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Being alone... Will it make you insane? Or are you already insane?
Will a young small town pony experience being alone? Forever...
Erin Star, That exact young pony, will find out.
First this is my first attempt at a longer work of fanfiction, And second, this is an OC fic, I just couldn't find any regular character suitable for this work.
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I see quality writing here. I'd love to see where this goes.
not bad ... maybe you could increase the pace a bit, but otherwise pretty good
Eeenteresting . . .
Don't worry about using an OC; better an OC that fits than a canon character that doesn't.
"Erin/Aaron" seems like an unusual name for a pony, but if we have Donut Joe, I guess it's not bad.
A couple of minor typos ("ill" for "will," "Three" unnecessarily capitalized, and one or two others), but overall, very good.
1390960 Sorry about the typos, I do this without a proofreader so if I don't slap some sense into myself once in a while than nobody else can.
I am quite happy to see the positive comments because for some reason, I was thinking my writing skill went downhill in the time between my first Fic and this one.
1390945 I don't even know if i could make this fast paced... It isn't some sort of super-action-death-drama that will have you on the edge of your seat.( Or Desk... Couch, Floor, Bed, Etc)
I am not certain what exactly to call it... Adventure, sort of. Action, not really. Comedy, I honestly don't know what could possibly be funny about going insane. It is more of a "Thinkin Fic" And that is probably the best way I could describe this catastrophe of brain mush and words.
1421331 ohh., believe me, if I want I can go to mindless-fast-paced-action-of-death-and-destruction in no time. I would accept bets to go there from your story-point on
and when did I question you about your tagging of the story? I don´t remember doing that ...
Just to recall the story a bit, you´r main character is in somewhat like an Imaginary world and slowly reality breaks through to him ... jepp, already got 2 Ideas to get this to mindless action.
1423318 Ha! I can see very clearly that you thought She (not he) was already insane, and how easily it would be to get into mindless action from there. I never actually thought about it that way. But this story is something a little more different than that. (Honestly, your idea actually makes much more sense than mine does) But that wont have me just change the whole future of this fic based on somebody else's idea. Although you did help me in a way... I really hope this isn't giving away to much about the future, but... Um... I mustn't speak more, it would be too easy to give away secrets.
And I wasn't referring to any questions about tagging, I was actually referring to what i said, not you
*sniffs* you said I make sense *sniff* I don´t wanna ... *sleeps*
anyways, I was recalling the storry from memory, so I propably had added/removed minor part in my mind ... she´s not insane already? well, that killed my expectations. not that I would care. but I mean, that part with "more and mor doctors" and then the scene were everypony suddenly isn´t there anymore and the clock stopped ... meeh, watever.
1424166 ohh, also I like to se the not-so obvious version that you are obviously going to write ....
1428389 Well then.. Your wish will be granted...
If you think that this story has no grammar fails or any other problems, you can thank my proofreader, Trixie-Lulamoon-M11
They really helped out a lot!
Oh, and I hope you like this chapter
Oh boy! It's getting even better!
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That's good to hear!
1581715 Trixie is confused on why you call her 'they'. Trixie is a singular pony, was that not clear?
1593386 You could be a clone...
And you just might not know it.
More than one Trixie, hmm?
Impossible. The world simply couldn't handle it. Trixie is just too awesome.
This is a bit scary: having come too close to a precipice once upon a time, I remember feeling this discombobulated, the mind hyperactive and the soul seemingly empty.
I have to see how this turns out. Consider this faved.
1912892 Glad you liked it!
I'm glad somepony else also decided to join in on the fun. (Which would be the fun of molesting my writing with your eyeballs)