Prologue - 00 - You Live to Break Me
Prologue:
"You Live to Break Me"
Celestia took one last look in the full body mirror and took a deep cleansing breath. She was clad in the finest armor that could be forged: each piece was shaped from steel then coated in gold and inscribed with the symbols of the Royal House. She lifted her helmet and grimaced as the frigid metal stung her flesh, encasing her entire head in a cast of diamond encrusted gold, the only outlets for her horn, eyes and muzzle. She always found the alabaster wings protruding from the sides to be excessive.
“Sister.” She turned towards the source of the voice. It was her youngest sister, Mi Amore Cadenza, but she preferred to be called Cadence by everyone. On her back was a dozing Pegasus filly with a sky-blue coat and a ruffled rainbow striped mane.
“Yes, Cadence? What is it?” Celestia asked. “And why did you bring Rainbow Dash here? I’m about to go into battle.”
“I felt that one shouldn’t go into battle without bidding farewell to one’s kin,” Cadence replied, looking somewhat concerned.
“And what of Thunderlane? Where is he?” Celestia asked, raising an eyebrow.
“He is with his father, as always. He’s very much his father’s son. He still insists on coming with you and Siegfried. I worry for the colt.” Cadence answered, looking even more concerned.
Celestia gazed at Cadence compassionately. “It’s fine, Cadence. There’s no reason to worry for us. I’m sure Father will be able to sort this matter out.” She put a comforting hoof on Cadence’s shoulder.
“I don’t believe the Changelings are serious about this mad scheme of conquering the realms. And even if they are, we are more than able best them in a battle—and they know it. They wouldn’t dare a full-scale battle.”
Cadence sighed. “I know. I still feel that you should say farewell, it still might be some time before your children see you again.”
Celestia smiled. “I understand.” She looked over at the sleeping filly and leaned close, gently nudging the filly.
“Rainbow Dash, Dashie. It’s Mommy,” Celestia said in a gentle voice. The filly slowly stirred, stretching her downy forelegs out and giving a squeaking yawn before slowly opened it's cerise eyes. When she looked up into Celestia face her eyes bulged and her face contorted into the portrait of terror.
The filly scurried up Cadence’s neck and clung to it, wailing piteously into her aunt’s coat.
Celestia instantly started her best to calm the crying filly, with Cadence stood awkwardly with Rainbow Dash clutching her neck and shrieking.
“No, no, no…” Celestia shushed. “Look it’s just me see?” She removed the helmet and laid it at her hooves, letting her ethereal pink hair fall loose. She lifted her hooves to her face. “Lookie. Where’s Mommy?”
Rainbow Dash stopped crying and tilted her head, looking confused.
Celestia dropped her hooves from her face. “Here I am!”
Rainbow Dash’s face broke into a brilliant grin and began to convulse with giggles. She reached to her mother and Celestia gently levitated the filly to her chest, enfolding her with her wings.
“See, I always said that helmet was fearsome,” Cadence said smugly.
“You were right,” Celestia laughed gently. “Now, if you will, I will say goodbye to my daughter.”
Cadence nodded. “I will go and see Luna. Faust believes she’s probably fussing over some small detail in the armor design as always.” With that she turned and walked towards the door. She hesitated in the doorway. “If and when you become the All-Mother, I would recommend Luna for Bifrost Guardian. She’s got the eye for detail, she does.”
Celestia looked up from Rainbow Dash. “Cadence, I don’t believe we’d need to consider such things for a long time.”
Cadence nodded faintly but her expression was troubled and she left the room.
Celestia sighed and cupped Rainbow in her right wing, drawing her close to her face and nuzzling her tenderly. “Your mother loves you very much, you know that, don’t you Dashie?”
Rainbow responded with gurgled baby speech and started to nip at Celestia mane.
“You’re so innocent,” Celestia cooed. “I wish it had not come to this. But it will only be a little while and will seem like dream when I return.” She took a deep breath. The little filly cradled securely in her wing had no concept of the dark, gruesome deeds her mother was about to undertake.
Celestia kissed her daughter’s forehead and Rainbow Dash cooed softly. Apparently playing with her mother’s mane had tired her. Celestia smiled and carefully set the filly down on the nearby bed, pulling the cover over her sleepy child.
“Rest well my dear,” She whispered before once more kissing the now sleeping Pegasus on the forehead.
Celestia straightened up and turned again towards the mirror. Her golden armor reflected the light from the candles, surrounding her in an aura of gleaming spangles. She let out a long, deep sigh and once again levitated the helmet onto her head. It felt somehow far heavier.
She heard a sudden spiking sound and could distinguish her younger sister Luna’s voice.
“Forsooth! This armor’s left clip for mine shoulder is most uncomfortable!”
She could hear her father, Odin, attempting to calm Luna.
“Now daughter, please, let the armorer do his job.”
“But Father, doth he not realize this clip is causing me the most agonizing discomfort?”
And on it went.
Celestia laughed to herself and quietly walked out of the room, pausing to take one last loving look at her sleeping daughter. “May the sun shine forever more on you, my child.”
With that she closed the door carefully and walked towards her sister’s room.
“Now, Luna, what’s this about a clip?”
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Celestia’s armor chafed her raw flesh and every pebble on the ground threatened to send her collapsing to her knees, but she compelled her sore and strained muscles to continue through the desolate ruins of the changeling hive.
The smoky air should have been searing her lungs and eyes but they were already numbed from weeping over the bodies of her father and husband.
She forced the image of their shredded, bloodied corpses from her mind. No more weeping. It is time to finish this.
Their power must be taken; Hjerte Eske must be found. In case Chrysalis ever returned from hiding in the labyrinth of tunnels Hekkerhiem, in case she was ever mad enough to attempt such takeover again, in case these monsters ever tried to lift their infernal heads again…
She swallowed a hot, sticky sob. “Hate, the most useless of all causes,” Father always said. He wouldn’t want this. He wouldn’t want you to hate them. He wouldn’t.
A short, sharp sob burst from her lips.
But it will be hard to forgive them, Father. So hard…
She rounded a corner. Straining to lift her head higher, she brightened the glow of her horn revealing a spacious cell containing a huge bed, a massive nightstand and a small crib.
This must have been the royal bedroom, She thought, taking notice of the half-destroyed royal crest hanging above the bed.
Everything was covered with shards of glass, splinters of stone and shreds of cloth and Celestia stood for a good two minutes, seized by a sneezing fit. When her fit passed, a faint noise pricked her ears.
It was such a soft sound a normal pony might have missed it; her ears only just caught it. She increased the light from her horn until the entire room was bathed in light. The sound suddenly grew louder and now she could clearly hear that it was emanating from the crib.
Warily she began to approach the crib, her heart hammering in her ears and her breath coming short.
RELAX. It’s too small to hide a changeling. And there’s nothing left on this planet that could possible hurt you…
With that forbidding thought in mind, she leapt at the crib and thrust her glinting horn within…
…Just missing a tiny foal.
The foal’s eyes bulged at the horn hovering a mere breath from her muzzle and her entire face crumbled as it let out a heartrending wail. Celestia, instinctively drawing her horn back, stood staring at the foal.
It was a filly, unnaturally small, with the sable coat characteristic of changelings with punctures in her legs, wings and crooked horn.
“Shhh, child…” Celestia said but the foal’s crying older grew louder and she began to flail her legs about.
Is this Chrysalis’s child? Who else’s foal would be here…Chrysalis left her child behind? Celestia wondered.
The foal’s cries echoed throughout the cell and Celestia wasn’t sure if it was the holes in her flesh or her minute size but she expected the filly’s wracking sobs to tear her into pieces.
She seems so fragile…
She levitated the foal out of the crib and drew her to her chest. The foal instantly stopped crying and gazed up at Celestia with huge, dark green eyes as if the sudden show of concern shocked her.
“Where’s your mommy?” Celestia asked idly. She began to rock the foal, an almost unconscious impulse. She’s only a little younger than Dashie…
The foal didn’t even blink, it was like she hadn’t heard her speak, and her gaze was so intense Celestia was becoming disconcerted.
“Did she leave you here? Why didn’t she take you with her?” Celestia asked.
Suddenly, the foal’s entire body flushed pale blue. The holes in her legs and horn were filled with indigo and her wings shrank until they disappeared entirely. Celestia was so shocked she nearly dropped the foal.
“Holy Faust—”
A smile burst across the filly’s face and she cooed happily, lifting her hooves toward Celestia’s face. The way the filly looked at her now, her face radiant with an expression of pure joy while her face was still damp from her tears, it broke something in the alicorn’s heart.
She wrapped her wings around the foal and pressed her muzzle against her indigo coat.
“Hate, the most unless of all causes,” Father always said. “Love, the only worthy cause.”
“You’re coming with me,” she whispered and walked out of the royal bedroom with Chrysalis’s child cradled against her chest.
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Read later, watch thor and avengers first.
1929253>>1929170 Good idea
so, this is connected to iron mare, correct?
1929367 Yeah, same universe. But you can read this without having read Iron Mare.
1929414 well, already read it
. keep up the work. cant wait to see the other hero stories if you do them
1929422 Oh I'm going to do them!
I've got Flutterhulk in the early stages of writing (i.e. a plot already sorted out and writing little scenes here and there).
But I've yet to fully work out the plots for Captain Equestria (the most difficult) or The Avengers (which needs to wait until the others are finished)
Ooh! Awesome!
This is good. You have my track
Lemme guess. Trixie's Loki?
1929557>>1929698 Well, thank you IwoaForever!
And yeah. No use hiding that right?
By the GODS this is AWESOME!!!!!!
Rainbow Dash and some Changling as Goddesses? Huh....are the Alicorn's even Gods in this? Shit, you have my vote, I'll seriously be awaiting to see how this will turn out, mind adding Derpy Hooves as well if anything, I find it very hard to read or write a story without having even a minor metion of her 
1930501 Well, thank you. And yes. There will be a brief mention.
1932908 Because I'm made of pure evil.
Also, it'll probably still be going when you get back. Me and my sister write VERY slowly.
That was sooo awesome!
1937639 Well thank you very much!
Be sure to go and thank PhoenixAvalon, since she helping to co-write and in fact, most of the prologue is hers.
Love it :)
1939920 THANKS!
1939921 no prob
Any idea when the next update is coming this was so good
2002582 Hopefully before the end of February.
i can't wait its gotta be awesome, is that for just the next chapter or for the entire thing.
2002713 It's for the next chapter. Me and my sister (who's co-writing this, she's a big time Thor fan) are both rather slow when it comes to writing.
2002750 well i can't wait so keep them coming as best you can
2002755 Will do mah boi!
Reading this again. Still love it, and I love the new cover image.
wish I could have some artwork for Mare of Steel
2010675 You should ask around. I'm pretty sure somebody somewhere could make you one.
And guess what? I actually asked the guy who drew this if he could draw it a LOOONG time ago and he just so happened to think it was a cool idea. I lucked out.
I'll do some digging and see if I can find some Rainbow Dash as Superman artwork.
HaminuaHaminuaHaminuaHaminuaHaminuaHaminuaHaminua WHAT?!
... 'squee' DIS GON B GUD!
This prologue I like it....ANOTHER!
First sentence: "Celestia took a one last look in the full body mirror and took a deep cleansing breath."
“Hate, the most unless of all causes,” Father always said. “Love, the only worthy cause.”
should be useless?
Anyway, I am rather impressed by the quality here. The level of detail is a little low, but you offset it with fantastic character and action. I find myself picturing the scene in my mind even without the descriptions I usually like.
Writing is suddenly alien here, you don't have the normal issues I find with your writing. Though the style's very different, I've tried explaining it, but I keep tripping on myself each time I try to explain it. I'd imagine it's to do with your sister, but it's very unnoticable. I'll be blunt though and not sugarcoat it, by now you'll be understanding that's how I am, an arrogant git who loves himself a bit too much, but I prefer your style. I find it more natural to tell the truth. Probably because your writing through Princess Celestia or the scene's just not that fun to play with. Thinking about it, she isn't like Fluttershy and Rarity, two broken characters that you've gone into such depth and struggle with consequences and issues, but I find then I could find that hard to believe. Maybe once I've started reading through Rainbow Dash my opinion might change. It honestly could just be me though, the scene you write is slow-paced, it's meant to be, I'm a fast paced action writer, so scenes like this are meant to be my natural enemy.
Hope this makes sense anyways, nothing to worry about what I'm saying, just know for at the moment I'm not as passionate as your other work. But anyways I always have opinions.
Celestia face her eyes bulged For what should be a sort of mesmorising and touching scene, the word bulged just ruins it there. It's comical and tough. Yes what follows is a comical action, but it ruins the entire thing. I'd more rather you went her eyes widened, popped or shot open.
The little filly cradled securely in her wing had no concept of the dark, gruesome deeds her mother was about to undertake. Dude! This isn't deserving of a smack on the head, but I am like dude! This is like telling what this entire scene is about, we don't need to be told, I'm pretty sure everyone was aware of what this scene was. It's like trying to watch a play of Romeo and Juliet then suddenly someone elbows me to duh 'This two are kissing' I know! Harsh, but I'm trying to highlight how much I'm against this sentence.
Hope this helps anyways and I did enjoy the read.
Great callback to the show cast members, considering who plays Trixie on the show is the same voice for the queen of the Changelings.
Nice start, but I do worry considering Thor myths and history in the comics... I mean are there any plans for the upcoming sequel to Thor and the Avengers in the future ?
In other words, what is your plan for the dark elves ?
Also given that it is Rainbow Dash as Thor, what are your plans for Gilda the Griffin in this tale ?
Do keep up the good work upon such a good idea like this one.
thecripplegate.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/07/Let-Me-Get-This-Straight-300x286.jpg Celestia, Luna, and Cadence are all daughters of Odin, but Celestia will fill the role of the character as she's the mother of Thunderlane and Rainbow Dash, who is of course Thor- er, Soar. We've got Chrysalis and the Changelings as opposed to King Laufey and his Frost Giants, and Loki is expied by... Trixie?
...
A'ight, works for me.
my 2nd least favorite pony....my least favorite hero (Thor)....i'm still sure you'll make me love this story...without the waterboarding.
3591977 Don't forget that the Frost Giants and the Dark Elves are kinda following similar roles.
Aww, baby Rainbow Dash was so CUTE!! ...And then people DIED.
So who was/were the dad/dads of RD and Thunderlane? How does Faust fit into the Norse mythology? Did Crysalis get AWAY?! And...and...I...um...I think I need to go to bed; I'm going slap-happy! 
Wasn't it useless?
yes, yes it was
...with Love and Awesomeness
Dude did your sister draw the cover? If so whoa I bow at your feet you are incredibly talented!
8979680
Alas she did not. She did, however, write a fair share of Trixie’s scenes.
Oh hell no! My worst enemy is not the mother of one of my favorite ponies!