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Derpy's Last Wish

The Doctor is ready to return to his universe, leaving his faithful companion and friend Derpy Hooves behind. But Derpy has one wish before he leaves. She wants him to bring Lyra, who has always had a high interest in humans. But Lyra may not be ready to leave her life as a pony behind.

Edit: I'm finding I don't really have much time to work on this, so I'm putting it on hiatus until I have time. Don't worry, it will continue, just not very soon.

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Eurobeat11

Eurobeat11 #1 · Jan 4th, 2013 · · · Goodbyes Can Lead To Hellos ·

*reads description*
Last Wish?
Damnit!

LightningDust

LightningDust #2 · Jan 4th, 2013 · · · Goodbyes Can Lead To Hellos ·

I like the premise but It's too short, too brief and honestly feels a bit rushed. This certainly has the potential to be a great story but we aren't seeing enough of the buildup. Minor gripe, other than that a nice read. I'll give it a 6/10, Not Bad.
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Egyptian_Wolf

Egyptian_Wolf #3 · Jan 4th, 2013 · · · Goodbyes Can Lead To Hellos ·

1904305 Thank you for your criticism. I promise I will try to improve on the next chapter, and this is the first chapter to my first story, so it definitely won't be perfect.