Ugh, you stopped when it was getting good. I take it Alow goes both ways? If so.... And I had no idea Twilight could be very naughty, but then again, I don't read clop stuff a lot, and I'm not sure if this counts as clop per se but it's interesting for sure. I hope Ron will get a clue and treat that Lotus girl right.
Hmm I wonder what is this mysterious stallion Lotus is talking about? Oh well I wish her luck with that. One question, if Photo Finish wants him to post for a calendar, shouldn't her first ask for his permission? Oh Finish will offer him a job as part time model? He can use the extra cash, and I want to see Princess Celestia hiding a Ron Calendar under her bed…for research reasons
I must say, this is interesting. I am not one for clop really, I'll only read it if it benefits the story, accents it. I am also not one for the "telling" point of view, I prefer showing. I am not a body builder, yet since I was 7, every winter I go out into the bush with my uncles and father, and we cut, chop, load wood for 14-17 hours twice a week. So while not a body builder, I do have a considerable amount of muscle mass and I can understand and appreciate what is being said. In short, you have my attention. Proceed. (Umm, if that is okay with you)
I stopped working out half a year ago, since I reached my full muscle 'level'. Nowadays, I just run, climb and do some sparring with my brother... which only ends with a bleeding hand, tongue or hurt kidneys on from my side... yeah... By the way, I liked that awkward moment with Twilight. He doesn't afraid to show himself in a situation like that, since he still sees them as another specie. But when he gets a hard... just perfect. This story is promising me more of these... right?
2214061 "Suck the syrup fresh with their tongues"... This is TERRIBLE! What I am hearing you say is we need to kill all the squirrels to save the sweet, delicious syrup, oh the sweet maple syrup. Rub it all over my body!
I like the last two chapters. One of which that despite him being on Equestria for a couple of years, he still doesn't get the name correctly of some ponies,case in point: Vinyl Scratch. What's also nice too is that he doesn't like everything one he meets, especially if its a mare like Scratch, as most HiE would have their human characters be friends with only female ponies and not male ponies. Which is refreshing to see that even Ron have circle of friends that are guys. Funny to how indirect he got Lotus sad and stuff.
I like this chapter as Aloe doesn't even try to get Ron sexually aroused but it happen anyways, even show some restraint where (begrudgingly one would assume) that he decline having an intimate moment with Aloe. Again, two thumps up, at the very least it show that Ron is not desperate for a some action (maybe even a relationship)... yet
Overall I like this fanfic, despite some flaws with formatting and grammar, I love the slice-of-life moments and many possible interest of romances. I'll be looking forward to seeing more of your work. Keep up the good work man
2214260 You Canadians must have great soles to go along with being so nice. I do not like running in boots since they go too far up my ankles and restrict running on the balls of my feet.
“Whatever you want Mr. Ron” she told me then led me to the mud bath area. Now I know it sounds stupid but for some reason mud baths were actually quite relaxing and rejuvenating. She left me alone and I slipped off my clothes, all of them, and crept into the mud bath.
Alright! We got some characters in this chapter! Let's get to it!
… “By Ron, see” – ‘By’ should be ‘Bye’. … “always straight forward and” – You should actually have ‘straight’ and ‘forward’ in one word: ‘straightforward’.
Hm! Impressive reduction considering the content, but that aside, nice work in general. The scene with the sauna could have used the act of pouring water on hot coals, but I suppose that the scene had enough content, at least for Twilight's tastes.
I liked the way Aloe was used in this chapter, as not only a means of discussing her sister, but also having a different personality that was clearly noticable. They're not quite 'opposites', but they're believably different, like one could still believe they were sisters despite their differences. I guess them being 'clone-copies' would have been more boring, anyways.
Rarity removing the towel... I would have believed. Then again, Twilight does have an awful lot that she seeks to 'study'.
Ron's still a bit ignorant, but at least Aloe opened his eyes more to the idea of what could be okay in Equestria, with regards to, essentially, a relationship with another sentient being, seeing past the 'physical' and hopefully becoming more accepting of what else there could be, beyond that.
I shall conclude this chapter review with the following statement: Lotus, stop peeping.
2314178 You do realize that a virgin is a virgin, regardless if said virgin is a nerd or not , right? Because even non-nerds can end up being virgins. People just don't expect that and just go by assumptions based off of stupid stereotypes.
2226135 So you're saying you've never had that type of thought when you came across an attractive girl, not even in the back of your mind, nor would you ever think something like that?
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Hmmm... I do say... this reminds me of someone vaguely familiar but I can't quite put my finger on it
2210314 win
2210314 win
Well Twilight is a perv. I am horny. and I have to go to bed... Nope gonna clop.
2210314 Thumbs up just for Johnny Bravo
Ugh, you stopped when it was getting good. I take it Alow goes both ways? If so.... And I had no idea Twilight could be very naughty, but then again, I don't read clop stuff a lot, and I'm not sure if this counts as clop per se but it's interesting for sure. I hope Ron will get a clue and treat that Lotus girl right.
Twilight wants the D......
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Oh please make a love triangle between Lotus, Ron, and Twilight. Please oh please oh please oh please oh please OH PLEASE!
No. Just no. You should really take that out, and just leave the interspeceses stuff with just sentient/sapient races.
2210314I agree with u on that one
What uploading madness is this? 7 chapters in one day?
2210593 Screw that, add Aloe as well and make it a square. This guy's like a modest Duke Nukem, he should get all the babes. lol
10 K in one day?!
2210314
And in this chapter shit gets real.
2210314 FUCKING LOVE JOHNY BRAVO!
Hmm I wonder what is this mysterious stallion Lotus is talking about? Oh well I wish her luck with that.
One question, if Photo Finish wants him to post for a calendar, shouldn't her first ask for his permission? Oh Finish will offer him a job as part time model? He can use the extra cash, and I want to see Princess Celestia hiding a Ron Calendar under her bed…for research reasons
I'll follow this but it does seem a bit average at the moment.
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But squirrels are just so damn cute.
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2212704 Google image my friend.
I must say, this is interesting.
I am not one for clop really, I'll only read it if it benefits the story, accents it.
I am also not one for the "telling" point of view, I prefer showing.
I am not a body builder, yet since I was 7, every winter I go out into the bush with my uncles and father, and we cut, chop, load wood for 14-17 hours twice a week. So while not a body builder, I do have a considerable amount of muscle mass and I can understand and appreciate what is being said.
In short, you have my attention. Proceed.
(Umm, if that is okay with you)
I stopped working out half a year ago, since I reached my full muscle 'level'. Nowadays, I just run, climb and do some sparring with my brother... which only ends with a bleeding hand, tongue or hurt kidneys on from my side... yeah...
By the way, I liked that awkward moment with Twilight. He doesn't afraid to show himself in a situation like that, since he still sees them as another specie. But when he gets a hard... just perfect. This story is promising me more of these... right?
2212978 I think Ron is a pretty cool guy and doesn't afraid of anything.
2213411 Exactly! I mean, he defeated Iron Will! A BULL!
a Minotaur.......
2212679 I have to admit your comment made me laugh.
2214004
I do so enjoy spreading mirth!
2214061
"Suck the syrup fresh with their tongues"... This is TERRIBLE! What I am hearing you say is we need to kill all the squirrels to save the sweet, delicious syrup, oh the sweet maple syrup. Rub it all over my body!
I like the last two chapters. One of which that despite him being on Equestria for a couple of years, he still doesn't get the name correctly of some ponies,case in point: Vinyl Scratch. What's also nice too is that he doesn't like everything one he meets, especially if its a mare like Scratch, as most HiE would have their human characters be friends with only female ponies and not male ponies. Which is refreshing to see that even Ron have circle of friends that are guys. Funny to how indirect he got Lotus sad and stuff.
I like this chapter as Aloe doesn't even try to get Ron sexually aroused but it happen anyways, even show some restraint where (begrudgingly one would assume) that he decline having an intimate moment with Aloe. Again, two thumps up, at the very least it show that Ron is not desperate for a some action (maybe even a relationship)... yet
Overall I like this fanfic, despite some flaws with formatting and grammar, I love the slice-of-life moments and many possible interest of romances. I'll be looking forward to seeing more of your work. Keep up the good work man
Best regards.
I fail to see any full stops at the end of speeches, in all the chapters :/
Eg: "Yes I will. Until your next visit"
Correct way: "Yes I will. Until your next visit."
Fix this auth then I shall up vote.
Rut her like a wild animal.
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You Canadians must have great soles to go along with being so nice. I do not like running in boots since they go too far up my ankles and restrict running on the balls of my feet.
Ugg when is it going to get to the cloppy part? Just kidding great story keep it up!
2210466 no this isnt clop.
THIS is clop
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7507467/1/Royal-pleasures
There better be another chapter as soon as you can deliver because this is just too DAMN good
2212745 Oh ma lawdey that got me good
Really good chapter.
Good buildup. Like, really good. Liking the actual story elements. Also naughty Princess Twilight is now best Princess Twilight, hehe.
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Well somebody needs a psychoanalysis
"Rut her. Rut her like a wild bull and fill her with your seed’.
2226135 Hahahaha.Lol.
2210342 Win Everywhere
Alright! We got some characters in this chapter! Let's get to it!
… “By Ron, see” – ‘By’ should be ‘Bye’.
… “always straight forward and” – You should actually have ‘straight’ and ‘forward’ in one word: ‘straightforward’.
Hm! Impressive reduction considering the content, but that aside, nice work in general. The scene with the sauna could have used the act of pouring water on hot coals, but I suppose that the scene had enough content, at least for Twilight's tastes.
I liked the way Aloe was used in this chapter, as not only a means of discussing her sister, but also having a different personality that was clearly noticable. They're not quite 'opposites', but they're believably different, like one could still believe they were sisters despite their differences. I guess them being 'clone-copies' would have been more boring, anyways.
Rarity removing the towel... I would have believed. Then again, Twilight does have an awful lot that she seeks to 'study'.
Ron's still a bit ignorant, but at least Aloe opened his eyes more to the idea of what could be okay in Equestria, with regards to, essentially, a relationship with another sentient being, seeing past the 'physical' and hopefully becoming more accepting of what else there could be, beyond that.
I shall conclude this chapter review with the following statement: Lotus, stop peeping.
‘Rut her'
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[](/dyel)?
It's always the nerds, isn't it?
Why is this guy always working out anyway? A virgin who pumps iron all the time, sounds like he's making up for something, no?
2314178 You do realize that a virgin is a virgin, regardless if said virgin is a nerd or not , right? Because even non-nerds can end up being virgins. People just don't expect that and just go by assumptions based off of stupid stereotypes.
2226135 So you're saying you've never had that type of thought when you came across an attractive girl, not even in the back of your mind, nor would you ever think something like that?