H-yo-..How are you popular?!

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Dude Pegasi will rule kicks ass great first chapter oh and his halo stories are awesome and the eris stories is also along with l4d story woooo.

2268360 Whoa, internet bullying is a real thing!
I dunno, I just do stuff and things happen. I can't quite explain it.

Lovin this story already!

Wow, that certainly escalated quickly. Not to say that the story is bad in anyway. I suspect the fast pace is because of comedy?

I've lost count on how many H.i.E starts with getting kicked in the balls by Applejack. Maybe they should just create a dating sim, with that as the first encounter...

I guess I'll continue to follow it, not that I am a huge fan of explicit and mature content between humans and ponies but, it was pretty funny in a way.

So good so far

Your scene work is... shoddy. Your MC gets tackled several feet while he is still on the ground then his clothes teleport onto him for him to dust them off, for example. Just because two or more characters are talking does not mean the physical world stops existing.

2359050 I fixed that a long time ago, but it was when fimfiction was having saving issues, so it didn't save. I'm reediting it now, much to my chagrin.

I'm gonna have to say no to this story.... seems a little Gary stu...

wow doing AJ already that is quick and it was within the first 7,800 words as well that was a bit quick

LETS GO TO EQUESTRIA AND FUCK EVERYTHING 2: FUCK HARDER

This is a good story especially since my real name is Nate

Re read the first chapter it went from zero to fuck too fast.

Ok, so different start.