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nintendo917


I plan on writing a fanfic series called Incursion

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Princess Celestia is scheduled to arrive at Ponyville for the yearly Summer Sun Celebration; a ceremonial gathering commemorating the summer solstice. Normally, ponies everywhere would throw wild parties the night prior and stay up till dawn to watch the Sun Goddess raise the sun, just as she has always done every morning since the beginning.

However, just as last year didn't exactly go off without a hitch, this year will also have a setback of its very own. A catastrophe the likes of which nopony could never have hoped to foresee or prepare for.

I would like to thank my friends for helping me out with this story, especially my bro SuperBro.BrawlerKart who helped edit the story along the way. I couldn't have done all this without his help.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 37 )

Our pride and joy is finally up on the site. I'm so proud of ya, nintendo.:twilightsmile:

Is...is this...a GUILTY GEAR CROSSOVER!?!?!?

Please tell me it is

First a Blazblue/MLP cross over and now a Guilty Gear/MLP cross? All I have to say is LET'S ROCK!

Guilty Gear? One of the best fighting games to grace humanity since Street Fighter 2?
My Little Pony? An adorable show that caters to little girls and grown men alike?
Instant like and fav from a prinny, dood.

im gonna need to read a chapter or 2 more before i can give an opinion :applejackunsure:

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:raritywink:The more we write as authors, the more we improve. However, we can't do so unless our readers are able to point out our errors in a positive and encouraging manner. By all means, please speak out your thoughts and advice so that we may better ourselves.

We can't do that if all you're going to do is flame us.:facehoof:

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As my partner said before, we had originally decided to post it all as one big shi-bang! However, we thought that it'd be more managable to section it. That way we could tweek it better, ya know? The whole fic is indeed ready, but we wanted to freshen it up a tad before publishing it.:pinkiesmile:

As for what went wrong, I don't see anything bad as of yet. So far, in these two chapters, we haven't really gone anywhere. The whole thing with Rarity is to setup a joke that will appear later when the action hits Ponyville like an overdue electric bill. If that iself is the problem, then all I can say is to be a bit patient.

You're telling us that we haven't gone anywhere and I agree.:twilightsheepish: So far, nothing interesting has happend. That doesn't mean we don't realize this. We have so much planned for this fic. So much, in fact, that I am in the middle of writing a sequel. I have big plans for this and my own fic. But you have to bear with us, dear reader, and show some patience. Though I understand where you're coming from.

So again, to all who read this, as we post more segments we encourage all to help us out. Bad grammer? We'll get on it. A paragraph that could have been worded differently? No problem, just tell us how we can improve its structure. :flutterrage:Let us know! But you have to tell us first, and not simply flame us.:fluttercry:

Oh, one last thing. Although I haven't discussed it with Nintendo yet, I would like to post a chapter every day. I don't think that is beyond our capability, so I think he'll agree.:rainbowdetermined2:

we are currently undergoing some heavy editing, so hang tight.

Alright, everypony! Chapter 1 has been updated with a huge segment added to it. It's now over 3,000 words.

:raritydespair:I worked my arse off, so I hope I don't dissapoint. As always, please be sure to add constructive criticism when possible. It helps us greatly.:pinkiesmile:

1741696it's always good to see someone appreciate someone else's hard work, so thank you.

1752285 No problem...I missed the new 3k words and just read it...people on the site must not like crossovers, dood.

I enjoyed it. I am not sure if you caught Ky's character due to me not paying attention to him very much, but Sol's character seems pretty spot on...keep it up.

1752716 It's a sad world we're living in, dude. But hey thanks again for the support, be sure to give us some more constructive criticism so that we can improve the story in any way at all.

Oh... Wow....
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You really didn't just delete my comment....delete my comment...
Never. NEVER. Delete a comment... for whatever reason...
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Get out.
Take your SHIT fucking story's with you.
I do not care where you go, just get out.
Get out and stay away from this site.
Stay away until you CAN make a half good story.
Because I'm pretty sure that I can shit out something that's better without an editor...

Oh, and I'm screen-capping this for proof to show in case you delete this comment...
~With little love, Liam Cahill
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I'm sorry that my partner here deleted your comment, Liam Cahill. Though I know not to ever do such a thing, his thought was to simply update a chapter by going so far as to delet comments that no longer applied to the chapter. We both deeply apologies for this and it will never happen again. Our intention was never to offend.
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Again, we are deeply sorry about this. Nintendo has reminded me what your original comment was about. Something about chapter 1 being too short? We've taken this into consideration and have extended it appropriately.

:fluttershysad:We hope that this inconvenience doesn't take away from you enjoying our fan fiction.

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No.
It's shit.
It's a forced fic that's been edited extensively.
Your not sorry.
How this even passed moderation is a wonder.
Go to jail.
Do not pass go.
Do not collect $200.
Go. To. Jail.

~With little love, Liam Cahill
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I'm sorry you feel this way, sir. Unfortunately, we will continue to work on what we feel is, at the very least, a decent addition to fimfiction.net. We've spent many late nights working hard on this fic, planning out the plot, events, humor, and more, before we felt it ready to be posted onto the site, and we will continue to work on it as we improvise and edit it. All this is but a learning experience for both me and my partner.

I hope you find a fiction out there that you do enjoy, however. Hopefully, the next fanfiction you come across won't be a waste of your time.

EDIT
For everyone else out there who does enjoy our work, :twilightsmile:I'm happy to announce that the next chapter is on it's way, and will be posted tonight. I'm not quite sure exactly, though. Depending on how much I procrastinate (lol) it could be posted either before or after midnight EST Time Zone (Virginia time). :pinkiehappy:So keep your eyes peeled for that!

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>Decent
>13 dislikes
>10 likes
...
Let me tell you something about this site... you don't get 13 dislikes without at least 3 or so angry comments...
You also don't get 10 likes without doing something right...
Now I did say this in my first comment, but you NEED a LOT more work for this to be half-way decent, Im talking about at least a week or two...
Either way, my point has been said, I bid ye a fair day.

~With little love, Liam Cahill
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Here ya go, you guys! Another chapter pumped out for the day. It's not as long as chapter 1, but hopefully it doesn't dissapoint.

I actually wasn't in the mood to do any editing at first, what with me just getting home from my job, but I got into the swing of things as I continued writing. I'm very happy about this one, althought I'm sure there are a few things that could be cleaned up. :pinkiesick:Idunno, somethin about late night writing... :fluttershbad:

As always, don't forget to comment on what we did right or wrong. :flutterrage:Your criticism matters to us! ... :pinkiesad2:Just please make sure it's constructive.

soo whos that person zecora was talking about i know he sounds familiar and look like it too bassed off the cover art

So, Sol Badguy (Guy with Devil's Red and Sword that makes the trees look like twigs) and Ky Kiska (Angel man in White) have appeared in Equestria! I am actually half glad they weren't ponified, would have been pretty awkward, dood.

I ain't no expert on detecting errors in stories, so I didn't see any when I read it...and I still find it rather amusing.

Keep on trucking, doods.:twilightsmile:

1761917 you'll just have to wait until the next chapter to find out, but I think it's pretty obvious since this is a Guilty Gear crossover after all.

1761947 i'm just glad that you're enjoying what we worked hard to achieve. I mainly wanted to write this fic just because I wanted a Guilty Gear X MLP crossover to exist.

1761968 No problem, dood... I have been thinking on giving Zecora a minor role in my Disgaea story...but I CAN'T RHYME(I misspelled this, didn't I?) WORTH SHIT... reading Zecora's lines in your chapter was pretty cool.

1762009 Zecora can be a pain in the ass to write dialogue for, and many writers never add her because of that. But the trick to rhyming is to have a good rhythm with each verse, as if you were writing a song. However I cannot take credit for the rhyming, it was all thanks to a good friend of mine.

1762011 only the single greatest fighting game to grace the planet earth. It puts games like Street Fighter to shame (not trolling, just my personal opinion).

Things have been kinda slow, unfortunately. Although we've made great progress with the other chapters, me and Nintendo have been distracted by our favorite games (me with War For Cybertron and Assassin's Creed II:twilightblush:). Rest assured, however, that we have no intention of dropping this fic. :rainbowdetermined2:Not by a long shot.

1794715 That's right, the next chapter is 90% done, it's just needs some more editing.

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>Fighting games
Get the fuck off of the Internet. We don't like your kind around here.

YAY NEW CHAPTER IS HERE!!! Now things begin to get serious, so enjoy.

Oh shit, dood.

So we are finally getting to it.

Interesting how the Like and Dislike bar are fighting each other over supremacy, dood.

yeah, it's pretty crazy.

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Funny, since I partly drew inspiration for the sequel to this fic from Guilty Gear and Mane6's "Fighting Is Magic" title.:trollestia:
(Sequel in baby stages btw)

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Agreed, no-one I know play's those pieces of shit...

I haven't been on here in awhile due to life, guys. Sry if we haven't been updating so frequently. It's mostly me, really. Nintendo would ask me if I'm ready to do some polishing, and I'd always turn 'em down. Jus' hang in there everypony. Find something else to tide you over until then, k:twilightsmile:?

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