When a crash reveals how badly Rainbow Dash has been neglecting proper hoof care, her friends insist she get a hooficure. It's for her own good, after all! But why does the prospect seem to bother her so much? A concerned Fluttershy tries to help... and uncovers a painful secret she never suspected.
Rainbow has always kept her friends at foreleg's length -- can the two ponies' relationship survive such close contact?
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This... is mildly exciting.
.... Imma follow this!
Well! This is an interesting turn in the caring department, especially with Rainbow Dash. You really brought a unique and yet believable spin into the story element!
It makes sense too, that pegasus ponies would probably have to get their hooves trimmed on a regular basis if they're the kind not to walk everywhere like earth ponies and unicorns. Interesting...
I like it so far.
Me is gonna follow
I like how you started the story out here. I love how Rainbow Dash has that sappy side that she tries to hide.
On a side note, It looks like I learned something new about hooves.
this is actually a pretty interesting slice of life. wondering what the big deal is with rainbows fear of being looked over. you have the characters down pretty well especially twilights sciency speech, was actually scratching my head there lol. keep it up
Well this's different. Follow time.
I. Like it
Is it bad I had no problem whatsoever understanding any of this?
No?
Good, still a nerd//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png
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Hey, FIM makes eggheads cool! Twilight is proud of you:
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Thank you! The world Lauren Faust dreamed up for the show is both inspired and inspiring. So much is familiar, and yet transformed and made new by the ponies. I find the fantastical elements of the world to be fascinating, especially seeing how these elements are commonplace for the inhabitants of Equestria -- to the point where what we see as normal, such as plants and animals fending for themselves, is shunned by our little ponies as frightfully unnatural!
I want to explore their wondrous storybook world as much as I want to explore the show's beautifully-written characters.
(Joke) Alt. Title: Featured Contact: Yet Another Story Of Flutterdash
I could trim your hooves Rainbow Dash. As well as a few other things
keeping an eye on this
Brilliant, I love stories that focus on Ponies being Ponies rather than humans on all fours.
woah god damn
that's like child abuse or something
Poor Rainbow Dash.. seems like a plausible reason why she can be so touchy
First chapter: "I'm listening."
Second chapter: "I'm listening intently."
I want to see more of this. Also, what's the nest step up from intently? With all of my focus? Regardless, carry on.
She hates having her hooves touched cause a foalsitter abused her, by tickling?
I'd have gone a bit differently with that one
“So... your place or mine?” If you know what i mean
, i really like this story very well written.
Whoa just, whoa, caught me off by surprise, damn good story you got here,
1957653 my thoughts exactly
i love it and all, but i think the whole tickling thing was a little...anticlimax.
It's really really good, but i was just tihnking the secret was biggger than that. Was there meant to be any romance in it? 
anyway, u gedda like from me
Kind of strange that tickling would make Rainbow this nervous. Good story though, I can't wait for the next chapter!
I like it a lot can't wait till next chapter
Rainbow forced all of her emotions about what happened into a bottle and the bottle just shattered.
Wow ... just wow... that.. that was just intense man. holy shit.
i want more!
Hello, I am the author! Thank you for your interest in my fanfic, everyone! Your comments mean a lot to me, too!
I decided to split chapter 2 into two chapters, now Chapter 2 and Chapter 3. The next instalment starts in Chapter 4. My apologies for any confusion this may have caused.
Hello, I am the author! Thank you for your interest in my fanfic, everyone! Your comments mean a lot to me, too!
I decided to split chapter 2 into two chapters, now Chapter 2 and Chapter 3. The next instalment starts in Chapter 4. My apologies for any confusion this may have caused.
Awww.. very cute! Looks like they are starting to fall for each other
Wow...
This story needs more views, likes, favorites, whatever. This story here needs more recognition for being one of the most well written, emotionally charged flutterdash fics out there. And this is your first story too? No way, you have to have written something before this story. Just keep up the amazing work, please.
Tally Ho
Woo! It's ... probably not the most important thing to be taking away from this first chapter, nor should it have been the driving force of me to get to reading this, but ... ARMOUR! Non-U.S spelling always makes me smile.
It's horrible of me, I know. But there's just something awesome-looking about 'our' at the end of a word. Looks ... 20% cooler. ;)
Anyways, nice chapter! Good writing, good grammar, good storyline. Got all the good things. Definitely up for continuing this read.
A comfortably breezy chapter, with warm fluffy emotion. Very nice.
Well that's something I never knew about hooves. Fascinating.
As to the story in general, you're setting a mighty standard. I haven't spotted a spelling or grammar error yet, The plot is more or less original, and while I reconize a few tropes and tricks of the trade, you aren't relying on them and you're giving them all a fresh spin. Overall you're a breath of fresh air in a space that tends to get stale quickly. I'm looking forward to what you do next, best of luck.
I don't think that will work, Twilight.
What made you split the chapter?
Wow, this is a really great read. I'm enjoying it immensely AND I'm learning about real life pony biology! Excellent work, can't wait for more.
Aw, FlutterDash. My guilty pleasure: the ship I'd ship if I shipped, which I don't, but if I did, I would. Anyway, I'm enjoying this. So far, anyway, it's working nicely even as a friendship fic. To be scrupulously honest, the bits with Derpy weren't my favorite, but maybe they will be important later, and as I said, I'm enjoying it.
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The tone changed drastically part-way through. The first section (now its own chapter) has Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash chatting and spending a bit of time together (even if Rainbow does have a few anxieties), she second part quickly spirals down into something rather dark, and involves far more powerful emotions.
Also, all the Author's Notes related to the first section, and yet had to appear at the end of the second section. Given the humourous tone of some of those notes, they did not belong after a section in which Rainbow underwent a thorough emotional breakdown.
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Thank you for your honesty! If I may ask, what about the segment involving Derpy caused you to like it less than the rest of the narrative?
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Thank you so much for such warm praise! It's very encouraging because no, in point of fact I have not written much before this. The total number of creative writing pieces I have produced in my life can be counted on the fingers of one hand. Being a Twilight-level obsessively nit-picky perfectionist helps me work on the polish, but I have little actual experience, mostly because inspiration doesn't strike me often.
But the spectacular quality of My Little Pony: Friendship Is Magic has inspired us all, in one way or another.
Incidentally, Contact is already written, which is why I can post such frequent updates. I have an idea or two to work on afterwards, but any interested readers will need a lot more patience between updates!
This is really cute.
You seem to have an excellent grasp of the world and the characters as well as a lot of really cool pony knowledge. I eagerly await the next chapter. Also, I'm a total sucker for Derpy so I really enjoyed that bit. 
Yeah why did you split 'em?
neat! i learned things!
Great chapter, very, very cute
Can't wait for the next one
Croup is also a nasty infection that swells the trachea and larynx. It's really hard to breath. I should know I had it when I was a kid. I used to nearly panic every time i had an episode of it.
It kinda hurt, like really bad
Sorry you saying the word croup reminded me of those memories
1963458 I think it was that it could be so easily taken out of the story, and the pregnancy details felt unnecessary, but maybe I'm missing something and it's just because pregnancy details squick me a bit. Still, it was nice for her to be included, and I like the story as a whole.
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The tone changed drastically part-way through. The first section (now its own chapter) has Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash chatting and spending a bit of time together (even if Rainbow does have a few anxieties), she second part quickly spirals down into something rather dark, and involves far more powerful emotions.
Also, all the Author's Notes related to the first section, and yet had to appear at the end of the second section. Given the humourous tone of some of those notes, they did not belong after a section in which Rainbow underwent a thorough emotional breakdown.
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It's not the tickling; there are no nerves in the outer capsule, and so a hoof trimming can't tickle, and Rainbow knows that. The child abuse Rainbow suffered as a young filly left a mark, and other ponies touching her hooves are a trauma trigger for her. She has associated that contact with the experience of being abused, and all the feelings caused by that abuse resurface when the trigger is tripped. (This is, essentially, a "flashback.")
That's what she was worried about.