Golden Harvest asked Derpy if she could help out in her garden. if that might be a good idea?
Well I am from germany and translated my first german FiMFiction into english for this site. Please excuse the mistakes (and I bet there are plenty of it).
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i would say very good for a first attempt. keep it coming.
The first thing I noticed when I opened the story is the quotation marks in the wrong place. "They should be like this." If you want some help improving your writing, you come over to MLPchan's writer training grounds and post your story to the thread. http://mlpchan.net/fic/res/525+50.html
Good idea, but needs a good spell check in future. As for the quotation marks being wrong, it looks more like a formatting error where it's been copied over from another word processor than just a mistake on the users behalf. Good idea for a story though, I liked it regardless of the few minor mistakes!
Besides the formatting errors (which you probably had no control of, as the comment above mine explains), it doesn't seem bad. Certainly much better than a lot of other translated fics. There seems to be a decline in innocent, lighthearted fics that aren't clopfics, so kudos to you.
Hey.....I didn't find any errors.....we have these books we do at school and sometimes there's talking and my teacher taught us about the 66 and 99,so technically that's not an error
P.S.My grandfather imigrated from austria(somewhere in germany) and I took german school(took a year of though.Going next year:))Thank you mr author(I'm being lazy and don't want to use capitals and punctuation)
Nice work. Coincidentally, I've made a story about Derpy taking over gardening duties for Carrot Top/Golden Harvest too, but I like this one as well. Keep it up!