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The Rainboom Tryouts

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n0de

n0de #1 · Dec 31st, 2012 · · · The Letter ·

Going to clean it up a bit when I get the chance but I wanted to see what people first thought of the idea, I can see whey a few people would give it a dislike though probably because of the whipping part, I don't even know why I put that in there but just decided to put it to Lightning's personality for always wanting to be the dominant pony. I'll work on an improved version in a little bit.

eldersword35

eldersword35 #2 · Jan 1st, 2013 · · · The Letter ·

Interesting story bro, but for me, most of the story is in the characterization, try and upgrade that in the future, IMO

rjhunt2000

rjhunt2000 #3 · Jan 1st, 2013 · · · The Letter ·

Betcha Cant make a face crazier than THIS!

StormtrooperSteven1

StormtrooperSteven1 #4 · Jan 2nd, 2013 · · · The Letter ·

Damn... Just... Damn!

I DEMAND MORE PARTS!!!

PerhapsLater

PerhapsLater #5 · Jan 4th, 2013 · · · The Letter ·

That TITLE SENTENCE

Ponyess

Ponyess #6 · Jan 24th, 2014 · · · The Letter ·

looks like some fun, by the description.
on the other hoof, you just gotta start somewhere.
can't keep polishin the chrom forever.
sometimes, the best comments come early on, becuse you don't have to read through a lengthy story.

Ponyess