The story begins with Pinkie Pie having the idea to go camping, she told her friends about it, but only SpongeBob, Patrick, Rainbow Dash, and AppleJack were willing to go on the trip. Hearing this, Squidward had prepared himself for the night of his life, with Patrick, Pinkie Pie, and especially SpongeBob out of his hair Squidward was determined to enjoy himself. Later that night Squidward had himself ready for the night.
“Ah, finally, the weekend is here. And this isn't just any old weekend. This is the weekend that SpongeBob, Patrick, Pinkie Pie, AppleJack, and Rainbow Dash go camping.” Squidward gestures at his "Dance Quarterly" calendar at a picture of the five on his calendar. “Wouldn't it be great if they got lost in the woods and never came back?”
-in Squidward's thought bubble-
“Guys, I'm scared!” said SpongeBob in fear.
“Ho-ho, that would be great!” Squidward quickly hops into his bed. “You've waited a long time for this. A soft bed, warm tea, a good book, and two whole days with no…” Squidward imitates SpongeBob's laugh and when he stops, he can hear SpongeBob's laughter along with Patrick’s and Pinkie Pie’s. “What the…?!”
Squidward goes outside and sees SpongeBob, Patrick, and Pinkie Pie in a tent in his backyard. While Rainbow Dash and AppleJack were just star gazing next to the fire they started. “SpongeBob, aren't you guys supposed to be camping?”
“We are camping.”
“SpongeBob, it's not camping if it’s in my backyard.”
“Aww, it doesn't matter where you are as long as you're outdoors. While all those soft city folk are safe in their beds reading books, we're out here, pitting ourselves against the formidable forces of nature. You wanna join us?”
“Yeah Squidy! Join us!” said Pinkie Pie.
“No.”
“Ok. Have fun inside.”
Squidward leaves then quickly comes back. “What do you mean, "have fun inside"?”
“Just…have fun inside. See you tomorrow.”
“Oh. Bye.” Squidward leaves and then comes back again. “You little sneak! I see what you're doing!”
“What?”
“Don't think I can't see what you're doing!”
“What?”
“You're saying I can't take it!”
“But all I…”
“AH! You're saying I'm soft! You think your little "have fun inside" challenge is gonna make me come camping with you, but that is NEVER GONNA HAPPEN! There's no way I'm gonna sit out here all night with you losers! So, get used to it!” with that Squidward left.
“Ok.”
“Have fun inside.” Pinkie Pie said innocently.
Squidward comes back and yells at them. “That's it! I'm in! I'll show you camping!” Squidward quickly runs into his house.
Rainbow Dash and AppleJack slowly walked up to the three as they left there tent.
“What’s goin’ on fellas?” asked AppleJack.
“Squidward's gonna come camping with us!” SpongeBob, Patrick, and Pinkie Pie giggle while Rainbow Dash scoffed.
“I can see this going well.” Rainbow Dash whispered to AppleJack. They both shared a quite laugh until Squidward comes back with a big backpack on.
“Now you'll all see how a real…” Squidward falls forward into the grass from the heavy backpack. “...outdoorsman does it!” Squidward crawls out from under the backpack and gets out a cylinder looking bag. “Here we are-- my remote-controlled, self-assembling tent. Watch and learn.” SpongeBob takes out binoculars while Patrick and Pinkie Pie gets out a notepad and a pair of glasses while Rainbow Dash only rolled her eyes. Squidward throws the bag in the air then gets out the remote and pushes the button. The bag explodes and the tent, sticks, and rope fall on the ground.
“Bravo, Squidward. Bravo.” said Rainbow Dash rhetorically.
“Yeah, that was great, Squidward! But how do you get inside?” asked SpongeBob.
“Yeah, it's all crushy-looking.” asked Patrick.
“Is that how you guys set up tents under the sea?” asked Pinkie Pie.
“No! It isn't put up yet, you idiots.” Squidward starts to mess with his tent but tears it. “Huh?”
“Customization.”
“Genius!”
Squidward starts beating the tent with a wooden stake. “Bah! bah! bah!”
Rainbow Dash and AppleJack fall out rolling on the ground while laughing at the scene in front of them.
“He's tenderizing the ground!”
“Of course!” said Pinkie Pie.
Squidward gets himself tangled in the rope and is trying to unravel it causing Rainbow Dash and AppleJack to laugh harder.
“Write that down!! Write that down!!”
It turns out that Patrick is playing tic-tac-toe with Pinkie Pie instead of writing notes. Squidward then kicks the pile of tent pieces and it magically becomes a tent.
“Huh? Voila.” The tent collapses so Squidward rolls it up out of the way and brings back a sleeping bag. “But what could compare to just lying out under the stars?” SpongeBob, Patrick, and Pinkie Pie applaud while Rainbow Dash and AppleJack sat next to them after pulling themselves together after Squidward’s episode. “Well, I've worked up an appetite as big as all outdoors. Time for a little grub.”
“You should be hungry after all that wrestlin’ with yer tent an’ all.” laughed AppleJack with everyone else joining in.
“Whatever. Anyway, for terms of food, especially knowing it involves the five of you. I suppose you’re gonna stew up some twigs and rocks, right?”
“Nope, we've got something even better-”
Hearing SpongeBob’s statement Pinkie Pie hides her twigs and rocks behind her.
“-Marshmallows.” SpongeBob takes out a bag of marshmallows and eats one. “Mmm-mm. Just like the astronauts eat.”
“What’s an astro-whatever?” asked AppleJack.
“You really need to get out more.” said Pinkie Pie. “Astronauts are people that go inside a space ship and they go up into space and explore the stars! I’d like to go into space one day!”
“Yeah, like that’ll happen.” said Rainbow Dash.
“You really think so? Thanks Dashie!”
“Uhh…you’re welcome?”
Patrick then puts a fishbowl over his head and he imitates static, like an astronaut. “Patrick to SpongeBob. Patrick to SpongeBob. Do you read me? Over.”
SpongeBob has a fishbowl over his head and imitates static as well.
“SpongeBob to Patrick. I read you. Over.”
Pinkie Pie puts a fishbowl over her head a imitates static.
“Pinkie to Spongey Do you read me? Over.”
“Spongey to Pinkie. You’re coming it loud and clear. Over.”
Patrick imitates static. “Patrick to SpongeBob. I’d like on. Over.”
Pinkie Pie imitates static. “Pinkie to Patty. Me too.” The trio imitate static back and forth for a bit while Squidward, Rainbow Dash, and AppleJack stare vacantly at them.
SpongeBob imitates static. “SpongeBob to Patrick, SpongeBob to Pinkie. Help yourselves. Over.”
Patrick and Pinkie Pie grab a marshmallow. “Yummy!” Patrick and Pinkie Pie then jams the marshmallow in his mouth, through there fishbowls, breaking them.
“Patrick to SpongeBob! The deliciousness has landed!”
“Same goes for me!”
“Hey, don’t go hoggin’ the marshmallows! Pass us the bag!” said Rainbow Dash.
“Sure Rainbow. Here ya go.” said SpongeBob handing her the bag.
“Well, you astronauts can eat marshmallows. I gonna have a can of Swedish Barnacle Balls....” Squidward holds up the can in his hand. “just as soon as I can get my can opener.”
“But Squidward, didn't you take a can opener when you hiked out here?”
“Why would I bother? We're ten feet from my house.”
“But this is the wilderness. It just doesn't seem to fit the camping spirit.”
“Pretty weenie.”
“Yeah, Squidy, don’t be a weenie.”
“All right. All right. Gimme a marshmallow.” Squidward begins roasting his marshmallow until Patrick's marshmallow catches on fire and he blows it on Squidward's face. Squidward wipes it off and begins roasting his marshmallow until Patrick's marshmallow catches on fire and he blows it on Squidward's face again. The third shot Squidward avoids and laughs… until the marshmallow flies back into Squidward's head. “Ok. Besides spitting molten food stuffs at me, what else do you do for fun?”
“Simple!” said Rainbow Dash. “Well tell scary stories!” Rainbow Dash slowly hovers over the group. “You guys do like scary stories, right?!”
SpongeBob, Patrick, and Pinkie Pie gulp nervously.
“Uh, s-sure R-Rainbow.” said SpongeBob hiding behind Patrick. “W-We don’t mind…r-r-right Patick?”
“R-Right SpongeBob! We can totally handle it, we’re not babies. R-Right Pinkie Pie?”
Pinkie Pie didn’t even say anything. She only shivered and quickly hides behind Patrick with SpongeBob. “Uh-huh.”
“Good. It all started on a night, just like this, deep within’ the Everfree Forest. A filly was trying to get home after playing all day so she decided to take a short cut through the Everfree forest. Little did she know that she was being watched from afar, by the infamous being, known as Slender Pony!”
“Slender Pony?” Squidward asked rhetorically.
Rainbow Dash instantly flew into Squidward’s face. “Yes! Slender Pony!” Rainbow Dash flew back above the group. “Anyways, back to the story. The little girl had discovered that is was darker then normal in the Everfree Forest, so she pulled out her flashlight and began to look for a way out. As she got deeper and deeper into the forest she discovered a piece of paper attached to a tree, the paper read ‘Help Me’. The little girl felt a cold tingle travel up her spine. But she shrugged it off, thinking it was just a stupid prank. She continued into the forest and stumbled across an old abandoned carriage with another note attached to it. This note read ‘Can’t Run’.”
At this point SpongeBob, Patrick, and Pinkie Pie were ready to wet themselves.
“After reading the note the little girl heard rustling behind her, she quickly turned to see who was back there, but she saw nopony. The little filly tried to brush it off, but as she continued on the rustling sound seemed to be following her. So she started to run as fast as she could until she found another note. But this note didn’t have anything written on it, it only had a drawing of a tall slender pony surrounded by trees. This particular note made the filly shiver, and as she turned around she saw him…”
“S-Saw who?” asked Pinkie Pie.
“Slender Pony!!” Rainbow Dash yelled causing the three to jump. Squidward and AppleJack were just sitting there listening to the story.
“Wh-What happened n-next?” asked SpongeBob in pure fear.
“Well, the filly had noticed that Slender Pony had no face, and was wearing a black suit with a red tie and white shirt.”
“Uhh…” started Patrick. “By no f-face, wh-what do you mean?”
Rainbow Dash flew into Patrick’s face. “I mean no eyes, no mouth, no skin, no hair, no facial features at all. Just a pure white head.”
Patrick shook like a leaf. “I-I see.”
“The filly also noticed the longer she looked at the pony she began to develop a head ache so she decided to hall tail outta there. Running as fast as her little hooves could carry her, she kept running until she found a rest area in a clearing of the forest. Seeing it as a safe house from Slender Pony she quickly ducked inside. With flashlight in hand, the filly looked through each room to see if she could find anything to defend herself with. She kept searching and searching until she entered a room with another note attached to the wall.”
“Oh no.” mumbled Pinkie Pie.
“She slowly approached the note and took it off the wall, again, it had only a drawing of Slender Pony with no written all around him. So she took the paper and slowly turned around…and…”
“What?” asked SpongeBob. “What happened next?”
“Are you sure you want to know?”
“Yes.” answered Patrick.
“Are you really sure you want to know?”
“Yes! What happened next?!” yelled Pinkie Pie.
Rainbow Dash instantly appeared behind the three. “He got her!” she yelled causing the three to scream in pure fear.
Squidward and AppleJack laughed there heads off watching the three screaming friends run in circles.
“Alright Rainbow, you can calm em’ down now.” said AppleJack.
Rainbow Dash then quickly flew in front of them and stopped them in there tracks. “Okay you guys, you can calm down now.”
“Sorry Rainbow Dash, it’s just that story was really scary.” said SpongeBob.
“Yeah.” Agreed Patrick and Pinkie Pie.
“Well, so far I’m entertained. But I’d like to move onto the next activity.” said Squidward. “What else do you guys do for fun?”
“Well, after a long day of camping and scary stories, it's nice to unwind with a nice, relaxing campfire song."
After the song had ended Pinkie Pie was clapping her hooves while Squidward, AppleJack, and Rainbow Dash looked at SpongeBob and Patrick like they had lost there minds.
“Ahh, now, wasn't that relaxing?”
“No! This is relaxing.” Squidward holds up his clarinet and plays "Michael, Row The Board Ashore".
“Oh no! I'll save you, Squidward!” SpongeBob picks up a marshmallow and uses a slingshot to shoot in the clarinet and into Squidward's throat causing him to collapse. “Squidward, are you all right?” SpongeBob held up Squidward’s head as he started chewing. “That's it, chew, chew, and swallow. There, better?”
“Better?! I was fine until you lodged that ballistic junk food into my windpipe!”
“But I had to! It's too dangerous to play the clarinet badly out here in the wilderness! It might attract…an Ursa Minor.”
“An Ursa Minor? You mean like the ones that DON'T EXIST?!”
“What what’re you sayin’?” asked AppleJack.
“There's no such thing! They're just a myth!”
“Oh no, Squidward, Ursa Minor are all too real! It says so in the Equestria Inquirer!" SpongeBob holds up the magazine.
"I Married an Ursa Minor"?
“Yeah, and Fake Science Monthly!” Patrick holds up the magazine.
"Ursa Minors and Fairy Tales Are Real?" That's the stupidest thing I've ever heard!”
“Well, maybe it is stupid, but it's also dumb!”
“Pinkie's right, Squidward. Ursa Minors are no laughing matter. As a matter of fact an Ursa Minor even came through Ponyville once!”
“What? When?!”
“When Trixie came by boasting about how ‘awesome’ she was until a real one came by and almost trashed the town until Twilight saved the day.” explained Rainbow Dash.
“Yeah Squidward, ah don’t think you should be doubtin’ an Ursa Minor until ya see one for yourself.”
“You know what AppleJack? You’re right! I should be more careful. In fact, why don't you tell me all of the things I shouldn't do if I want to keep the Ursa Minors away?”
“Ok, that's easy. First off, don't play the clarinet.”
“Okay. Then what?”
“Never wave your flashlight back and forth really fast.” said Patrick.
“Flashlights are their natural prey.” said Pinkie Pie.
“You're kidding.”
“Don't stomp around. They take that as a challenge.”
“Yeah.”
“Go on.”
“Don't ever eat cheese.”
“Sliced or cubed?”
SpongeBob, Patrick, and Pinkie Pie converse quietly to each other.
“Cubed; sliced is fine.”
“Yeah, yeah, and?”
“Never wear a sombrero-”
“-in a goofy fashion!”
“Or clown shoes.” said Pinkie Pie.
“Or a hoop skirt.”
“And never…”
“Ever…”
“Ever…”
Pinkie Pie then gasps.
“SCREECH LIKE A CHIMPANZEE!!!”
“Wow! That's amazing how many things can set an Ursa Minor off."
SpongeBob, Patrick, and Pinkie Pie hold each other in terror.
“They're horrible!”
“And… and suddenly I have the sense we're all in danger!”
“Why?”
Rainbow Dash’s eyes grow wide and she whispers to AppleJack. “He’s not really gonna do it is he?”
Squidward runs off and comes back wearing all the items mentioned from before. “Just a feeling!!”
“He is.” replied AppleJack.
“No.”
“Yes.”
“No!”
Squidward begins making monkey & chimp noises. “U!UHUHU!”
“SQUIDWARD, PLEASE DON'T!!” begged everyone.
Squidward continues to do whatever it takes to get a Ursa Minor's attention. “Uh! Uh! Ah! Ah! Ah! Ah! Ah! Ah! Uh! Uh! Uh! Uh! Uh! Ah! Ah! Ah!”
“SpongeBob, what are we gonna do? An Ursa Minor is sure to come over and eat us!”
“Don't worry, everyone. I'll draw us an anti-sea-bear circle in the dirt.” SpongeBob grabs a stick and draws a circle around all of them.
Squidward continues to screech like a chimpanzee. “Uh! Uh! Ah! Ah! Ah! Ah! Ah! Ah! Uh!”
“Good thinking!” says Patrick as Pinkie Pie holds up another issue of Fake Science Monthly. “All the experts say it's the only defense against an Ursa Minor attack.”
Squidward stops screeching and laughs. “Ha! ha! ha! You guys are so gullible! See? I did everything that attracts an Ursa Minor and nothing happened! If Ursa Minors really exist, why didn't one show up?”
“Maybe it's because you're not wearing your sombrero in a goofy fashion.” suggested Rainbow Dash.
“Oh, pfft, sorry! How silly of me! You mean like this?” Squidward tilts his sombrero to the right then laughs. As he is laughing, a clawed paw turns the sombrero upside-down.
“No, like that.” said Pinkie Pie.
“Grrrrrrrr!”
“AAAAAAAH!”
“GROOOOOAAAAAR!”
Squidward runs as fast as he can but the Ursa Minor quickly catches him and starts to beat the tar out of him.
“Squidward, are you okay?”
“No.”
“Quick! Jump inside our anti-sea-bear circle before he comes back.” yells AppleJack.
“Yeah. Ursa Minors often attack more than once.”
“Are you all crazy? A dirt circle won't stop that monster. I'm running for my life!”
“No!” Everypony screams, but unfortunately for Squidward the Ursa Minor comes back and attacks him again until it eventually leaves.
“Don't run! Ursa Minors hate that.”
“Thanks for the tip. I guess I'll just limp home, then.”
“No!”
The Ursa Minor almost instantly comes back and attacks Squidward again.
“They hate limping more than running!”
“Well, I guess I'll just have…”
Before Squidward could finish his sentence the Ursa Minor instantly comes back and mauls him again.
“I should have warned you about crawling.”
The Ursa Minor once again attacks Squidward and leaves.
“What’d I do that time?”
“I don't know! I guess he just doesn't like you.”
“Pretend to be somebody else!” yelled Pinkie Pie.
“Yeah!” yelled Patrick.
Rainbow Dash looked at them. “Are you two serious?”
“Probably.” replied Patrick.
“Here, draw a circle.” SpongeBob throws Squidward a stick.
“Ok.”
Ursa comes back and attacks Squidward yet again.
“That was an oval! It has to be a circle!”
“Move over!” yells Squidward as he runs and sits on top of SpongeBob, inside the circle.
The Ursa Minor comes back, growls at Squidward, sees the circle, points menacingly at Squidward, then leaves.
“Hey, it worked! You guys saved my life.”
Everyone cheers.
“I gotta say, that went better than I though it would be.” said AppleJack.
“Yeah, I'm glad it was just an Ursa Minor. This circle would never hold back an Ursa Major.
“What attracts them?”
“The sound of an Ursa Minor attack.” an Ursa Major is snorting beside them.
“Heh, good thing we're all wearing our anti-sea-rhinoceros undergarments, right, guys?”
“Uh-huh.”
hmmm
1772404 Please be productive, you are only spamming.
On a scale of one to Nicolas Cage, I rate this pickle juice
1772408
says the guy who goes around posting something just as random at times
In other news: Ow, my brain hurts at the mere thought of this kind of cross over
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1772408 Bitch, please, that's my job, and you never say that to me.
to have some Pinkies fine gentlemen. 1772430>>1772424
1772424 But I never just go HHMMMMM or post an emoticon like an idiot. I actually am relevant.
funny thing, i've been doing the same thing:
http://forevergent.deviantart.com/art/The-Camppony-Episode-298262103
now i'm on hiatus and writer's block, trying to write the episode about the bad breath.
1772453
you make a fair point
1772453 well if i annoyed ya sorry.
1772494 It's spam, man. You're just trying to beat me.
1772515 no offence man but i dont really care about beating someone at being first.
1772529 Sure...
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1772443
STAHP.
I'll check this out..
1772650
You've been eating too much Spam. :L
You simply MUST do the episode with those snail bite things, that gary went crazy over. PLEASE?????
Also...this...not sure what to say...I like it. I mean...I got nothin against talking sponges...it's just...random...I LOVE IT!!!!
YES YES! I KNEW SOMEONE WOULD THIS EVENTUALLY!:)
THANKS SO MUCH!
Do the Alaskan Bull-worm episode
1772726 Gridmark? All that happened was Gary made spongebob travel the entire sea looking for a box of treats before he finally learned to tell him no....
You forgot an opening bracket on the closing "" in one of Squidward's thingamajigs, and the boldness just kept going on, and on, and on, and on, and on... <twelve hours later> ... and on, and on, and on, and on, and on!
1772408*smiles evily*
Hmmmm
HA! FUCK THE COMMENT POLICE!!!
btw you have way to much bold. Go through and reread it.
1772798 O.O oh god...........
Great, except for excessive boldness.
Also, may I request Band Geeks?
Up vote just because the picture
Do the episode "chocolate with nuts" or "survival of the idiots"
My Little Pony and Spongebob.... AWESOME!
1772412 Thank you. I do take pride in Pickles and there juices.
1772457 Woah, really? Glad to know I'm not the only one who thinks this is a good idea. I shall read your episodes and enjoy them, if you don't mind good sir.
1773553
it's a pity i can't upload them on this site because they're in script format.
1772408 Are you following me, sir?
1773583 I'm before you, so you seem to be following me...
1773567 Aww that sucks. But at least you gave the link. I shall now commence reading.
1772902 The problem is no more, thanks for the heads up bro/sis.
1773611
just to let you know, i was inspired by this guy. here's one of his three stories:
http://dragon-guy36.deviantart.com/art/Dying-for-Pinkie-Pie-279038577
1772884 Problem has been fixed, sorry for the inconveniance.
>Sees up-votes
>Sees description
All right, so this is where my random read front-page story has brought me. Let's take a looks see...
Reading.... Reading... Reading...
Analysing...
Final response:
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Ok, so you seem to have a grasp on English, basic grammar, and the idea that a new line makes a new speaker. Good good. However... there are some problems. Let's take a look at some of the things I'd suggest you take a look over.
1) How are the ponies in Bikini Bottom without any protective gear? I may not have watched Spongebob Squarepants in years, but I do know that there is a land-dwelling mammal in the show. Her name is Sandy, and she lives in a protective air bubble under the sea. In order for Spongebob to visit her he has to wear a Fish Bowl as a helmet filled with water to breathe. Inversely, if she's going to leave her home and visit Spongebob then she has to wear a helmet with air to breathe. Ponies are not aquatic animals, and they can't breathe underwater. However, this fic makes me think that they are there, in Squidward's back yard, without protective gear, and are perfectly fine. It is, well, not conforming to the rules set forth by either fandom. So ignoring the fact that we have three ponies who are for some reason outside of their home town, under the sea, friends with fishes, in another universe, for no explained reason, that's still a pretty big flaw to overlook.
2) Tense issues. You switch between past and present tense a lot. Pick one and stick with it, preferably past. Past tense is the most common tense used, so you should get used to using it.
3) 'Dialogue tags!' The confused reader cried in dismay. 'I can't tell who's speaking because there are no dialogue tags in places!' Protip: If characters are having a conversation, then you
probably shouldalways tell us who is speaking. Multiple lines of dialogue, especially when there are more than two characters in the scene, should always have something to tell us who's speaking when.4) I'm feeling so compressed, and so is this story. It's, what, three-thousand words long? Almost all of that is dialogue with little narration at all, and what little narration we have usually boils down to like one or two lines. Description is a powerful tool.
5) Is that a... it is. Why is there a youtube video smack-dab in the middle of the fic? Really, I want to know. Was it because the song is in there? Doesn't seem like a very good reason to me, but that could be just me.
6) Check your tags. Part-way through the fic you attempt to bold some text, and I can see the failed attempt at ending the bold. The result that the rest of the story from then onwards was in bold.
7) Were characters in character, or out of it? I'm not so familiar with the Spongebob Characters anymore, and I'm not entirely certain about the rest of the ponies. Though that's a good portion that there are a lot of times I'm not certain who's talking.
Over all, if serious, I'd suggest trying to fix this. Writing Spongebob episodes with Ponies seems a little... well weird when you come down to it. But if that's what you want to do I dig. Just try and keep in mind the uniqueness of both worlds when you're writing. If troll, well have a moustache:
Over all, thank you for allowing me to spend some time reading and commenting on your story. It was at least... interesting.
~HPL
1773723 'sall good.
1773591 Or that you're following me.
Do you understand the concept of time travel?
Of course yu don't, you're a moron.
Unless you're not.
Are you a moron?
Nah.
Someh
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1774055 Well your avatar pic, looks really happy. Also....WHAT HAPPENED TO THE WEBSITE?!?!
well that was funny
1773854 Answer to #1: They can survive because magic.
Answer to #2: Easily fixable no big deal.
Answer to #3: The reason why there are no Dialogue tags there is because it's obvious on who's speaking, just watch the episode to know who said what, I put Dialogue tags on people who spoke differently from the episode.
Answer to #4: No description is needed because this isn't a story, it's random adventures including the MLP:FiM and SpongeBob Co. said so in the story description.
Answer to #5: Why use subtitles when I can simply use a video people can listen to? Just made more sense to me.
Answer to #6: Fixed.
Answer to #7: I tried to keep them as in character as possible, I guess I did an okay job, but I never said I was a pro. I'll get better as I go.
Now I have a question? Y U Mad at the vid?
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I don't really think this is a good enough answer but whatever. Your fic your rules, I won't really lose any sleep over it.
I shouldn't have to watch supplementary material to find out who said what in a fan-fiction, I'm not familiar with Spongebob, I used to like the show as a kid but I stopped watching it and haven't watched any full episodes in a long time. Likewise there's going to be people who maybe do like spongebob and come to read your fic. What if they haven't seen that episode yet? Or perhaps can't remember who said what lines? It's just curtious ya dig?
I wasn't talking about the story description, I was talking about narration description in the story. Describe what they're doing, especially since we can't see them because, yanno, text and all that. And as I said above not everyone may have seen the episode or really remember it well so they can't mentally picture it all, especially when adding pastel ponies into the picture.
I'll answer these together so that I don't have to repeat myself. First off, I'm not really /mad/ at the vid, more exasperated and slightly annoyed and disappointed. Having a video smack-dab in the middle of your fic kind of breaks flow ya dig? I get the reasoning behind it, why write the lyrics out when people can just listen to it right? Well two reasons really, one is that by having a video in the middle of the fic it's jarring, breaks immersion, and almost holds hostage that part of the story for us as we have to click to listen to the song. If you want the song being able to be referenced, I'd suggest finding another place for it. I think the new update added an Author's Note section you could possibly put it in there, or you could at the very least put the video at the bottom so that it doesn't break flow within the fic.
All right, gonna take your word for it. And yes, you will get better as you go, I can totally dig that. Keep writing what you like man, just keep my thoughts in mind dig? Peace.
1775633 Whatever man, I gave you my answer, I can't nor will I please everyone. Sorry to disapoint.
...Huh?
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1781014 WEE WOO WEE WOO WEE WOO!
You still used an Anti-Sea Bear Circle, silly.
ponies in undergarments?