I actually wrote this last Halloween, and posted it on fanfiction.net, but to be blunt, it was REALLY rushed compared to this version. I wrote the original on a whim, I didn't expand on it and included a mention of Discord that honestly, looking back on it, didn't make much sense. Thus, the whole thing with the Nightmare Night campfire stories and such wasn't in the original version, but I am MUCH more pleased with this one, even if it is 2000 or so words longer. I had wanted to get it out before Nightmare Night, but alas, I did not complete the revision in time. *sigh*

It was originally a one-shot - hence the length of the first chapter - but now I have decided to make it into a full-fledged story after getting a sequel suggestion/

Also....
SPOILER for those who like looking at the comments and haven't read the story yet:
If those last few lines with Scootaloo at the end of the first chapter sounded like a line from the Doctor Who episode "The Time of Angels", that was completely intentional. The part it's based off of was this exchange:
The Doctor: Bob, keep running but tell me, how did you escape?
Bob: I didn't escape sir. The angels killed me too. They broke my neck.

Now, off to finish the next chapter of Pages of Harmony before Season 3 starts!

Why...?

Welp, I enjoyed it and think you have quite a bit of writing potential there, that being said I'm no master at writing myself, so I can't be so sure. Good job at the story and good luck at any more!

Also, when does Season 3 start? I'll probably poke around to get a date soon but as far as I know it comes out sometime in November, but that's about it.

new story

1564190 Why you ask? Because I wanted to do a creepy Halloween-type story, and I also like Story of the Blanks and Super Filly Adventure.
Besides, Pages of Harmony is way worse than this.

1564330 Glad you enjoyed it! And Season 3 actually comes out on the 10th, this coming Saturday! CAN'T WAIT!!

1564377 yup, just a freaky not-so-little one-shot! though I may end up doing a prequel kind of thing involving Scootaloo's "camp".

1564407 prequel how about a sequel with twi trying to have Celestia fix her or something.

1565644 Hmmm... not exactly sure how Celestia would fight against a bunch of demon ponies.... although,maybe Twilight could be struggling into Bloody-Hoof tendancies now that she's been killed and transmuted, but she tries to stop it herself though Scootaloo tries to convince her to just submit to it, and... yeah///

1565673 So sequel? this is just soo fantastarific.

1565728 I almost feel like it could be just a continuation of this one-shot in a way, though I could just hav it be a separate story as well... then with the whole thing with Scootaloo I could possibly work in the "What she went through at camp" thing in flashbacks of a sort - that way it wouldn't be just Twilight's story, but Scootaloo's as well. And I don't seem to see too many fics where Twilight and Scootaloo are the primary characters.

dayum if you do that this will be more awesome than even maladictum insania. i have to hand it to you that is some fancy story swinging your throwing around there. cheers

1565811 Wow, you really think a sequel would be that good? Not really sure what Maladictum Insania is, but thanks!
You know, on second-thought though, maybe I could just make this not a one-shot and make it a full-fleged story, rather than just having a sequel to the one-shot... I dunno...

1566968 that would be just as good

Do eet

1567255 I'll have to edit the description of course though, and probably have Apple Bloom out of the main character list since it's mainly about Twilight and Scootaloo... then again, the Blanks could make a reappearance... then again I could have the thing be a sequel and mention that it was a sequel, but then be clear enough so it wouldn't be absolutely required to understand the bigger story... Ugh... CAN'T CHOOSE!

1567750 just add on to this story and make it a full fledged story rather than wasting your time trying to make it a sequel you even have it set up to continue.

1567786 Good point.
... DANGIT, my attempted resolve to only work on three multi-chaptered fics at a time has been undermined! ... and yet I am somehow okay with that in this case!
Hey, maybe you could be my go-to person for ideas for this considering you gave me the idea to expand on it in the first place.

1568172 thanks I'll try to give you good ideas and advice, i've been helping a few of my other favorite writers as well.
o and as for the resolve... well. I win. i'll be salivating in wait for your next update for this story. till then.
cheers

1568425 Thanks for your offer to help!
And I shall be updating a few of my other multi-chaptered fics first (or all of them, but especially Pages of Harmony) before I do chapter 2 of this one... but next chapter will involve more Scootaloo.

THAT'S OKAY, I WASN'T PLANNING ON SLEEPING ANYWAY

Loved this, can't wait to read more! Also, more evil Scootaloo would be appreciated

1621860 Glad to hear you loved it! And yes, there will be more Scootaloo... lots more evil Scootaloo. Which I think is gonna be fun considering the fact that I don't think there are that many Evil!Scootaloo fics.

Though maybe I should give the story a name change - I found out there's a story called Cold-Blooded Twilight, and Scootaloo's now a secondary character since I expanded on my original one-shot, so...

Nice!
Thumbed and favourited to watch. I'm curious as to where this will go.
You've got quite a lot of glaring typos throughout the chapter, though.

Having taken off their Nightmare Night costumes so that there was less of a rish of burning

Apple Bloom adopted a slightly more mature town to her voice

Ah, and I know there are others, but it takes a while to read this chapter, and I don't really have time right now. Sorry. (Though if you wanted a proofreader to catch future errors, I can do that.)

I have to say though, as much as I enjoyed reading this - your writing style kept me engaged and I didn't skim over even a little of your story - my suspension of disbelief was ruined when Twilight continuously had nightmares and sleepwalked all night. It was implied that this was quite a few times.
First off, it had to take her awhile to fall asleep, walk to the Everfree, wake up, walk home and get back into bed, so I wouldn't think she'd be able to do this too many times during the night.
Secondly, both Twilight and her friends' reaction to the sleepwalking part of the nightmare (they ignored it completely) was incredibly unbelievable. Sleepwalking is serious. Especially since it kept happening - a sign that she needs to do something about it - and that she was heading towards the Everfree forest - which is dangerous even during the day, so sleepwalking in that direction should be worrying for more reasons than just scary stories.
There was some missed opportunity for some scenes of real concern from her friends there.
But, like I said, I enjoyed this story nonetheless. Keep it up

1643699 Can't believe I didn't see this comment before - must have somehow missed it in the notifications. But glad you like it so far, and thanks for pointing out the typos.

As for the other stuf.... yeeaahh, this was originally an expansion from a kind of hastily-put-together one-shot I did during Halloween of last year, so then this year I decided to add stuff to it and post it here. However, I guess there was stuff I kind of left and didn't expand on when I should have, my bad...

Just goes to show that trying to rush in a spur-of-the-moment decision to improve a less-than-stellar fanfic wasn't exactly the best course of action. I'll go back and try to fix that up a bit before I post the next chapter.

I am awed by your work! Awed I say! This is phenomenal, I couldn't stop reading once I got started! Well done!

1693469 Aw, thanks! Hopefully I'll get the second chapter up soon-ish.

I like this, hope you continue it soon

2102512 Don't worry, I plan to! :)

2102560 yay

2102560

This news makes my dick ROCK HARD!!! err... I mean, makes me very, very happy.

Seriously, though, I actually found this story before I became a member of fimfiction. After I signed up, I found I couldn't remember the name. So, I stumble upon it, have a nice re-reading, and when I reach the bottom, see this glorious nugget of news!

The story is nicely creepy, and I like how you combined the story of the blanks and the blank flank ending from SFA. Scoots being a Bloody Hoof is an interesting twist, and I really am looking forward to where this story goes.

2125067 Going over it again and considering the direction the fic will be going, I believe I'll have to be bumping it up to a Mature rating...

And then Twilight was a Zombie. Muahahaha!

2499565 Pretty much!

Convert the non-believer

This is scary...

Shit. Now I'm going to be wanting more chapters for this. >.< I'm already dying to see the next PoH chapter.
I'm killing myself, here!

As if gripped by invisible hands, the skins

As if gripped by invisible hands.
invisible hands
hands

ONE OF US!
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YOU CAN'T ESCAPE!
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