In this story, Pinkie shares a retelling of her life as an immortal. The idea came to me over the past few days and so I decided to write it down. This is the first story in what is now my "Immortal Suffering" series.
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Hm...I'm not sure - it reads a little too apathetically. She sounds kind of distanced from the whole affair.
Not gonna thumb you down or anythin; I'm just saying.
A really good story right here. Brilliant work.
1953818 Thanks! Glad you liked it.
1953804 I was going for distracted so I suppose mission successful?
i was expecting cupcakes v. 485345489385943
but i got this story instead
good job
1953931 Haha lack of gore tag shoulda been a dead giveaway that it wasn't another cupcake in the tin.
Ah yes, immortality is never as nice as it seems, found that out ever since I played Lost Odyssey. Great read though, loved it.
1954025 Yeaa... People are always going on about how great immortality would be but living forever isn't what would make it great. It's doing things you enjoy forever that makes it great. If you have nothing to live for, if you've fulfilled all your goals and desires, then there's really nothing left unless you can find new goals.
They say laughter makes you live longer... Ever heard of that? If the answer is "yes" then you can easily imagine the reaction of my realization. Fourth wall breaking and all.
Now where's my box of mustaches? What do you mean we only have FOUR?! Dang it, I have to grow another don't I?
1955310 O.o errr wha?
1955335 I get that a lot.
1955345 I understood the first part and I was like
but then I got to the end and I was all like 
Honestly, the story was a great idea and pulled off well. I like the shift in mood at the end as well.
1957214 Thanks! I wasn't entirely sure about leaving that part in but I figured why not? People like epilogues and so the epilogue remained.
Wow... I have no words... other than I really enjoyed this one!
1962639 Thanks! Glad you liked it.
I love this story
but the feels when it explained how every pony died 
1964790 YUP!
1965780 Haha1
1966062 T'was quite the experience writing this one.
1966227 I'm sure it was c: I'm not trying to promote anything >_< But could you maybe read my stories?
1966304 I'll be honest, I actually can't stand reading sad/tragic/downer stuff
it really screws with my head and makes me all emo and stuff (and then I have to write said sad/tragic/downer stuff as a form of release). It goes so far that I almost couldn't finish this because I was feeling a lot more stable by the time I got to the end. Kinda sucks being a slave to your emotions when you're trying to be a writer 
I will say this — it takes quite the willpower to remain somewhere for 127 years just to kill oneself.
1967654 One of the benefits of being 2000 years old is you learn how to wait XP also, Chaos Trance is a great way to spend a day.
1969022
Well my point actually was that for most things, it is an instant of choice at the right time to cause an action. There she had to be committed over that long a period without sizable second thoughts. At any point something could have happened in the world, her heart, or anything to change her mind. And that includes being in chaos trance. She needed to not only make the decision but for the span of 127 years not either chicken out of it (and I would figure as the body is breaking down you have more of a reason to chicken out than when you started) or change one's mind. It shows a determination that I daresay most would not possess.
1969398 Good point actually and that really is quite a large hole in the story. Course with one little additional word and some word of god provided by yours truly, I can say that the process took ~2 years and then she lived in the hut for an additional half a year. the story was written in the last 28 days of her life; 1 day per paragraph. What I'd really like to do though is flesh out the story a little more; it just feels so unpolished. (Truth be told it IS unpolished. I didn't edit it, not even once, I finished writing then published it.)
Well then. Quite different from what i'm used to, quite interesting too. Keep it up, dude.
1984092 Thanks! I've been wanting to write one of these for each of the mane 6 but I haven't been in the mood to write anything like this... or anything at all for that matter ^_^'
ow
my heart
you break it
2004851 Its ok. Fluttershy loves you
Wow. Just... Wow. It is very difficult to make me cry, but you do it as easily as a rock falls to the ground.
2442541 Glad I could help! I think
One silent minut for mane six :(
Good story,i love happy endings.
Good job.