"There's no place like home. There's no place like home..."
"Wake up, Simon. It's mommy, darling" said a familiar voice.
Simon opened his heavy eyes. He was in a rustic old room that he recognized instantly. He was in Kansas, in his old family house. The year was 1936. The headache-inducing colours were gone. Everything was in sepia. It brought a tear to Simon's eye.
His mother and father stood over him, grinning with relief.
"You had malaria and Spanish flu at the same time, but you're all better now"
Simon stuttered in disbelief. He'd dreamed he'd lived thirty years of his life in the far, far distant future. He'd gone places and seen incredible things. It had felt so real.
Their next door neighbour, Miss Oliver, appeared at the bedroom window at that moment.
"Well, he seems all right now!"
"Yes" said his father, "we thought for a while he was going to leave us"
"but I did leave you, father. That's just the trouble. And I tried to get back for days and days!"
"There there, lie quiet now. You just had a bad dream"
His mother left his side. His three sisters came in.
"Remember me, Tara?"
"Ashleigh?"
"You couldn't forget my voice, could you?" asked Andrea.
"No. But it wasn't a dream. It was a place. And you and you and you...and you were there"
The four women chuckled.
"But you couldn't have been, could you?"
"We dream lots of silly things when we..."
"No, mother. This was a real, truly live place. And I remember some of it wasn't very nice. But the rest of it was beautiful. But just the same all I ever said to anyp.... anybody was "I wanna go home", and they sent me home!"
The people around him laughed nervously.
"Doesn't anybody believe me?"
"Of course we believe you, Simon"
"But anyway, Al, we're home!" Simon picked up the little Terrier, "And this is my home, and you're all here. And I'm not going to leave here ever ever again. Because I love you all. Oh mother. There's no place like home!"
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So much April Fools stuff on this site.
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I think I win for most half-assed though.
Ok, I loled at this one :D
2397528 PLEASE DO IT THAT WOULD BE HILARIOUS. BUT ACTUALLY DONT BECAUSE THAT WOULD END THE SERIES TO FAST!
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Don't worry. Ponyville won't explode. But considering Simon's luck up to this point, it wouldn't be all that surprising.
Thanks for reading!
2572273 I'm a fast reader I got to the third chapter before I touched favorite, don't worry!
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Sounds like you like it, then!
Read it all. Damn good stuff sir.
This is not exactly apropos for the April Fool's chapter, but still...
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Vagisilthe group Authors Helping Authors.Grammar Score: 9. (I'm never confident enough to give a 10.) I didn't see anything outlying or completely unacceptable.
Pros
- Every part containing Simon has been intriguing so far. He's a nice, relatable character, and I can't wait to see more of him.
- I immensely enjoy the concept of a human leaving Earth only to return to Equestria. Good job not just zapping a human into equestria via magic/portal.
- His voice was taken away mere hours after he was singing his heart out just to entertain himself. I see what you did there, and I greatly approve of details like that.
- Canon characters are pretty spot-on.
Cons
- The formatting seems a bit off to me. May just be a personal problem.
- Chapters could be a bit longer.
- The timeline of events is a bit screwy in some chapters. Shouldn't the scenes taking place during the first MLP episode happen first? There doesn't seem to be much reason for it.
- LAST UPDATED ALMOST TWO MONTHS AGO WHAT ARE YOU DOING
Notes
Overall, I like where this story is going! I say focus on Simon's perspective a bit more than the other characters.
You have earned yourself a thumbs up and a favorite from me. I hope to see more of this story in the near future.
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Probably the most original though.
Most writers just made so all the characters died or had sex or something really stupid.