It marked exactly one year since the death of Twilight. For a while her friends and family thought that life wouldn't be able to go on without her. It made no sense. How odd it was to not see her in the library any more. Their were no more adventures with Twilight for her friends. No more family visits to the Crystal Empire to see Shining Armour and Cadance and no more friendship reports delivered to Princess Celestia.
As fate would had it the one year anniversary of Twilight's death was a Sunday, and Fluttershy was at the place where her wife had been lain to rest; as she was every Sunday. It was there day after all. Every time she went she promised she wouldn't cry, and every time she broke that promise. It was no different that day. As she laid the lone lavender flower on Twilight's grave the tears took over and she spent several minutes crying. When she finally calmed down she began talking. She would never know if Twilight could hear her, but it made her feel better to think that Twilight could. She spoke about everything and nothing. Then silence took over, only briefly though.
"I miss you, you know? I think about you every day and what our lives would be like if you'd stayed. I feel so empty now and I think the others do too. Nopony talks about it because by now we're expected to have moved on but I don't think we have. I know I haven't. I never even got to tell you how pretty you looked in your dress." The tears came again. She knew they would. " You were the most beautiful bride a pony could have asked for. And I never got to tell you it was thanks to you that I mangaed to stand up to Darklight. In a way you saved yourself, because it was your strength that made me strong. And- And I still love you. As much as the day you kissed me in the library. It's so hard to be without you now Twilight. And I feel so bad because I feel like I'm forgetting things about you. I forget the way you felt in my legs when we'd wake up tangled together. This is gonna sound weird but I can't smell you on the pillow you'd sleep on any more but I know that it comforted me for a long time after you were gone. So many things about you are leaving, and if one more pony tells me I need to move one I think I'm going to scream."
There was more, of course. There always was. Fluttershy had a lifetime worth of things to tell Twilight. Saying them all at once was hard though, so that was enough for now. "I miss you...." Fluttershy finished lamely. "I'm trying to move on but it's so hard. Maybe one day I won't feel the need to come here all the time, but I feel like that would be wrong. Like somehow I didn't really love you, which I do..." Fluttershy sighed. "Oh, Twilight...I'll come back to visit you soon, okay? I love you."
Fluttershy turned around and began walking away. As she always did she glanced behind her once. Of course Twilight wasn't standing there, smiling at her. She wished she was though. She turned around and kept walking, making her way home. One day she would have to let go. It was all part of moving on.
I for one think its a great idea.
Go for it! If you do make the sequel I look forward to reading it.
So,
MORE NOW!
It was really good. But please, for the love of Luna put a sad tag in there.
Fluttershy needs to be haunted by Twilight's ghost in the sequel, or at least her memories of Twilight.
This story was so sad!
If you can make the sequel work... Go for it.
Otherwise, let it be.
Finally... Very well done. I shed a tear... Or bucketful.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Depressing end. Expected, decently written but still.
Not too bad.
A couple of things though.
The whole changelings crash the wedding section felt rather outta place. The same with the princess being inexplicably late. It seemed to be there just for a outta nowhere plot twist.
you could make a sequel work
you have the literary skills to do it
Let us dry our tears before you write a sequel. It's a fine idea but I want time to dry my tears
" It was there day after all." their
Nice ending should've had the whole crew at her grave but flutters is more than enough i guess
A sequel is a good idea but can you plz not make it this sad, let at least Fluttershy have some happiness in the end.
It was good while it lasted
That .. was sad. (Worst comment opening in a while )
Anyhow.
First of all. This was a great fic. You seem to really have thought through the disease claiming Twilight, and how it should affect her. As mentioned in an earlier comments, it also added a whole bit of tension into the reading, only seeing the effects from Twilights view. I mean, we got to read Twilight talking/fighting against Darklight, but we only got that much. Eh, I mean we didn't see it from say Fluttershys perspective, watching Twilight ramble stuff or start hurting herself. Too see it just from Twilights view did a lot for the tension and, hm, "action" in the fic.
(SPOILERS, if you haven't read it!)
The way this turned out. I guess, it was inevitable for a fic with this direction. It didn't make it any less sad though. But you did a nice job on letting Twilight be herself at the end, and also made some characters feel pity for Darklight. I mean, when you put the info in that light, how can you hate a creature that was created for just negative emotions? Oh well, well played there
Another thing I want to add is that this fic is amongst the first Twilight-/Fluttershy-ships I've read. You did a great work on it, and, making Fluttershy more sure of herself (even if for Twilight) as Twilight got worse, was really nice to read.
So, summing up: I really liked this fic, you already had a like and fav from me, now have a watch too
And lastly. About a sequel. I'm not against the idea, it sounds like a good idea seeing how the rest of pony..dom? will coope with this, if that is what you wanted the sequel to be about. As someone mentioned earlier though, even if fics this sad a good, some hope or happyness for Fluttershy would be appreciated, then again, it might change the direction of this fic too much, so, eh, dont listen to me anyway
Thanks for writing this and putting it up for everyone to enjoy!
M
Finally. Stretched the 'long painful death' out a little far, don't you think?
OH CELESTIA.... I was on the verge of tears reading this....
I thought I was gonna be right... OH HOW WRONG I WAS!! You know how much thought I put into that plot twist? Not very much but I was just hoping I would be right... Then I wouldn't be sad in chemistry right now
*ocular gushing*
It was enjoyable for me. Until the end that is. I began thinking Twilight would pulverise Darklight in to a soft gooey version unable to speak let alone harm her friends. But I'm biased. I don't like sad endings unless it leaves some hope open.
In my opinion it could have became a happy ending. May even have got more tears by turning it around.
I think a sequel where Fluttershy resurrects the dead would be interesting. Where she also gets back Darklight... But I'm crazy so don't listen to me.
I'm sure I'm not the only one who kinda hoped this would turn out allright in the end, maybe even having Darklight take over or some kinda mind-sharing thing till they figured out a way out of it, but sadly no. Great story, not much I can think of for a sequel but I'll try it if you make it.
I think Fluttershy would cope with loss even worse the way that you displayed in here, probably isolate herself with her animals. Just the way she is.
Rest in Peace, Twilight Sparkle. One of the greatest, most noble ponies who ever lived
If you do follow up on that sequel, take your tame and don't feel rushed. We'll be waiting for the feels
I cannot say I didn't enjoy this story.
However, I cannot say I enjoyed it to the best of my ability.
This story was obviously going to end with Twilight's death, but I feel that this sort of story should either have a sequel about twilight coming back through strange means, or it simply ends.
No more tears, no more sadness.
I'm sorry, I'm so so sorry.
Got me right in the feels
A very sad end. Not much hope for happiness for Fluttershy. There is only the promise that she will be able to move on one day. It really hit hard that she is scared of that day, since she's concerned that she will no longer love Twilight. It felt really sad that Fluttershy was beginning to forget certain things. The feel of Twilight's body, her scent on her pillow. One day, she might even forget her voice, and that, I imagine, is the scariest prospect of all.
A sequel would be welcome, especially if its focus is on Fluttershy finding the strength to move on. It will be a heartwrencher, but I really want to see Fluttershy heal. Of course, there is no need to rush a sequel. I'll be rereading this for a while still.
Well, more sad.
BIF BAF BAM feels please stop beating me it hurts.
The description doesn't fit (twilight never looks for the cure) and that kinda ruined the story a bit for me.
The whole time I was wondering when she would start looking for the cure (even if she was doomed to fail)
This IS a great story, but I must say... I bucking hate you right now!
There were plenty of inexplicable cures you could have thrown together, but you just let her die.
Where is the love my friend? (Why is there no sad Twilight emote?!!)
zombie twilight perhaps?
You just made me cry harder then any other story ever ;_; I'm glad I decided to wait for this story to be finished before reading it. I sincerely look forward to another story
Ouch... Ouch...
Ouch...
</3 DarqFox
give me twilight back
A second one?.....Hmmmm....only if she goes into a deep depression and kills herself to be with Twilight, Fluttershy is my favorite of the Mane Six but you can't expect to seriously move on from shit like this, life is not some damned fairy tail, she needs to either find somepony else to love, go into drugs and drinking or kill herself, you just can't seriously think that a pony like Shy would be perfectly fine with Twi's death...also, where the BUCK did Spike go? Now that's depressing, I need a smoke
As you can no doubt tell, I'm naturally dark hearted so I did not cry but I'm already upset enough with the ending that I KNOW is going to happen 10,000 times, sorry bro, I'm just pissed, I'm going for a smoke, all in all a 8/10.
This wasn't a bad fic by any stretch of the imagination, but I have to agree with at few of the other comments in that this isn't the story that the summary promises.
And... Again I'm late to reading this. Probably the only chapter that's managed to bring me to tears, if only slightly.
Great job, Kaii.
this story was so good bro...dude you like hit my emotions soooo hard and I NEVER cry but you just wrote everything so well and such a good story line and plot..its jus-, just great job GREAT job.
This story is making me cry, it's beautiful. You should do that sequel, I know I'd read it in a heartbeat.
Thank you... This was beautiful... Just thanks...
Beautiful isn't enough to describe this. No word in any language i know is...
2237911 Are you a complete idiot? People move on from their loved ones dying all the damn time, every day. Not everyone is weak and pathetic enough to turn to suicide over something like a dead lover; something that I have helped a friend through before. If you have support from people that care about you, then turning to self-harm and abusing your body with drugs and alcohol is nothing more than an insult to those people.
Fluttershy needs to move on. She knew Twilight for like three years? and had been married for a night? Fluttershy does deserve to spend the rest of her life pining over her deceased newlywed. She should still remember Twilight for sure, but should also move on.
I have nothing to say except. Bravo you got water out of me few can do that. I will with a lot of willpower read the sequel to and wish you all the luck in the future. And i also hope you write more TwiShy because you are one of those authors on hear that knows how to write those two as a couple, not even i can write them that well.
Good job 9,5/10
Now if you'll excuse me i have to go lay down with a tissue box close by for a couple of hours
~Tobben
2277008 For real? No one EVER truly moves on after their loved ones die, at least before they reunite in the afterlife.
I'm crying right now. You are one of the few writers who have gotten my water works going. Congratulations.