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WingedAngel


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Rarity tells a tale. A tale of how the most perfect woman in her eyes had gone from a bully to a the object of Rarity's desires to that woman asking her out.

Of course, this is Rarity, so she may have gone a bit romantic about the tale.

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Comments ( 2 )

This is a cute little bit of romance fluff, and it feels like you have Rarity's voice down pretty well here. Rarity's story is quite sweet and well-done. Once we get to the end, the dialogue and third-person narration could use a bit of refining, but overall this is a strong first effort, and I hope you keep writing!

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Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked and I will look to improve on the next story.

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