It's WH40K! yay~ Tracked!

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Then Ursarkar Creed showed up and messed up everything

OMG LORD OF CHANGE IN EQUESTRIA?  AND NOT MUCH EVIL TO GO AROUND?!!  *Tracking tracking tracking*

Wow this is a really well written piece of writting! Real good show mate, I am alreay starting to like this Fate Weaver character of yours! Tracked.

>>141255141255

Alternate ending approved.

>>141255141255

Spike:"Twilight! There's a baneblade in the library!"

Twilight:"But that's impossible! You'd have to be some kind of tactical genius to...

CREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEED!!!!"

Aaaaanyway... this looks interesting! Gets my track.

I've been waiting for a decent Warhammer 40K/FiM crossover, but this blows my expectations out of the water. I'm glad this isn't a gore-infused, bolter-and-chainsword adventure, too.

Fate Weaver seems like he's going to be a very interesting character, and I love the way you portrayed him. As a fan of Warhammer 40K's books and lore, I enjoy seeing a Lord of Change as ancient, kindly librarian, rather than a malevolent sorcerer. It's an amusing, refreshing twist on things.

I've tracked this story, and I'm looking forward to more chapters. Excellent job!

Wait if this happen does it means the fake God Emperor is dead!

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VICTORY!!!

Please keep up the good work my good sir.

Hail

Tzeench my favorite chaos god

Question, are you emulating the 40k world, or fantasy?  This sounds a lot like the fantasy Chaos Gods.  Either way this is awesome.

>>142788142788

I didn't really have either one in mind when I started writing, but it's definitely closer to Fantasy. Though the bit about Tzeentch's crystal staff is 40K cannon.

>>142976142976

Yeah, that story of the staff was interesting.  Also I am a little interested if your going to mention Karios (The lovely two headed know it all,)  Or are you going to omit him entirely?  Best wishes!

>>142976142976

very good! pls keep writing!

...  I love you...

"JUST AS PLANNED"

Second best Chaos God catch phrase

>>143841143841

Back off, bitch, s/he's mine!

Amazing story, by the way. Simply wonderful, magnificent, spectacular...

5/5!

that was great!

That finally got Trollestia to shut her trap.

Amazing story! Could you write one of the four kingdoms?

>>143996143996

than what is the best catch phrase?

>>144063144063

A prequel could definitely be in the cards if this story does well enough.

"WEAVERRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR"

i cant stop giggling

Another excellent chapter. Well done.

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Keep up the awesome work my good sir

I love the story but i'm making this post just to ask if anyone can help me its not letting me submit my story that i made i have followed all of the stepps and i cant figure it out so if anyone can help plz do.  

>>144076144076

I'm going to guess "OOPS."

OH NO YOU DIDN'T

Oh sweet merciful Celestia, this is hilarious! Keep it up!

"It is fine, young pony. All who desire knowledge are welcome within the walls of the Black Library."

"The Black Library? I thought this place was called Ravenspire." Twilight said, confused.

At this the raven chuckled again. "Is that what they're calling it these days? Ravenspire? I suppose it is a fitting name, I doubt anyone besides myself lives who still remembers the original name."

The Black Library is the ELDAR's library in the webway, and the ravenspire is the fortress monastery of the Raven Guard.

"First and oldest of the gods was the War God, Khorne. He was the god of conflict, martial prowess, honor, and competition."

No, Nurgle is the oldest Chaos God, Khorne just gained sentience first.

"While the kingdom was united in its dedication to Khorne, it was directly ruled by his personal champion whom he chose from the best of the best of his subjects. His champion became his avatar, his voice in this world and was elevated above his mortal existence and remade in Khorne's image. Reborn as a mighty Daemon Prince called a Bloodthirster.."

Wrong, a bloodthirster is a greater daemon of Khorne, not a daemon prince..

"The representative of Nurgle's will in our world was the most generous and loving soul in his kingdom, like Khorne he bestowed upon his champion the gift of daemonhood, remaking them as Daemon Prince called a Great Unclean One.." No, a Great Unclean One is a greater daemon.

There is alot of other fluff errors in this, I don't like how the gods died, as a crossover this is shit, but the story itself is great.

>>144892144892

It's not really a full crossover, I just wanted to do MLP with some Chaos in its history, disregarding the official Warhammer fluff. I know it's listed as a crossover, but there's really no other tag that described what it was. I apologize for the mix up and I figured someone would get confused sooner or later. I really pride myself on my knowledge of Warhammer lore and I'd hate to seem like someone who saw a Chaos Marine, thought they looked cool, and threw some Chaos into the MLP universe.

I applaud you sir for such a great story and a blend of crossover that I am happy to see and didn't think possible. I love the background you gave of what happened to cause the end of chaos as well as the reactions the ponies gave although I'm really wondering if you left out the darker aspects of WH40k or not, guess I'll have to read and see!

>>145429145429

I did want to leave out some of the darker bits of Chaos in this story. My goal was to try and combine the two settings and still leave it feeling somewhat appropriate for the MLP universe. At one point I even went back and replaced the word "killed" with "defeated" in a few places.

javascript:smilie('');Primarch-Progenitor, to your glory and the glory of him on EARTH!!!!!

"But who would be capable of doing that? It would have taken some kind of tactical geniu-" IS Ursarkar E. Creed, the man who drove a FRAKKING BANEBLADE behind Chaos Infested Lines without being notice LOL!!!!! Or maybe it was Knight Commander Pask did the driving and all cause those Traitors didn't know what FLATTEN them into mush till they already where.

-REVIEW-

Well got to say this the one of the most enjoyable Warhammer/MLP Fic I've ever read so far and believe me I read Plenty with such Immolation as the main Six becoming Primarchs, Traitors, Inquisition, Daemons and GAKKK even Ctan's along being Space Marines.

Still I'm confuse if ever this Fateweaver is the same one as Oracle of Tzeentch, originally known as Kairos who was the most powerful among the Lords of Change and the personal Vizir of Tzeentch.in Warhammer 40K or not? Due him not having a 2nd Head is a Dead giveaway, but still I just want to clarify as to not being to confuse on it an all.

LOL!!!! The Raven Guards are surely going to be PISS in more ways than one if ever they learned that there Fortress-Monastery: Ravenspire has been taken over by the Ruinous Power and especially a Demon of the "Changer of Ways" into  his personal Library if ever this is canon to the Warhammer 40K Universe.

-Critique-

Still I just want to point out that you gotten the part of the Lord of Change being a Daemon Princes is entirely incorrect for the most part they are in fact "Greater Daemons" who are most powerful of the Chaos Gods servants. Of whom act as wardens of their patron's realm and have authority over the lesser Daemons of their respective God. While Daemon Princes are former mortal Champions of Chaos who have been elevated to Daemonhood by the Gods of Chaos. They have bartered their humanity for unearthly power and immortality.  

Can't wait till the next Chapter is Up.......

>>>>>>Words of Faith>>>>>>>

"The uniforms of the Imperial Guard are camouflaged in order to protect their wearers by hiding them from sight.

The principle is that what the enemy cannot see he cannot kill. This is not the way of the Adeptus Astartes. A Space Marine’s armour is bright with heraldry that proclaims his devotion to his Chapter and the beloved Emperor of Mankind. Our principle is that what the enemy can see, he will soon learn to fear… "

+++++Chaplain Aston,

Fire Hawks 10th Company ++++

>>147211147211

Funnily enough I'd completely forgotten the bit of fluff about Kairos when I named him Fate Weaver Though I do plan on mentioning it further on down the line though. As for the whole Greater Daemon/Daemon Prince switch up, that part was intentional. It was primarily for imagery purposes, I wanted them to still be called Daemon Princes since that's basically what they are: mortals ascended to daemonhood, but I didn't want people to imagine them in the general Daemon Prince scheme, namely the whole unholy fusion of flesh and power armor that advertizes their mortal origins. I wanted to paint the picture that they had transcended their mortality completely and were now wholly given over to their masters.

I'm also glad to see my jokes are indeed being appreciated

DIIIISCOORD! I wanted to hear that story. It's just like him, to come around and muck it up.

I wonder how Weaver will interract with him.

And Celestia wanted to make cotton candy clouds and chocolate rain...

Discord, we all know you have a crush on Celestia. Just spit it out already.

I can't wait for the next chapter.

Sincerely,

Evo

Discord vs The Fate Weaver

I think I know who's gonna win.

>>147292147292

Well when you put it that way then I'm quiet satisfied with that explanation and because it does have merit when you did post such a report to my critique.

The joke was appreciated very much since it never does get old and in many ways retains quiet a Funny part of ones own imagination if they do tend to mix them up with famous 40K Characters doing things that they rarely deviate from the norm.

"Just an old story, a favorite of yours if I recall correctly. This is the tale of a man named Horus."

"Ah yes, the man who betrayed his father and half of his brothers, killing billions of innocent people."

Chaplain: There is only the Emperor Reply: He is our SHIELD and PROTECTOR!!!!!

I can't stop laughing of the image of Weaver being the Raven from Billy and Mandy since his Study resembles that from the one on the Cartoon when he 1st appeared along wit Screaming "THE END" towards the conclusion of the tales LOL.

-REVIEW-

Well things are really going to get quiet interesting for DISCORD is now free and well I FEAR that hearing Fateweaper saying something along the LINES of "JUST AS PLANNED" or maybe its just me rushing to such a conclusion that maybe true along not at all true. But then again coming from such beings who are Powerful-sorcerers and resourceful Manipulators is really stretching my conspiracy Level to a place that is considered quiet insane.

THRONES BLOOD!!!!!!!!!!!! Celestia, THEE CELESTIA likes hearing one of the most  Glorious son of the God-Emperor and Hated Traitor in the Imperium( GAKKING LORGARS FAULT) is certainly without a doubt so Surprising that its like being  hit with a Powerfist from a Dreadnought. But nevertheless it is quiet a tail of the 1st Son to be found of which is full of Drama, Action, Suspense, Intrigue from his Rise and Fall to Chaos.

I'm certainly wondering what Discords interaction with the Lord of Change would be like which is something I will be looking forward to.

>>>>>Words of Faith>>>>>>>

"I have seen war in all its forms. I have seen feral world savages braining each other with stones, and I have monitored the death of a whole planet at the hands of a virus bomb. I have seen Space Marines drop to certain death, and win. I have seen Titans crush whole platoons underfoot. But there is no more stirring sight in war than the charge of massed cavalry."

++++Dravin Gratz, 14th Tharinga Regiment, Imperial Guard++++

Well pertaining to the whole Horus Heresy story time thing, I didn't mean to paint Celestia as Horus's number one fan or anything, though I've admittedly seen my fair share of evil tyrant Celestia stories. I was just looking for something that would make the reader go "Ahhhh! I know that one!"

And now that I think about it I may need to work that whole Billy & Mandy raven guy in here at some point.

>>148003148003

If you wanted to do a reference which was not like evil, then maybe Ollanius Pious (Not sure if enough people know that.) Or Leman Russ, really any of the loyalist primarchs or heaven forbid, our spiritual liege.

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By far one of my favorite stories. NOD Approves once again, this work of fiction may yet just get me to do a double take on 40K...

>>148264148264

I just wanted to make sure it was something that everyone would know. I was originally going to have him say the story was about "the men of Tanith" but wasn't sure if enough people had read the Gaunt's Ghosts series. Though I think you're right, Ollanius Pious would've been a way better choice, I was just suffering from a horrid case of writer's block. Though...

"Just an old story, a favorite of yours if I recall correctly." Weaver said. But as the firelight struck the book's cover, Celestia felt her heart drop. On the cover of the dusty old tome were two words she had hoped she'd never have to see again. Codex Astartes

"This is the tale of our spiritual liege."

"Please no! Anything but that!"

I really wish I'd thought of that sooner.

OMYGOSH This is getting really epic!  Also I love how you weaved (get it? c wat I did thar?) the stories together.  You've written a MLP/40k fic that hasn't the typical Imperium placed in it, and for that you have my eternal gratitude.  Now I need to write my Eldar/MLP fanfic *Scribbles down notes muttering about mon-keigh stealing the spotlight*

5/5

Best wishes!

Okay, Discord, how about you turn your chaos to a more playful outlet. You know, try being nice to other. (Well, at least little fillies and colts.) I know youre a nice guy.

*puts on a patton hat and takes out a pair of binoculars and looks through them* Weaver, you magnificant being of chaos, I've read your book.

(Here's hoping for a happy ending. )

Inb4 Fate Weaver goes all 40k and summons a vast host of Pink Horrors.

>>156463156463 Hope is just another step on the road to disappointment ...

~.~.~.~.~.~

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Please keep up the good work my good sir.

>>156701156701

Or flamers.

>>144076144076

"BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD SKULLS FOR THE SKULL THRONE"

This fic is awesome, but the lack of Khorne Flakes makes me sad.

>>166886166886

The breakfast of CHAMPIONS!!!!!