Applebloom discovers her cutie mark in potion making by discovering a potion that can cure death itself, but learns the hard way that some forces of nature should not be meddled with; Death being one.
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Oh god... Am I gonna cry you bastard XD. Anyways, I thought i'd provide a review for you, so you know the drill, wait in anticipation as I finish the story and I will get back to you.
Well now, this is interesting. To my shame, I've never read Herbert West: Re-Animator, but Apple Bloom as a Lovecraftian corpse-raising mad alchemist definitely got my attention and there aren't too many errors (did spot a lower-case 'i' though) so I'll keep an eye on this one.
This bothered me a little, ya might wanna fix it.
Wow, that was interesting to say the least. There are a few beefs I have, but I understand. First, I feel like Applebloom and Sweetie Belle were both out of character. More because they are life long friends, and even when one of them got a cutie mark, they wouldn't just let each other sink. They are friends for life man. As for Applebloom's Cutie mark, i have my doubts she is good at potion making. I could see maybe cooking, carpentry, or something mechanical, but potion making... I mean it could work, but it's unlikely that that would be her destiny. Now that being said, you have a really cool concept. I like zombies, and it would be interesting to see the CMC fend themselves off from a zombie attack. This is one of the few first person stories that worked out beautifully, you have the talent to build descriptions from that perspective, and you set the tone very well. A few things to point out, there are a few stumbles you had, you might wanna go back through and read it out loud to yourself, it will alleviate a lot of the silly typos you had. I have 'em too. Sweeties thoughts don't really seem like Sweetie, but then again this is a accountancy of an event that had happened, so she is older. Still, you should go back and fix her up to be a little less out of character. You really have the set up for something cool, and I'm sure there are some that would disagree. As for me, congrats. You have a pretty good something here, keep it up. If you need help, feel free to send me a message. Now, the mean part XD
Final Verdict: Fucking Ponies meddling in mortal affairs, they should know better...
You sir have made me very happy! Herbert West is with out a doubt my favorite mad scientist ever; and to see that roll go to Applebloom......
I'm normally not into gore or dark pony fics, but no way can I pass this up. Part one was hauntingly good, can't wait to see what horrors await next.
Anticipating this:
WHERE'S THE REST OF ME?!
I have to admit, I got a very guilty laugh out of Apple Bloom beating the re-animated Granny Smith with a shovel, but overall I have to say that you're doing a good job of making this really creepy.
“You killed your grandma with a shovel?!”
I laughed so hard at that....I am ashamed. Anyway, loved chapter two and the quick passe the story is moving at. I have no idea what happened last night, but one thing is for sure, it wasn't good. This is why Applebloom doesn't get invited to parties!
"they had to seduce her" .... thats is a horrific thought, I think you mean sedate.
2201392 lol, yes
A great read and a real tragic ending, Fantastic work. And who knows, maybe Sweetie Belle saw wrong, maybe whatever horrors she saw in that cellar caused her mind to break and she just thinks she saw the end of Applebloom. Maybe one day the young mare will return to re-animate once more. Here's to hoping
I wonder if the vore scene from "The Return Of Chrysalis" Arc in the IDW Comics was the catalyst for making AppleBloom the Re-Animator? You know, her feeling bad for that dead Love Cat and trying to figure out how to bring it back to life?
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I had not read the comic yet when I wrote this, so no.
I'll be honest: the grammar in this isn't perfect. But damn, dude, that was great. You really captured the creepy, unsettling tone of Lovecraft's work. I, for one, think that you did a great job with this story.
...even at the prize of having to lie to her when she asked me why I had been crying.
Might want to change that but AWESOME story so far!
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Thanks :)
Please tell me this is based on Herbert West.
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It is. :)
6867908 You have no idea how hard it is to find good lovecraftian fiction. I'm so excited.
Oh Christ, this is genius.