''Argh...'' I groan lightly. Jesus Christ, I have a splitting headache... Wait, what. Who's Jesus Christ? For that matter, who am I? Where am I? Sitting up with a grunt, I open my eyes, looking up at the cloudy blue sky, I then stand up and look around surrounded by a ton of trees. Trees, trees, and, what’s this? More trees. Great. I’m stuck in the middle of this forest and I have no idea where I am or heck, even who I am. What the hell is going on? I look to my right and I see a flowing river, heh, I feel thirsty. I begin to walk over to the river and trip over something and fall face first onto the ground. what the? I stand back up and look to see whatever I tripped over. It was... some sort of black stick thing. I bent down and picked it up, heh, it had a handle and some sort of... trigger. Violent images flashed through my mind. I shook my head and looked back down at the ground, beside the black stick thing was a jungle camo backpack. heh, funny i still remember what a backpack is. Well, no time to sort through it. I then slip the backpack and the stick thing onto my back and move towards the river. When I reached the river I bent down to look at my reflection in the water. I looked normal I guess... I wore some sort of sleeveless green uniform with a Bandoleer slung over my chest, and I wore a helmet with leaves glued onto it. What was I? I splash some water on my face and stand back up and walk in some random direction. What now?? What is my purpose here? Why do I still remember what a bandoleer is? Wait... things are starting to come to me. The black stick thing, the bandoleer, the helmet, the big scar on my face. Was I... A soldier? Jesus... this is really boggling my mind... Argh! this headache is getting worse!
*somewhere else in the everfree forest*
“Wow, even in the day time this place feels creepy, “ Sweetie Belle said as she eyed the canopy above them.
Applebloom, who was used to the forest with her ventures to Zecora’s hut, confidently led the way to the grove. Though she too felt something in the forest was wrong. “I-it ain’t so bad, I ain’t scared.” She hesitantly said.
“Y-yeah, just a forest is all. Nothin’ scary about that.” Scootaloo cautious said as she nervously glanced at the forest around them.
“Look there’s the grove!” Applebloom cried out as she rushed ahead. Her two friends quickly caught up and rushed into the quiet grassy cove. Just in front of them stood the Zap Apple tree that stood out against any other with its ugly colored bark and gnarled branches.
Its arms were bare, the tree for all accounts looked like it was dead.
The three little ponies groaned in disappointment upon seeing that not even a spark had been made by the tree.
“Ah shucks, maybe we’re still too early?” Applebloom sighed and kicked at the short grass at her feet.
“Applebloom! What in tarnation are y’all three doing out here!” A cry from behind them shocked the three into the air.
The three turned to see Applejack run into the grove, a very unhappy look was on her face. Applebloom tried to speak but her sister was quick to cut her off. “Now come on girls, we’ll talk about this back at the farm, it ain’t safe out here!”
Applebloom shrank away and Sweetie Belle and Scootaloo found a strong interest in the dirt in front of their hooves, “We’re sorry Applejack,” Applebloom said, “We just wanted to see if the Zap Apples were really coming but the tree-“
She was cut off by the sound of twigs snapping and footsteps, something was moving towards them.
''Applejack? Wha-whats that?'' Applebloom asked her sister nervously
''It could be a monster!'' Scootaloo exclaimed
''Y'all get behind me.'' The orange cowpony said as she eyed a clearing the dark forest. Something was moving towards them, the thing was... bipedal and wore green clothes, and a green colored helmet, this looked like the monkey Fluttershy had showed her once, but this wasn't a monkey, it stood straight, it had a face capable of emotions, and it wore clothes!. The thing stopped a few feet in front of them and just stared at them, with a confused look on its face.
''Don't come any closer ya hear!'' Applejack yelled backing up along with the three little fillies.
''Don't... come... any... closer.'' The thing repeated
''Um... Mah names Applejack.''
''My... names... Applejack.'' The thing repeated. The cutie mark crusaders all giggled.
''What the hay is so funny?'' Applejack asked them, a bit annoyed
''That thing is repeating everything you say! Kinda like that parrot that Fluttershy once showed us.'' Sweetie belle said chuckling
''Um... what in tarnation are you?'' Applejack asked bravely approaching the bipedal creature.
''I... I... I... Don't.... Remember.'' It said
Applejack felt sorry for the creature, it talked, so that meant it was intelligent. But it was so... confused and lost. It didn't seem to remember anything about itself.
''Um... would you like to come with us? I have a friend who might be able to help you.''
''Oka... Okay...'' The thing said
''Just follow us... we'll get you some place safe and sound, out of this forest.'' Applejack said trotting away, the thing followed them, and was asked numerous questions by the cutie mark crusaders.
''Are you an alien?'' Scootaloo asked the creature, staying close to Applejack
''Um... I think so.'' It replied
''Whats yer name?'' Applebloom asked
''I don't remember.'' It replied
''Why do you wear that outfit?'' Sweetie belle asked
''I don't remember.'' It replied with the same answer
''Do you remember anything at all?'' Scootaloo asked
''Um... no... nothing.'' It replied
*A few minutes and several questions later*
''Ah ha, we're almost there!'' Applejack said happily
''Here?'' The thing asked
''Fluttershy's cottage.'' Sweetie belle answered
''Fluttershy?''
''Yup, she knows everything about animals, maybe she can tell us what you are.'' Applejack said
''Um... OK.''
*Knock Knock Knock Knock*
''Fluttershy? are you there?'' Applejack called knocking on the door, a small white bunny answered the knocking.
''oh, um, howdy angel, is Fluttershy here?'' The bunny referred to as angel nodded his head no
''Um, Ok, where is she?'' Angel grabbed a nearby book and pointed at it, then pointed in a direction towards ponyville.
''Twilight's library?'' Angel nodded his head yes
''Um... Who's Twilight?'' The thing asked
''A friend of mine, she runs the library in ponyville.'' Applejack replied
''Ponyville?'' The thing asked ''What? Is that where i am?''
''Um, yeah, Ponyville.'' Applejack replied, a bunch of thoughts running through her mind.
''Well, I guess we're going to Twilight's.'' Applebloom said
''Um...Sure... I guess ...'' The thing muttered. Jesus... Talking ponies?? Ugh... whats going on? I don't remember much but I do remember one thing, ponies aren't supposed to talk, still, these ponies are really nice. Off to Ponyville I guess, meet everyone there. or everypony. Whatever they say here.
good good now update 50 chapters within the next week
This seems a lot like the Star Trek: The Next Generation season 7 episode 16 'Thine Own Self'. Apart from forgetting to capitalize some I's, it seems interesting... Faved.
I suppose that it's... readable at the moment. Just don't expect a flood of upvotes, I'm actually surprised at how you already got six upvotes, no downvotes.
1485098 lol yes moar ...
I'm the main character and I will remember the face punch execution from Gears of War 2
and execute it upon many a Pony face. *Thwack* *SMACK* *SMACK*
1485098 That probably isn't gonna happen, this is sorta a side story I work on if I don't feel like working on my other one. Well, people seem to like this one better so I guess I'll work on it a little harder.
1485420 That episode actually inspired this story. Only difference is hes not a star fleet officer or an android.
It's a little too early to tell, not much has happened so far and there's Lyra as one of the characters so this deserves a watch.
However, there's a huge, glaring plot hole in this story. The memory loss. You've gone the Hollywood route of him not knowing anything including for some reason who Jesus Christ is as well as what a rifle is. Amnesia does not work that way. At best he'd forget his identity and his history but wouldn't forget things like how to speak, how to walk or dress himself or the names of objects. The part where he's repeating what Applejack says is a little far fetched.
But yeah, I want to see what Lyra says about the human.
Edit: I take it all back. After having read your plagiarism of "Xenophilia" starting in chapter 6 of "Life of Vayhe", you don't deserve a watch. Taking a concept is one thing, using an idea is okay but lifting whole passages and changing a word here and there just shows you're too lazy and untalented to write your own stuff.
1485754 Looks interesting, but I hope you don't decide to rip off the entire plot of "Thine Own Self", as I always felt it was one of The Next Generation's weaker episodes...
I shall see how this continues.
And see what your other story is about
Seems decent, allthough I think you should fix up the formatting later. 'Tis no big issue though.
Awaiting further releases.
Please, more
Let me guess, the human is a soldier?
Judging by the cover art... He's a Vietnam soldier?
1485098 OK, never mind, I am going to be working on this a lot. I've been getting a lot of criticism on my other story, so I took it down. So now I just have this story to focus on. Can't rush perfection I guess... *Sighs*
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Getting a lot of criticism because you were f*cking plagiarising from Xenophillia and poorly at that!
I just wish I had gotten some screenshots which would have gotten you banninated.
1488878 Ugh... Don't you have something better to do besides commenting on all my stuff? If you don't like it, don't read it and go read something you enjoy.
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I'm just pointing out to everybody here that you're a plagiarist. Did you honestly think you could get away with it? Not only was the style completely different from your own but it was riddled with errors when you tried to redo it for yourself. And the worst part of this is, you act like it's not a big deal.
I think you're safe though. I doubt anybody would want to plagiarise your work.
1488967 Ugh... I'm done arguing with you.
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Who's arguing? I just want to know why you thought you could get away with it?
Keep it up man!
lol
mysterious amnesiac human in Equestria plot
random image of unknown human soldier for cover art
single 1200 word chapter
author is a plagiarist
author gets butthurt when this is pointed out
author deletes shit to cover his tracks
people getting butthurt about plagiarism
people raging on comments
ahahahaha
win
Also, this story is kind of mediocre. Just saying. It hits like 50% of all cliches in the MLP fandom. Just saying.
Not bad....not great either...
I give this 3/5 Pinkie Pies