• Member Since 9th Jan, 2012
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Princess_Rainbowdash


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As Apple Bloom got into bed, Applejack began to speak the tale of a young princess and a magical harp.

This is a short story, but that shouldn't stop you from reading it. This is also my first piece.

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Powerful.
The punctuation needs rework, however, but the story is still very powerful. Sad but not depressing, dark but not darkening. Nice work.

#2 · Jan 9th, 2012 · · ·

It's odd, you said she met a dragon, and yet afterwards you mentioned a dog?

119348 thanks I think that was a mistake. I'll try and fix it.

I feel like Chris Van Allsburg Harris Burdick deserves a word of acknowledgment here.

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