Carrot top encounters a so called myth The Slenderpony. my second fic
ok you sould know this is not part of the
story so this is just if your curious on how i made this and how to see more of me.
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anyway goodbye for now
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One, this story isn't even a thousand words and it should have never passed moderation.
Two, this story is terrible. It's a big mash pit of bad grammar and spelling errors prevalent enough to kill a college English teacher.
I certainly hope this is a trollfic, because if it isn't...
I would really hope that the, do-not-post-this-story-because-it-sucks-and-I-know-it-and-people-are-going-to-hate-it effect would fall into effect, but in your case it hasn't. At this point I can not even offer you help. You kind of need to go read up on how to make those 26 letters in the alphabet work correctly.
P.S. Your cover image, it's a man!
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MAH GAWD
ITS SO BOOTIFUL
I cried tears of gold. PURE GOLD, mind you, not that fake shit Nunchucks tried to sell me the other day.
You, my good author, are truly an example of awesomeness. Don't listen to 1603290 because he's just jelly that everyone hates his fics and he's never been featured, ever.
Oh wait, that's not right. I'm sorry, I must have suffered brain damage from the absolute shitiness of this fic. Now here's a video to sum up my reaction to this.
dont forget i do mention im only young and i have terrible grammar. and it is my first fanfic that has been puplished. so ill be tring to get better.
your really bad author- Xie Monk3yz ieX
Four chapters, overused and usually-badly-written fic idea, barely a thousand words, first comment is composed of hate, dislike bar is higher than like bar.
Let me get my hat.
*puts on hat that says: "Official TWE Nitpicker"*
Alright, time to read.
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I'm not sure I can even give this a proper review...
so I'm just going to show you what you did wrong.
Color code!
Red - Spelling error.
Blue - Grammatical/punctuation error.
Green - Revision suggestion.
Purple - Replacement suggestion.
Orange - Reviewer's notes.
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Oh my. That... hurt to read. I'm sorry, but I have absolutely nothing positive to say about this story.
The idea is overused, it's poorly written and you need an editor, it is beyond rushed, and you ought to take your time to describe what characters are seeing or feeling.
2/10, would not read again.
/HyperRandomness, Official TWE Nitpicker and general slayer of hopes and dreams.