Having escaped from the terrible Rainbow Factory, H8 Seed finds a new friend, and tells him about all the horrors of this place. With him, former worker persuades the main pony in Cloudsdale to go to war against the factory, as all this is must be stopped.
After the victory, when everyone thought that Cloudsdale is not in danger, H8 Seed finds Glaze under the wreckage of his Rainbow Factory. Learning that Glaze is alive, H8 Seed decided to help him.
Passes many months and Glaze finally gets better and becomes a real friend to H8 Seed. But will be able Glaze stay in Cloudsdale, if already all ponies in Equestria know about his bloody actions and watching him from the darkness?
Pretty good, with a few mistakes.
"Are you fly well?" Should be "Can you fly well?"
And a few of the uses of "H8 Seed" can be changed to he or him in the opening paragraph.
-Sonic
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Thank you!
Okay, thanks! The mistakes are because English is not my language and i use Google Translator to translate!
1879657 No problem. I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this story.
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Thanks!
1879709 Your welcome!
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Wow, so many!
1880017 Eeyup!!!
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LOL
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Whup, just caught another one.
"Here was so beautiful" Should be "It was so beautiful here."
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Okay, thanks! Sorry, my English is terrible!
1891559 It's why I'm here. I'll help you be the best you can be.
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Thanks!
1896615 No problem!
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Cool but one problem... Glaze is female not male
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Thanks! Yeah, i know. But in my story, she is a male.
1940889ah cool was a bit confused when you said glaze was male
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Yeah, i need to write it in the description!