• Published 28th Nov 2012
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The super Adventures of my super selfinsert Alicorn OC ofc - 9gagarmyguy



This is my first story about a new Alicornpony who just came to ponyville and discovers his passion

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The Arrival of Redspike Alicornthunder

Redspike Aliconthunder departed from the train at 9 a.m, his favorite time of the day. Just as he thought it couldn't be any better, he ran of to see some of the super interesting Elementz of Harmony, he heard much about Twilight Sparkle and her friends.
So he decided to visit the Library first, even though he didn't knew the actual reason for his vacation in a small town like ponyville at all. Since he was the dear father of pincess Celestia herself, he didn't knew better than knowing the saviors of her daughters kingdom.
Just as he tried to pass the marketplace he saw the Boutique Rarity owned, back then, before Ponywar II, where half of the magical land of Equestria was destoryed. So Redspike Aliconlighting thought: "Why shouldn't I visit Rarity's first." He thought it, unlike all the other mentally ill ponies who keep talking to themselves out loud.
Just as he arrived at the Boutique and Rarity greeted him he went in and got some of these cookies from Rarity offered and thought nothing of it.

After a while Rarity asked: "Why is you arround here anyways, Alicorntempest, or may i call you Redspike?"
Reddott responded:" Oh dear, please call me Redstring, i beg to differ." He somehow registered that talking to Rare was pointless, just as she mentioned what a honor it was to have he here at all. Rarity said:" Ah reckon y'all better keep going, dear Redspike Alicornhurricane, since your folks may be concerned since that arrival of a Redspike is unusual." He decided that he could maybe befriend Rarity more than just a normal Ponyfolk pony-folkpony, but just as he asked if she wanted to spend some time at the castle of Canterlot, he stated that she was unsure of it and asked if anyone has actually really been far even as decided to use even go want to do look more like it.

He bid her farewell and moved on.

All of a sudden a Discord popped out and right before he could get on the floor, a sudden wave of dismissed Elementz of Harmony came to stand by Redspike Alicornthund3r, barlely noticing his Alicornesshigh. As they tried to banish discord back to wherever he came from. Just as Discord was about to be sealed right away again, he decided to overclock his magic to overclocked magic and was about to beat the Maine Six, RedAngle AlicornCloud moved between them and showed his Uber-overlord off, defeatening Discord in one fatal strike. Man, that would still hurt tomorrow, he thought.

After that uneventfull morning, he went the the nearest Starapplebucks, a new store that is completely new to buy a hot chocolate, since he wanted.


After he drank it, he saw a Babydragon moving towards the Marketplaced marketplace and Redbubble wasn't even certain where the Dragon headed, wether to the actual marketplace or more to the Boutique of that one Pony mentioned before.

He decided to sneak after him for the sake's sake. He packed up some of the meat and decided to hide in a nearby bush (a bush close to the Boutique, he could tell the dragon was ohw to there, he is a frickin alicorn) and listended closly as they spoke. After Spike (that's the name of the dragon) poured all containments of his heart over la fashionísta, he could smell something, unsure if it was the meat he bought earlier or the spaghetti the litle dragon was launching everywhere at the moment. Hower, this event being boring as a duck, he went on to Sugarcube corner.

Redspoke Alicoonhunter watched how the Cakes closed the door of their restaurant. He wasn't hungry and still had meat he bought earlier, so this didn't bother him that much.





He chilled with rainbowpony for some time, but that was uneventfull.

He always though that Fluttershy was really kawaii and qt, so he went there without any no obstacles. Just has he arrived he observed Flutershy sitted there, playing something while cracking open a bear. That day was a good day. He rested in the sunflower field to not be cracked up to. He really ought to know that it was Oktoberfest around this october, so he went back in town for a beer and a place to sleep over his steddaughters night.

Day 1 at the night:
He was woken up by a loud noise, coming from somewhere down his current residence, so Redspike Alicornelectricity went up, away from that screeching sound, coming from the basement. He didn't want to start again from scratch, so he went to get some kool-aid rest without it. After this suprising action, he went to bed.

Day 2:


As he rose up, he was as far as decided and went full of his confidence to run the leafes of three trees and went to a refill station to get going. After he was fully charged, he went down to a open playground, building a casle for some time. That really amused him, as much as pinecones would do to to do.


After that, he moved on to Sweet Apple Acres, since the farm was moved near the marketplace and the bouthique after that horrible earthquake that demanden all the good earth before he could even decide as to use french words.

Applebloom was the first honored pony that had the luck to meet him and instantly saw that his blank, was flank, at least Cheerlily said that sometimes, to her, he just appeared pretty naked.

Moving on, Redspike Alicornstorm would not give to bucks, he still hasn't got his Qtymark, why should he ahve it have though. His special talent was everything at all eversince.

Just as he met Twilight in her Housetreehouse he wanted to tell her that everythings seems to be weirdly written with a overwhleming bad grammer and tons of typos, but before she could even react, Redsquare noticed that he couldn't believe anything that was stated above, so he left Ponééville forever and ever, it doesn't really matter, at least he was on the internet.

Author's notes:
Thanks for reading, please subscrice and rate, like and subscribe if you want more of it. I still got some ideas. Till then, see you later innovator :)

Comments ( 53 )

Obvious troll is obvious.

1703109

Verily my good man/lass.

NO GHUYS IT'S OBVIOUSLY NOT A TROLL. YOU JUST CAN'T SEE THE GENIUS BEHIND IT. GAWL.

1703109 oh lawdy. You're here. That's never good.

....if you're gonna troll...please...please use proper grammar.

1. I don't think you understand what a one-shot is...
2. Bad pony! Bad! *Swats with rolled up newspaper*
3.:pinkiecrazy:
4. Obvious troll is obvious.

Ugh, another trollfic.

Seriously, you guys, this has been trolled to death. It's not funny anymore- go find something original.

Edit: C'mon, you're not even trying. Just, boring. Really. It's not usual that I dislike something so heavily, but come on, come up with your own jokes at least!

Sheesh.

Pfft. You guys are unbelievable. You aren't even giving it a chance. There is clear effort put into this story, and I for one cannot wait to read of the adventures of Redspike Alicornthunder. Even his name sounds deep, that's how deep this guy is. So why don't we all sit back and give this guy a fair–

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Why can't we just call it a joke, or a parody, or satire instead? It's pretty clearly made with the intention of poking fun at low-quality stories, not as an attempt to elicit an emotional response. (Unless it's made to get called out as an "obvious troll" in which case the person got a pretty easy success)

Not saying it's a good joke though.

You might as well have called this "My Little Triage: Rainbow Dash Loses Her Wings is Magic." It would have been more subtle.

Troll level: 0/10
It's too easy to tell that you're trolling. A good troll walks the fine line between "Are you fucking kidding me?" and "This sucks in more ways than I can count." You do need to put a little effort into things like this so that the reader is left wondering if you're a troll or just mentally handicapped.

1703256 I just realised something. Maybe it's a satire of bad satire fics.

That'd be oh so meta.

(sadly I don't think this author is clever enough for that)

Author.
Try to write a good trollfic at least.
You ruined the joke too early.

It's sad when people write shitty stories for the sake of drama. :applecry:

1703266 If only there were some sort of thumbs-up for a comment.

He always though that Fluttershy was really kawaii and qt,

That's when I stopped reading. TROLL!!! :derpytongue2:

1703301 I must commend you on getting that far.

ever realize that stories with OC alicorns nowadays are just troll fics and aren't serious like they used to be?

Huh.

This is why people hate OCs in general. And not just alis.

Come on guys! This is actually a good story! I for one liked the story for it's originality and the author's devotion to the stor-he he he he he he! OH HA HA HA! Couldn't say that with a straight face...

Just because you make a story crap on purpose doesn't make it any less crap.

Troll level: -1/10. Would not bang.

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Seriously dude. When you include 9gag(Never funny at all, period) in your name, you are immediately dubbed a troll in many minds. Combine that with this piece of drivel... Well, let's just say you're far from getting an A for effort.

Regidar hasn't seen this? I MUST ALERT HIM! Tomorrow.... *Crawls back into bed*

1703170 Notice how the trolls head is atop the pope's body. Now notice that that face suits him.....

Now notice how this man murdered the sacred art of trolling Alicorn stories. Thanks a bunch dude, the troll pope loves you.

Not even going to gives this a thumbs-down. It's what this author wants and I shall not reward such lazy, effortless trolling. :ajbemused:

Where the hell is Regidar when you need him?

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Fuck you all. I liked it. :moustache:
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1705381 Giggity giggity gi-gi-dee

1705381 You know I was almost at the end of the comments and i thought..." Wow Regidar isn't here what the hell".

1705950 I do have a life, you know. :moustache:

1705953 Well from you usually being the first to comment it's hard to believe :ajsmug:

1705971 Well, this fic goes to show.

1705973 Please don't even bring the fic into this. :fluttercry: :facehoof:

1705381
That has got to be one of the greatest pictures ever. Where did you get it?

1706229 Search "Rainbow Quagmire" in google images

1706239
How did anybody think to combine those two? It's crazy. They're nothing alike. But it's still a great picture.

1706255 Lol I don't even know.

Before judging over it so quickly, you guys probably shoud read the first letter of every word in the first row.

greetings, the autor

1705381

But seriously,bad troll fic is bad.

" I planned this as a oneshot but if it gets as much likes as i hoped I may write more."
He's gonna write more guise. :raritydespair:

Worst. Pony fanfic. EVER!

Obvious :trollestia: is obvious.

2619162 You're one to talk.

Was this supposed to be a parody?

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