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This story is a sequel to My Little Teelo
Teelo thought her adventure in Equestria was a one-time thing. Discord defeated, world saved, mission accomplished, right? But what if Discord was inadvertently protecting Equestria from something worse?
This is a "human goes to Equestria" story. It takes place not quite one year after My Little Teelo.
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Sweet! Sequel! So more Irish mythology being thrown in, and the Gaelic words added as well... well nothing wrong with that, I tend to throw in one or two words of Welsh into my stuff. (The Original language of the Earth Ponies, and of the Sisters).
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Actually, Tisina is speaking Macedonian, it has that nice vicious sound to it for English speakers. Foreshadowing, don't you know...
Roughly translated (since Macedonian doesn't use the English alphabet so it's transliterated) her first comment was "The wrong shall be made right" and the second comment was "I have found you".
The trolls are nordic, you'll see them using Norwegian words here and there. With a bit of linguistic drift... (laughing)
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Still not pulling a Star Trek and have every single race speak English/Equestrian is a nice touch. I guessed the Trolls were nordic with some of the funky letters they were using. With some of the accent marks you used with Tisina I guess I can see a language that doesn't use the Latin alphabet, and yeah I may have been mangling the pronunciation but you are correct.
Well frak... we're dealing with an AntiDiscord... something that goes beyond Harmony it seems, Order pure and simple.
So in a sense I was right, Tišina is Order. I know it the probably was unintentional but I like how you phrased how her magic acts, almost crystalline, after all no crystal is truly orderly and perfect.
Good Celestia is going to try to save her self, and Luna is doing well. Now Teelo's family's reaction to Sun Hammer is going to be interesting to watch
Well... the reunion is certainly less chaotic than I thought it would have been. But still my expectations have been realized, and to anyone thinking that Elaine is being a selfish bitch please don't she is trying to protect her teenage daughter and already nearly lost her once before.
With Clan O'Gara I'm seeing parallels between them and my own headcanon Everfree Clan, not much but I see something
Equestria is only dangerous if you live near or around Ponyville and Canterlot.
So lets see... we have teenage girl who is a scion of a mythical clan and all around badass, a former Green Beret with possible PTSD who may be a badass, a pegasister PI with an unknown level of badassery, and the Equestrian living embodiment of badassery (other than Celestia) in Equestria to save the world... Little Miss Order has now idea who she is fraking with.
Damn... Little Miss Order is really underestimating these lowly mortals. Celestia broke free and made it home, and if she wasn't so damn exhausted I'm sure she would be cursing from the deepest of the Nine Hells to Elysium about what has happened. And when she finds out that a entire village of her little ponies have been killed... oh heads will roll
Diarchs not monarchs, and Nightmare Moon not wanting to end the world? What did she think would happen during Night Eternal? That there would have been no ecological collapse?
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Actually, to answer your question would be to provide a spoiler, so wait and see...
Magic is heresy? Oh boy...
Err... Celestia has a point about Pinkie, Cupcakes is a true bastardazation of her character and all, at least don't tell her what is seems most bronies think of the princess
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Evelyn isn't stupid, CP.
She's already dancing around the edge of a number of delicate issues, she certainly won't tell the Princess about Trollestia...
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Trollestia is the least of my worries, it's the other two bastardizations of Celestia's character I'm worried about
Bevis? So which one is Butthead?
I'm just thinking on how this would play out in my headcanon... though the end would be the same, Little miss Order is screwed
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Bevis is actually a perfectly good Norweigan name. That cartoon, I fear, has much to answer for to the Bevises of the world. BTW, the Snoskred's full name, Bevis Mot Lyn, translates to "Lightning-Proof". As in immune to lightning...
As for Little Miss Order, well, it's never that simple, now is it?
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Sorry... I don't know Norwegian names, I really shouldn't have made the joke. But with how I've seen Trolls done in fiction, yeah... let's say it's surprising to see them speak in complete sentences.
Lightning-proof or not, a magical plasma bolt from a pissed off Alicorn is nothing to shake a stick at.
What? Having the four eldest gods, second only to the All-Father in power, pissed off at you isn't enough?
Oh dear... she is up to something.
Royal Organizer? I suppose that sounds better than Secretary or Receptionist, but not as good as Chief-of-Staff. *snort* Sorry one of my OCs is laughing at Pinstripe
So... that is an interesting explanation on how Celestia and Luna can raise and lower the Sun and Moon while keeping with a Heliocentric solar system... my brain still hurts though. Little Miss Order is out of her bloody mind isn't she... God I didn't think there would have been anyone nuttier than Discord
Oh dear... the humans are plotting...
Oh Frak... Oh Epona and Gaea...that is what you have been warning about? Pinkie...Pinkie just... damn, Tišina is boned, they may have had mercy on Discord but not on her... not on her.
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It's never simple. And here's something to ponder until the next chapter becomes available. That pony? She said it herself.
She isn't Pinkie...
Pleasant dreams...
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Of course it isn't, but still
Yet she is... to be honest I'm not sure what's scarier, the little voice in Pinkie's head taking over and going apeshit on Tišina... or Celestia going full power Sol Invictus on Tišina...
Heh, I bet her parties are the kind where FBI profilers and forensic teams would be called to examine the aftermath. Such fun!
... ok I think I may have wet my self... yeah Cerise is scarier.
I do so love Cerise. She's just a pony shaped bundle of creepy fun.
How do can I let my child go into danger, Princess? <-- drop the do, perhaps?
Enjoyable chapter :)
This story was utterly marvelous.I am very impressed as I thought that your previous story couldn't be topped.I was very surprised how you shifted the focus on and off Teelo so naturally I hardly noticed.Also I love how educational your stories are.I learned a lot of new stuff.I also love how dependable you are as there are not many writers as dedicated as you.I would wager that you had this whole story planned out and merely copied it,rather fast too I might add.I don't wish to put any pressure on you as your prudence is reward enough for us as readers.But I sincerely hope you continue this series and I willingly give any help or info I can offer.Although it probably isn't nessessary if you last 2 stories are anything to go by.Good luck with all your future endeavors.
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Actually, I was just reposting my stories from FanFic.net. Sorry to disappoint you, but these will be my only pony stories for a while, and the third in the series would be troll-centric because Teelo will be in Hejm learning about the trolls.
I'm glad you found the stories educational, I put a lot of effort into researching them, I try to keep everything accurate and I'm happy a reader thinks I succeeded.
If the bug bites me again I may write a story about some of the backstory ponies, I'm particularly fond of Derpy at the moment, although Lyra and Bon-Bon are also possibilities. Or perhaps a budding relationship between Faerie Mist and Sun Hammer?
Thanks to everyone who enjoyed reading my stories enough to comment on them!
Yeah... This and it's prequel was one of the first things I read after becoming a brony/pegasister. I really enjoyed this, and drove myself to the point of exhaustion, staying up while reading it.
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Why thank you! There's no greater compliment a reader can give than not being able to put down a story. I'm very happy I could write a story someone would enjoy that much.
I quite enjoyed this story than most that i have read in the past. And I am looking forward to more stories to this story line.
Ok what did John say? I've tried Google translate but it comes out as nonsense
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Is minic a bhain dealg beag braon literally translates as "It is often (a) small thorn drew blood."
A more colloquial translation is "It is often the smallest thorn that draws blood" meaning the most innocent-seeming thing can often be the most dangerous.
The rest of the conversation makes it very clear what John is refering to as having "drawn blood".
It's an old Irish proverb.
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Proverb... should have figured, that's what Google said it was
And I though Tirek the Abomination was an egotistical jackass...
Oh great... Lovecraftain monster... wait I know how to fight them... let me slip into another universe and get some god-killing mecha...God is in his heaven because he's afraid of our superior firepower
That... was very anticlimactic... though the perfect fact for Little Miss Order, turn to stone never changing
Yeep! The nastiest version of the concept of Order Ive seen; All the order and stillness of a cemetary...
Sweet... mother... Epona...
You actually SCARED me with Pinkamina, and it rings true with the peeks around the edges you see in the show...
Heh! My little Teelo was one of the first pony fanfics I've ever read! And I loved it! I read it a year or two ago on fanfiction.net! I was so thrilled with Teelo (personally I think Teagan sounds awesome of a name) that I wondered if you the author self-inserted yourself in the story. I still wonder too
Is Teelo based off on you?
Ahahahahahahahahah! This Sun Hammer was hillarious in the first story and he's hilarious now! Scottish people speaking English sound the silliest in the whole world!
Hhahahahahaahah! Imagined the face of Teelo's mom at the end! XD
Man that bitch Tishina! (btw saw it was Slovenian but we have the same word in Bulgarian and it means the same thing - Silence) I'd sure like to go Super Saiyan two on her and unleash a load of super-powerful butt-whoop and energy blasts!gifsoup.com/webroot/animatedgifs1/3972532_o.gif
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Oh, no. :) I do have red hair (and thus am quite familiar with the failings of gingers) but Teelo was actually based on (or at least inspired by) TLOSpyroGirl of FanFiction.Net, who at the time was not a pegasister and didn't see the joy that is MLP. She has since joined the herd.
Besides, I'm male. (laughing)
As for Tisina, the name is Macedonian, not Slovenian, but it appears the Slavic languages share a great deal of vocabulary, her name does indeed mean Silence and while I can't claim credit for her invention (that was GoldenGriffiness) I did mould her personality quite a bit from the original creation. She is, after all, an Elder God (ala Lovecraft) who abandoned the Place Beyond The Veil for a more orderly existence here. The fact Discord is her brother (and *also* an Elder God) should give everyone pause...
Glad you enjoyed the stories and thanks for the comment, I always appreciate them!
step 1: get crush....step 2: have crush increase weight.....step 3: drop crush from top of the hole and let gravity make it a kill drop on creature......
Cuddles
I really enjoyed these....you had a great scale for her final act of heroism in the 1st one and this proved to be a great follow-up. Hoping this "series" continues.
Good thing they didn't mention radiation sickness. (Radiation rendering the body unable to replace dead cells leaving the poor sod to rot like a living corpse,) mentioning that would probably have been a little to much.