Celestia backed away slightly. She had expected a reaction from Twilight, but her getting up and yelling at her wasn’t the reaction she had wanted. She had hoped that Twilight’s spirit had already been broken, but it looked like she had some work to do.
More fun to be had, breaking her spirit. Her will to survive. Her innocent faith in her friends was... delicious, but annoying. Celestia’s smile returned. She was going to enjoy this.
“Twilight, Twilight, Twilight. I thought you knew better than to challenge me, your teacher. I’ve taught you everything that you know. But that doesn’t mean I taught you everything that I know!”
Twilight only growled in response, to busy concentrating to answer. She was busy charging an offensive spell, a variation used against the changeling invasion. Only this time, instead of lots of little blasts, Twilight was preparing to send out a single, concentrated blast.
“You can’t win against me, I am the very embodiment of the sun! I’ve been alive far too long for a simple mare to defeat me.” Celestia said, walking around Twilight slowly, forcing Twilight to turn in a circle to keep her in view.
“You. I don’t know why. I don’t know how. I don’t even care about the reasons and ways that I even got here. But you. I trusted you. You were like a second mother to me. But this. This is too much.”
Celestia stopped circling her, her eyes locking on to Twilight’s. She appeared to think for a minute.
“I know you cared for me, and that’s what you have to watch out for Twilight. Ready for one last lesson in friendship? Only this time from me?” Celestia said, her voice starting out mother-like and caring, only to shift to a cold, uncaring voice at the end.
“Why would I listen to anything that you have to say? You’ve apparently lied to me my whole life!”
“Oh, you’ll listen to me, and you’ll listen well, my little pony. Your final lesson begins now.”
She began to walk towards Twilight, who was beginning to look a little unsure. Her horn dimmed a bit. The thing about offensive spells is that, in order to prevent harm to an innocent pony, the caster had to truly believe that their life depended on it.Twilight’s will was beginning to waver, and that caused the spell to weaken.
Twilight began to back up. Celestia took this opportunity and began to talk.
“This lesson goes against all the silly little friendship reports that you sent. The lesson is called ‘Not Everypony Is Who they Seem’.”
“You’ve got a certain mindset, that while is admirable in today’s society, is totally wrong and leaves you defenseless against ponies that would just like to use you. Like me.”
Twilight’s horn had almost gone out, but with those words, the lavender aura flaring back up, and sparks actually appearing at the tip.
“You just used me? All along? I just can’t believe it. You’re not acting like yourself.” Twilight said, glaring questionably at her ruler and mentor.
“You just don’t get it, do you? It’s all one big act. The sovereign and just ruler of Equestria doesn’t exist. It was all a facade, one that has lasted centuries. But I got too involved. Time to stop... this involvement.” She said, her eyes glinting green again.
Twilight’s mind was working in over time, trying to figure out what she was hearing from her mentor. She knew the Princess. At least... she thought she did.
But... she was missing something. Something important. She had seen something, something that didn’t make sense.
Something... green.
“Stay back! I mean it!” Twilight said, stopping her own retreat backwards.
“Why Twilight? I thought we had an understanding. I teach, you listen. Isn’t how this works?”
“Yes. That was a deal I made with Princess Celestia. But you aren’t the Princess, are you?
Chrysalis.”
Twilight’s horn was glowing brighter than ever, and was getting ready to fire.
“Ah, she’s figured it out. I was wondering how quickly you could do it. If you could at all.” Chrysalis said, dropping the act immediately.
“You won’t get away with this! My friends-” Twilight started shouting, only to be interrupted by Chrysalis.
“Your friends are currently just becoming aware of your plight. There’s not a unicorn in Equestria that could follow that transport spell. There’s not a pegasus flying above the clouds that could spot this hidden fortress. There’s not an earth pony alive that could possibly get in here with all the reinforcements that we’ve put up.”
She glared at Twilight. An evil, loathing glare.
“So get this through your pretty little head of yours. No one. Not your friends in Ponyville, not your brother the lucky groom, and most certainly not the Princess and her mixed up little sister. No one is going to see you alive. Ever. Again.”
Twilight leveled her gaze and the Celestia imposter. Grunting, she prepared to let loose the spell that she had been holding.
“Go to Tartarus!”
Twilight screamed at Chrysalis, startling her. She hadn’t expected Twilight to completely lose it. She almost allowed herself to be hit by the blast that Twilight had thrown her way. Sidestepping the blast, she yelled to the guards posted outside of the door to come in and restrain Twilight.
The looming oak doors creaked as the two changelings outside pushed them open. With a dull thud they hit the walls behind them, and the two entered.
“Get her and show her to where she’ll be staying while she’s with us, won’t you?” Chrysalis said, trying to regain her composure. She had been knocked off balance when she had barely dodged the blast.
“Yes, my Queen.”
Reaj and Tange started after Twilight. She had used up all her magical energy with that one spell. She had put everything she had into it, not thinking ahead about what she would do afterwards....
“Come on you. We’ve got a nice cell for you. All magic-proof and everything.” Reaj said, stalking towards Twilight from one direction, while Tange came from the other side. Only one direction to retreat, and that was backwards.
Twilight backed up slowly, trying to think of something, anything, that would help get out of there. She drew a blank on every train of thought.
She bumped into a corner. Throwing a glance behind her, she saw that she had run out of room to go anywhere else. Nowhere left to run. Nowhere to hide.
Maybe Chrysalis was right. Maybe there was no hope.
Shivering, Twilight did what little she could, what with being physically exhausted, mentally strained, and magically drained.
Twilight screamed at the top of her lungs.
//b0d\\
Dash and Spike were still in the library ten minutes later, waiting for the letter from Celestia that would bring some order to the chaos that was raging there.
“How did this happen? How could nopony have seen this coming? I mean, we probably did sorta tick them off with the whole Canterlot wedding fiasco. We should have seen this coming, at least expect some sort of retaliation.” Dash was worrying constantly, hovering constantly around the room.
“Dash, we’ve been over this. It’s noponies fault. How could we have seen this coming? It’s been several years since the wedding, and there hasn’t been a changeling sighting since then! Who’d have guessed that they would’ve waited this long?” Spike said, who in an odd change of roles, was trying to calm down Dash.
“The Princess! Twilight! Me!” Dash yelled. “ It’s our fault that Twilight is now gone, in the hooves of those... things! What are we going to do!?” Dash said, her sanity taking a leave of absence for the moment.
“Hold on Dash. How do you work out that this is your fault?” Spike said, coming over to the cyan mare.
“It is my fault Spike! I should’ve seen this one coming! I’m the one that should know about danger! I’m the one that knows danger. I live for the rush that I get on adventure. I’ve made some enemies in my past and dealt with them before. I should’ve seen this coming! All I’ve done since the royal wedding is screw around, hoping that-” She cut off. And then immediately started again.
“I’ve also read enough Daring Do that I should know that the enemy always waits for you to let your guard down. That’s exactly what they’ve done.”
“Dash, stop blam-” Spike tried to interrupt her self-blaming, but Rainbow Dash cut him off.
“-They wait until a dark night, and then take Twilight when she’s sleeping!”
“Dash!” Spike yelled up at the flying pegasus, trying to get her attention.
“What Spike? What could be more important than finding Twilight!?” She yelled as she landed on the wooden floor with a dull thump.
“Calm down. You’re not going to find Twilight by blaming yourself. If anything, it’s my fault. I was here. Right there, just sleeping. I didn’t realize what was going on.” Spike said, his voice cracking at the end.
Dash looked over to the baby dragon, who was looking down at the ground. Was he crying? Dash softly walked over to Spike, and nudged him with her wing.
“Hey, hey, okay, I’ll admit that the blame game is getting us nowhere. But that doesn’t mean that we have to just sit here waiting, does it?” She said, trying to cheer him up while she was dying inside.
“Well, what can we do?” Spike asked, trying to wipe his eyes without Dash seeing*. Dash pretended not to see.
“Well, I’m not sure. We could see if anything is out of place. Maybe they left a note?” Dash said in her normal boisterous voice, as if nothing was wrong. She was running out of ideas. Twilight was normally the one that came up with the plans.
How was it, that in less than ten minutes, her whole life could be turned inside out?
“Maybe.” Spike said, unconvinced. “But why would th-”
Whatever Spike was going say, he never got to finish it, as a letter from Celestia had just come via the normal way.
“The Princess! What did she say?” Dash said before Spike could even open it.
“Give me a moment Dash!” Spike said, slitting the ribbon and unrolled it.
“Well!?” Dash said impatiently.
“Dash, give me a second!” He scans the letter, mouthing several of the words. “Okay, this is what she said.
“Spike. Gather Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Rarity, Pinkie Pie, and Fluttershy and get on the next train to Canterlot. We’ll meet you there. Please give those that haven’t heard this yet no cause for worry. Sincerely, Princess Celestia.”
“Is that it? That’s all the Princess has to say? Gather your friends and come to Canterlot?”
Dash yelled in irritation.
“Do you have a better idea? The Princess is probably our best hope for getting Twilight back, wherever she is. Come on, I’ll grab Pinkie Pie and Rarity. They’re closer. Go get Applejack and Fluttershy. You have wings, and can get there faster than I can.” Spike said. He sounded serious.
“Okay Spike, but you be careful, okay?”
“You too Dash.”
“Me? I’m always safe, Spike. No need to worry there. I’ll be back before you know it!” Dash said, trying to act normal.
With those words, she rushed out the window where Spike lost view of her in the fog. Dash flew up out of the fog and on towards Sweet Apple Acres.
Spike stood in the bedroom for a moment longer, looking around. It seemed impossible that just the night before Twilight had made dinner here. Had him help out with an experiment that nearly blew up.
Put him to bed here.
Said that she loved him.
Looking once more at the bedroom, Spike sniffled, trying not to cry. He had to be strong.
Only last night...
Everything changed.
“Twilight. We will find you. I promise.”
And with those words, the number one assistant left the library.
A/N
Well, this is strange, A chapter that was simply a blast to write.
It's up early, but I think that every other Friday thing is just going to become a deadline for a new chapter.
Time for credits!
EvilPresident! Thanks for Pre-reading this and putting up with the stupidiness of my original!
Something888! A thank you for you is in order also! Thanks for the Pre-read!
And ProtheanBrony! He Pre-read this, so it's not full of grammartical grammar related problems!
Am I going to do this every time?
Yes. Yes I am. These guys are awesome, and deserve the credit.
Update!
1727301
Of course.
Shit is now getting interesting. I can't wait to see their reactions and Twilight breakdown over it...wow I am slightly sadistic...
FINALLY an update. takes too long for them. i love it tho
more needed now plz
so awesome
My God, this is creative.
Ending is a bit sad
still a great story though
Celestia is circling the wagons, while Twilight's sanity is slowly but surely being worn away.
I think you may have missed something here.
-Ambassador of the Changelings,
Dopple Ganger
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Aren't we all?
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Sorry about that.
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soon....
1727501
Thanks!
1727517
Was that sarcasm? Or were you being serious. I can't tell.
1727542
I thought that you guys needed a sad ending for once. >:D
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1727630
Shoot. Sorry 'bout that. Fixed.
I just wanted to say before i read this story the pic with the changling twilight is really cool.
1727657
Eh. I'm working on making the chapters longer.
1727680
I'll fix in a bit.
1727686
...Thanks? It's not mine.
Yesss. Thisss pleassess me.
You will make more.
Why would the princess instruct them to potentially incite panic?
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1727711
Dammit... That's the biggest mistake so far...
1727707 hey dude you ever watch the show Dexter cuz if you have i wrote a fic you should read
1727733
Haven't heard of Dexter, but I'm up to trying anything.
One thing for you to be aware of is just how obvious Chrysalis is being when she's trying to convince Twi that she is Celestia. I know that's part of the point because that's partly how Twi knows that something is up... but still I personally feel it was slightly over done and would recommend toning it down a bit otherwise it leaves me wondering how Twi didn't catch on a bit faster.
i love the story original idea. cant wait for more!
1727773 really dude get on youtube and watch the first season, my fav by the way, you will not be disappointed
1727804
Thanks for pointing that out, but Twi's been confused. She's tired, and mentally exhausted. She's not going to think straight.
1727805
Thanks...?
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I will soon. Thanks for the recom
1727709 solid snake pony? All i can say is that would make an interesting fic.
1727888 I guess that is kinda true. Which is partly the disadvantage of reading each chapter as they come out and whatnot.
1727909
Hell yeah it's Solid Snake! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Fluttershy_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Applejack_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rainbow_Dash_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rarity_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Pinkie_Pie_lolface.png
He would definitely be the most kick-ass pony in Equestria.
Also, someone actually has made a Solid Snake in Equestria fic but it hasn't updated in about four months; it's not very good either.
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Yeah. I'm writing as fast as I feel that I can still balance Quality and Quantity.
1727962 right on brother!! and that sucks if the story isn't very good. how about you take a crack at writing one. have him like fighting some kinda metal gear except all ponyfied. I'd help
1727982
Who is solid snake?
1728002 say what? He's the most kick-ass neck braken secret agent guy ever! He's the protaganist to the metal gear game franchise just look him up or if you have a playstation 1 layin around buy the first game i'm sure its only a few bucks on half.com
I'm joking of coarse but he is the main character in metal gear solid look it up
I think a semi-colon would work better there.
This was I was looking foron fanfiction.net no one had stories about Chrysalis getting revenge! I adore this story already and I can't wait to see what happens next.
1728024
A few bucks? That's hilarious! I've been trying to get a copy of MGS1 for two years now and the cheapest one I found was over a hundred dollars!
As for the fanfic, I've only written one short oneshot so far and it wasn't all that good. So, chances of me making a MGS/MLP crossover are pretty slim for now
1728002
Here's a link to Solid Snake on wikipedia. click here
He's pretty kick-ass and if you like stealth games you will LOVE his.
Not to mention one of Snake's enemies in MGS1 (Psycho Mantis) breaks the forth wall even more than Pinkie does.
P.S: Watch the MLP:FIM episode "It's about Time". Future Twilight's outfit is a reference to Snake's appearance in Metal Gear Solid 4: Guns of the Patriots
1728252 really i own a copy but its in Alabama at my dad's and i think the second disk won't work for some reason i was so pissed man you have no idea that is on of my favorite games of all time list next to smash bros which he is in. dude you ever watch the show Dexter if you have i gots a fic you should read. It got a bad rep from when i first posted it. i hadn't proof read it yet and it was not pretty.
You missed some English errors:
"to busy" should be "too busy"
"seeing*." shouldn't have an asterisk
There are some places where the proper rule of paragraph breaks in speech is obeyed and some where it's not. It should be:
Character 1 says "Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet, consectetur adipiscing elit.
"Nam libero neque, adipiscing vel tristique vitae, facilisis ornare nunc."
Character 2 says "Praesent feugiat, purus at tempus gravida, lorem enim scelerisque libero, egestas euismod ligula nibh eu nisi."
Character 1 says "Morbi eu ligula nec magna porttitor bibendum. Curabitur sit amet venenatis velit."
Sometimes, there is an end quote in the paragraph before the speech is continued. I think you kept to the one-character-speech-per-paragraph rule well, but I don't distinctly remember.
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It was sarcasm. Sorry, I sould have made it clear.
Don't get me wrong, it doesn't mean that the story is bad. You actually managed to create a nice set up, except for Twilight not giving any fight back what so ever when she was captured...
The real problem is that this concept about "Villian comes back for revenge- Villian brain wash certain character to help her/him take down the rest- Celestia is useless as fuck" is nowadays more overused that Paris Hilton's vagina. Which is saying something.
But then again, your story is not "Bad". Just... Uncreative... So far, at least.
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That's gotta suck. I wouldn't be able to stand having to stop right after the helicopter fight.
You're in luck though. For some reason nobody likes the gamecube version so you can get it super cheap. I actually like it better. It adds tranquilizer guns and pretty much every other thing that was in MGS2. Plus with the better audio, Pscho Mantis voice is ten times creepier and Vulcan Raven's voice doesn't sound quite as warped. The only problem I had with it was that Gray Fox's voice was changed because the original voice actor was working on a different project at the time.
1728440 I flipped out bro my brother was mad too we had that game so long. Dude i saw you don't have any stories not even the metal gear one i wanted to read it. you gonna check my fit just curious i got no one to talk about my story for second opinions any more the guy who got me into mlp moved away. It sucks.
1727967 Oh def go for quality. It's just a different way of reading stories. One that sometimes affects them because certain details are forgotten and whatnot... which is why after a story I really liked is completed I'll often go back and reread it and it does give it a different feel to it because each detail is much more likely to stick because I've just read it... oh and because it's more likely to stick the second time.
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Sounds... Fun. I've been trying to get a PS1 forever, but never had the time or money.
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Shoot. I'll edit out that asterick. It's suposed to be the end of a sentence, and the asterik was there to put a note in on Gdoc. I thought it was gone...
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Thanks for the wiki. I'll look at it soon.
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Eh. I won't be using the "Celestia is useless" for much longer. Sorry that this story isn't your type, but thanks for not coming and dissing it all around. The first chapter "Twilight not putting up a fight" won't be around past christmas, when I plan to edit it. This was supposed to be a troll/fun fic, but it didn't turn out that way...
Thanks for the input though.
1728512
Hey, I'm always here to bounce ideas off of, if that's what you're looking for. Its a nice idea for a fic.
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I can agree with that all the way.
Sometimes I'll have read something, and then need to read it again when the next chapter comes out.
1728151
Heh, I aim to please...
While still having fun myself, of course. No point in doing something you don't enjoy.
1728151
Heh, I aim to please...
While still having fun myself, of course. No point in doing something you don't enjoy.
1728560 thank you sir i just posted the fifth chapter. I going to proof read the last chapter soon until then would you do me the honor of reading my story and criticizing it. You know tell what i should change and stuff like that.
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I'll get around to it soon. Promise. If you don't hear from me soon-ish, pop me a PM, k?
1728603 PM?
1728603 Whats a PM? post marker maybe idk i'll just remind you in a few days if you don't get back to me.
1728512
It's on fanfiction and it's not a MGS fic. It's actually a backstory to a upcoming fic by friend of mine named Spirit9871 which is based on the ultra-violent internet series Madness Combat (which, oddly enough, has a couple really good crossover fics on here). You should check out the the MC series it's actually really good and you would need to watch at least ep. 1-4 for my fic to make sense. You can find it on Newgrounds.com
1728691 dude i know about madness that guys is always kicking that weird clown's but.