An alicorn who can't remember his past is found near Ponyville. As the Mane 6 try to help this pony, dangers arise left and right. Who is pony? How did he get here? Will Twilight and her friends ever figure out this pony's past?
(Fan-Made Cover Art by Shayden. It was his first ever pony art.)
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NO.
Can we not do this today?
You must be new here.
Oh dear. Here we go again. Alicorn amnesia? I've heard that before. Also, use the Author's Notes function, for Celestia's sake. No-one wants to know about the bits they won't get, because then if they come across a strange part of the story they know what's coming next.
Read before you write, please. Please.
Sorren would be displeased.
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I read the first chapter, didn't like it, sorry
Alicorn with amnesia suddenly appears in Ponyville with no back story and no real explanation or build up to explain his presence in the town and Luna is going to meet the six for no real reason? sorry but no
I'm sorry, but I don't think I'm going to bother reading this.
Tell me, does he have a Black/Red color scheme? Please don't tell me he has that color scheme.
...foul?
Foal.
Sorry, Foal, not foul or fowl
I'm guessing Spellcheck's autoreplace is responsible for that one... Not a bad start for a first-timer, BTW.
This is doing well for a first story.
I hope you will take these minor tweaks in the friendly manner I mean them. 
One thing to remember though is the Mane 6 have never been called that In-Show so many may think it a bit out of character for Celestia and the girls to say that.
"..Celestia looked at the Mane 6 as she said this and they all smiled and nodded. "Me and Luna shall stay in Ponyville to oversee your progress for awhile. If you ever need us, just look around town." (Me - I)
Even as casual as Celestia tries to be when she thinks she can get away with it. She will use proper grammar if for nothing else than to keep her Nobles from having an anurisim.
A MALE alicorn with amnesia, I've read enough shit here to know where it's going to go.
When I read the title, I thought this was going to be about Soarin the Wonderbolt, not an OC with a phonetically similar name. Of course, I read this after reading a "Bon Bon becomes an alicorn" fic, so...
Poor Soren.
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I have not read this, but tell me; does this relate in any way to The Owls of Ga'Hoole? I'm sorry, but it just seems too suspicious. I mean, the main character's name is Soren, and your username has Nyroc in it.
The names are, yes. I'm not very creative when it comes to new names.
2110177 Yup. I don't like random alicorn inserts with the mane six and princesses.
Heheheheheh...
NOPE.
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Alicorns are Mary Sues by default. They're the living example of a Deus ex Machina. Add to that the stench of a self-insert and you've got a perfect storm of crap.
Lost a reader, got a dislike.
This story was just as entertaining as the movie batman and robin
So foreboding... I SHALL CONTINUE READING NOW
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your profile pic has scarred me for life
suspense... it is the bane of my existence......
but so is cookie dough ice cream
i thought little strongheart was a colt
Its not spelled Foul or Fowl, It's foal.
illegal