foor ponies sweet sweet ponies

2217237 You kidding? This guy's gonna go through ponies like Starkiller goes through Stormtroopers (granted, not with the same skills, more lik Prototype, but it still isn't a crossover).

uhhhhhhh sounds great, TRAKING!!

how old was he when he got there?

2217452 22, but Equestria has a way of slowing the ageing process. IDK how.

Kickass dude!

Well another Grimm story out. Its not like i have anything else to do that is important. MEH read now work later.

2220242 That's what I like to hear, lol

Fuck yeah. Dude. I need more of this. I. NEED. MOAR!

I love it mate keep up the good work

Finally, there’s Pinkamena Diane Pie. Easily the fearsomest of them all, her pink fur does little to mask her sadistic appearance. Darkened by blood, her mane and tail are straighter than the bars on my cell. Her eyes are constantly watching, never changing, and her smile could frighten the Cheshire cat. When discovered to have had the unnatural ability to appear wherever and whenever she wanted, the princesses ordered her execution, but no matter how many soldiers were sent forth, they all returned just in time to die horribly in some manner. The princesses’ army had been reduced to a tenth before they gave up her execution and hired her instead. Despite her nature, she holds her friends close to her heart and will destroy anyone who threatens her friends.

What do you mean by that? Is it "total military strength is 10%" or "TMS went down ten percent"?

went down it seems

yo the first link is down you should fix it good sir.

12 years without meat? Yeeeeaaaaah, no. Assuming that the prisoner getting rotting vegetables for food isn't getting a side of protein pills, he's got about 70 days to live. Seriously, what's with these writers not understanding that extreme protein deficiency is lethal? It seems that this whole "vegetarianism 'cause ponies" thing is really fuckin' stupid, when the protein isn't supplimented by something else. Check yo'self befo' you reck yo'self.

Other than that, story seems good. Sucks that my suspension of disbelief ends at unnecessarily incorrect things, and is as fragile as fine china with brittle bone disease.