So Spike and Rarity are the cover art, but this is pretty strongly sliding into Spike and Twilight. Guess I'll hope for the harem and that I'm not being deceived.

This is very well written, I enjoyed it immensely! Probably helped that Twilight was practically voicing my inner thoughts

From the title and the way the story seems to be headed, I would assume this is more of a TwiSpike story? If so, all the better! I await more eagerly

Damn, this is awesome so far, it was pretty romantic too, none of that instant clop.

Hope to see an update soon, what a great story.

I can always wait for the next chapter. I know how to wait!

"I've dealt with your sort before! And I'm warning you son. When that TV comes out the other end...you're nicked!" .....wait, damn! This isn't The Young Ones! Meh, I honestly couldn't resist! :P

well so thecover is a false expectative because I only read sparity fics and this seems to be spilight? pls clarify this so I won't waste my time.

haha, been waiting for this! any changes i should know about?

Poor Twilight, she's so conflicted.

Well, here's hoping Twilight will still get enough sleep - loss of control and loss of sleep go hand in hand, after all. I'm somewhat surprised that Twilight thinks all her friends are more attractive though. A hint at the current status of their relationships or a comment on how they are actually being seen in their community in this fic would be a good addition in future chapters. In my opinion it would help understanding the current social dynamics. For example, we know that Spike helps out at the farm or in the bakery, but what about Fluttershy and Rainbow? Did they change over the time period it took for Spike to grow? I will patiently wait to see if any of these questions will be answered in a future chapter. Great job so far.

Yeah this story seems to be sliding more towards Spikelight then Sparity ;-/ If its gonna be Spikelight use a pic with Spike and Twilight in it.

Awesome.

You have my interest.

Spike wants to be with Rarity. Twilight wants to be with Spike. Ménage à Trois???? Only one way to find out. Tracking.

Fifty Shades of Neigh

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Or the NSFW Version.

For services rendered, and hopefully continued duty, you are hereby awarded a thumbs up.

This fanfiction has been added to Sparity.

If it does not end with Sparity, I will be disappoint. Also, I generally hate TwiSpike. It's basically incest.

Not bad. putting this one on my watch list. I'd like to see where this is headed

A lot of people wanting to know what the pairing will be...

Love it best story ever

To clarify.
Spike is pining after Rarity. He believes his inexperience is what blocks him from his goal. He turns to Twilight to help him because she is his closest friend.

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Thank you very much! I appreciate the kind words, and your time spent on my story.

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This is intentional.

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Thank you very much! I appreciate every watch and comment.

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I'm sure many here are familiar with the feeling of a frantic mind keeping one awake. I feel as if Twilight would have this problem quite often.

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As you can tell from the first chapter, there will be scenes between Spike and Twilight. Note that this is in goal of winning Rarity's heart in the long run.

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okey dokey lokey!
thankya
and will read then : )

congratulations on the feature>>1938620

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My story was featured?
I thought they removed the "featured" box with the new update?

@Idylia...

Interesting story premise, it strongly reminds me of the film: Some Kind of Wonderful, which I liked a lot back in the day. Hope your story turns out the same way, with a good & satisfying ending for all three central characters.

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Thank you for reading. I hope you find the ending satisfying, should I write up to that point.

Wow. I'm impressed! The dialogue felt natural and crisp, everypony felt in character, the transition from friends talking to shipping was silky smooth, and the description of the intimacy between the two was stunning!

One thing, you may want to recheck the first few paragraphs. Saw some thoughts that weren't italicized.

I love it! Congrats on the feature, and I can't wait for you to continue.

This was seriously very, very well written and detailed, I'm not suprisedit got featured and it has my favorite pairing of all time: Spilight I love how emotinal and passionate your making them both about the other and even though it has Rarity (my least favorite pony) and a bit of Spike/Rarity (my most hated pairing of all time) I'll be awaiting for more very perfect and amazingly well written chapters

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Thank you very much! The dialogue is one of the things I tried to make coherent and enjoyable, since admittedly there was a lot of it.

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Well, I hope you enjoy whatever pairings do happen to be written about. I honestly believe that any well written love story will make the reader love the characters first. I can only dream of being able to do that.

looking like Twist whenever a buck walked within four feet of her.
I get the image, but is "buck" the word you wanted there? Did Twist turn into a doe when I wasn't looking?

The only thing I dislike about this story is your implication that you may not finish it. Because that sir would be a travesty. This is absolutely fantastic so far and could really be something special if you stay at it. Don't let it worry you if the length gets away from you, just tell your story as completely as you need to. I enjoy long stories anyway.

Watching this one like a hawk.

--CG

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Truth be told, I had very little intention to do so.

However, with all this positive feedback I am planning on writing another chapter. I do not want to promise anything; I am the kind of person who has many interests. Along with Writing, I also sing, make music, and am pursuing a degree in Computer Science. In the past I have fully intended to finish a story, only to be caught up in something else for months at a time.

I really do want to finish this one, though. The way I've planned it, it won't be incredibly long, and I believe it is a manageable task. We'll see!

I WANT THIS TO BE TWIKE I DO WANT

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I know what you mean about not finishing stories, and believe me, nothing eats at me as a writer more than when I start a story and never finish it, especially if I've posted part of it to the public. Glad to hear you want to finish it though, regardless of length, and I'll look forward to seeing it; anyone who takes half a glance at my own page can tell I'm a big fan of any combination of Spike, Rarity and Twilight. XD

Good luck!
--CG

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Thank you for your kind words and understanding!
Here's hoping.

1938995 Eh, I can't deal with Spike/Rarity, period. But that's my own option

Never been one to enjoy a Sparity, but I will admit I enjoyed it.

Forget Sparity, I want Spilight.

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I guess you speculative ones will simply have to wait and see...

1939667 True. 1939660 And I heard that *Brohoof*

Ah, Spilight, how much I've missed you.

Nicely done, I like the direction this story's heading in.

interesting look forward to more

It's a really good story but there was one problem:

You got Twilight and Spike right on! But you really aren't capturing Rarity's personality, I mean you are SUPER close but there's just something that is just off.

But you earn a like and a favorite from me, this is one of the closest stories to getting Rarity down just right. ^-^

holy shit thats the coolest I've ever seen dude spike looks so cool thats why i read the story

1938842 They haven't removed it. It's on the home page just under the heading. Also, love this story, this is going into my favourites, right now!!!

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I will definitely work on that for you! Rarity is very hard to properly do, but I will try my best! Thank you for the comment.

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It's a really great picture! I wish I knew who the artist was so I could properly credit them. It captures Spike older pretty well, I'd say.

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I see it now. What an honor! Thank you to whomever featured it, and thank you very much to all my readers!

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I know she is, I've been trying to get her down for a while now. ^-^

Another hard one is Twilight but you have her down perfect!

Thank you for posting this I enjoyed reading it and will be reading the following chapters!

Very nice. I'd love to see more of this!

Well I'm quite pleased to say this is a fair improvement over the draft you gave me before and I am happy you made it to the feature box. Feel free to send me the second chapter to look over if you want though I assume you have plenty of willing pre-reader candidates right now.

Okay, of all of the terrible clop and smut and rape and bleh I have seen in the featured box this past month... this... this is none of that. This is very nice, written well, and very romantic. I like this, I approve of this, and I have to add a second "I like this."

I think I spotted one issue, though I wasn't looking hard.

Twilight's head leaned against Spike, diverting his focus away from his downward mental smile. He dropped his chin, seeing her smiling a confident smile at him. He blinked, then smiled nervously back at his friend, unsure of what to do.

Smile much?

Ignoring that little bit of redundancy, this story was great.