This is a collection of such things. They are fantastical, alternative, and may even shock and disturb you. They are beyond the scope of anything that you know and love and they are shocking in their blatant disregard for your sensibilities. Have fun.
Disclaimer: Keep in mind the lack of context when you advance into these treacherous pages, for your mind will be confused and your logic will scream in agony if you fail to suspend most (if not all) of your disbelief at the door. The contents of this fic are entirely unscreened for logic, accurate characterization, or reasonable-ness of story. Furthermore, almost no relevant backstory has been explored and each "chapter" exists in what is essentially a plot-vacuum.
You have been warned.
Chapters (1)
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I have no idea what this means.
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Oh. Thanks!
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Edit:
It's a bit too technical and coldly descriptive for my tastes. It didn't make me feel very much.
So I am here to make a review,
that will hopefully help you.
So, author, sit back, take a seat,
and I'll show why I'm an elite.
Your summary makes no sense,
Reading it left me quite incensed.
I had no idea what I should expect,
That is why it, you should reject.
It should give some insight into your story,
So yours should say that your tale is war-y.
Your authors note has me believing
This is an expiriment in the art of storytelling.
If it truly is the way that it seems to me,
You should (again) put that in your summary.
Now, I move on, into the actual first part,
And I have to say: it is an interesting start!
However, I have a few questions, rather large,
Such as why would Celestia put twilight in charge?
Yes, I know Twilight is an element of harmony,
But they have moping more qualified? Not any?
I don't think Twilight has the fortitude to be
An actual cammander in Equestria's army.
Now, Rainbow Dash would be even worse,
She probably wouldn't obey orders, however terse.
On a real battlefield, showing off will get you killed.
A soldier with a Hero-complex, leaves a spot to be filled.
Again with Applejack, she has never demonstrated
The ability to be a cammander first-rated.
You said Twilight is a lieutenant, and the she enlisted.
However for officers: the correct term is commissioned.
Yes I know that it's a minor flaw, yeah it's true,
But when you use military speak, you should check too.
Now, you should know, your writing isn't bad,
But you tell instead of show, just a tad.
So overall, a good start, just work on the presentation,
Take special effort for your summary, and characterization.
lolcatsmanseven, the Rhyming Section Trainee from the Impartial Investigation Ensemble
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Summary, indeed, could be done with more detail. There's a surprising amount of activity, to be honest. For example, the fact that I'm doing these as no more than word vomit and aren't actually trying to hard should be part of the summary. A lot of the issues you bring up are reasons why I would NOT try to expand this scene-thing into anything resembling a story, but the idea was that occasionally something amusing comes to mind and word vomit isn't entirely distasteful as long as it's understood that nothing was actually proof-read or screened for logicality (which isn't a word). These are things I should put in the summary, clearly, but do you feel that there's any need to explain some of the things that brought about the word vomit? For this particular entry, I started with a song (I lost it on the interwebs, sorry), and it sort of was expelled from there. Is that something that I should put in the author's note?
Anyway, thanks for the feedback.
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If you refer to the story itself, I reworked the summary and added a more detailed author's note. That should (hopefully) explain most of what's going on.
1782486 That pic has nothing to do with anything.
I actually liked this.
Sure, it wasn't great, but I liked the ideas and partially, the execution was done well.
A whole story like this would be great, if there was more emotion.
Not a favorite, but I don't see where the hate is coming from.
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Dude, I don't even understand why you're reading this story. The fact that you actually spent time going through it as pretty damn flattering.
Alt. Title: ShadowBromento